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The Metal Mallet
post Jul 6 2006, 12:52 AM
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Ooooo, some of Revan's mysterious background is revealed making him even more mysterious!

Amazing! Continue!


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post Jul 11 2006, 03:22 AM
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Well here's an update, sorry it took so long.

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Chapter 1/part 4:Greetings brother...

Three figures in similar armor were gathered in a small clearing speaking in a language none in Tamriel knew, let alone understood, when a bolt of energy struck a fallen tree setting it ablaze near them and shattered the otherwise serene atmoshere. The three beings sped off into the brush, leaping treebranch to treebranch, as several more blasts flew past them, they all halted in another clearing in front of a figure in bulky golden armor....

Revan shuddered he was marshaling his past and future on a treebranch,where had this vision come from?
It was a memory..... but it wasn't his, the three armored beings had armor like his but without its red hue..... Revan didn't even know where it came from or what it was. the people in his armor had felt more like him than other Dunmer did..... so were they his ansestors? The figure in gold felt alien to him, who was it?

Something was wrong he knew someone was watching him..... That was all the warning he got before the air around Revan exploded. He was thrown off the branch by the blast, Revan hit the ground hard on his knees and as he looked up he saw a tall being in golden armor on a nearby branch.

The gold being loosed another lance of energy, Revan threw himself out of the way as the ground was ripped open where he had been. He winced when he stood on his left leg, I must have broke it when I landed, he realized coldly. The being jumped down in front of Revan,"You fallen ones are all the same",the being jeered. Oh, just you wait, Revan thought as he launched himself at the being. Time seemed to slow down as Revan's supernatural reflexes kicked in, he grabbed a piece of the beings armor;
swung around and wrapped his arms around the being's neck and pushed forward... Revan landed on the beings back and pulled on its neck.

The Being had recovered from the shock of getting thrown to the ground, and blew Revan of with a telekentic wave. "HOW DARE YOU!!", It screamed and loosed another blast of energy. Revan couldn't dodge in time, so he took the other option(other than taking a lethal blast of energy) and reached out his hands. The space between Revan's hands and the incoming energy spear became distorted, and as the spear intered the distorted area it began to spiral into Revan's cupped hands. Revan held the sphere of energy and sent it back with his power.

The lance of energy struck the being in the chest, his armor drained of its color, and he was thrown against a tree.... as all this transpired Revan blacked out...

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post Jul 11 2006, 10:05 PM
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Interesting duel between Revan and this mysterious gold figure. Hopefully we'll find out his motives...


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post Jul 12 2006, 02:36 PM
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Interesting indeed. I'll be waiting to see what happens next.


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post Jul 12 2006, 09:53 PM
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QUOTE(jack cloudy @ Jul 12 2006, 03:36 PM) *

Interesting indeed. I'll be waiting to see what happens next.

As Mr Cloudy said,........I´ll be waiting as well!


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post Jul 12 2006, 11:50 PM
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Ok guys heres a little explanation for you,

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... they all halted in a clearing in front of a bulky, golden armor....."Heretics know that I, Lord Xaries Commander of the Excecutionary Force of this world, will end your miserable lifes,"The Gold One boomed. three other beings-solders?- flanked their commander. They weiding weopons in their hands that Revan had never seen. The solders raised their weopons and the one of the Revan-like beings was torn apart by what looked like flashes of light to Revan. The other two leapt over the solders and blasted them with a series of telekentic waves, knocking the weapons out of their armored guantlets..... The battle froze and Revan saw a creature that looks like a flame atronach, but the flame was more of an aura and it was a luminesent ash-gray and there was nothing wearing the armor so it was suspended inside the flame, like it was posessed. It's mask helm served as a face and two white bars of light served as it's eyes. It walked past the frozen combatents toward him, and spoke in a womans voice,"You're no doubt confused about the beings you see in your armor and the beings that attack them,"It-she- said. Revan only nodded, mistified by the creature.

Revan could read her body-language and her 'eyes' also expressed her emotions of sadness,"These beings in armor like yours are the Dark Naryyn and your ansestors," The.... Spirit told him.

"They, and you, are not of this world, your kind came here, before the native civillized races appeared,to escape your brethren the High Naryyn," The Spirit gestured toward the gold figures and to a deep breath.

"The Naryyn were once united as one peaple, until a minority began to believe in another way of interpreting the energy that runs through all of your kinsmen's viens."

"But this was ideology was met with uproar and branded heresy, and so your race was engulfed in civil war and from that war........," She paused," emerged two races from one, The original practictioners called the 'High' Naryyn, and the heretic 'Dark' Naryyn.

"The High Naryyn cast their former brothers, down and exiled them, but as you can see some of your brothers have been hunted down."

Revan was overwelmed by this revelation, but he had to ask something of this spirit. "How come I look like the Dunmer if I am what you say?"

The Spirit answered,"When the war ended the the two sides were changed by the use of they're power in war, and your ansestores became dark-skined, and red-eyed."

"The Dunmer were cursed by their goddess Azura in the second era and now they look like you," She explained.

"If you look at the warrior you killed you'll see they were changed too and now we must part ways, but we will meet again young one."

and as she finished speaking a haze slowly blocked out the vision.....


Slowly Revan could see the forest of Valenwood again with his own eyes. He got up and tested his leg to find it had been healed magically. Probably the spirit mended it. he thought. And then he saw the body......

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post Jul 13 2006, 08:33 AM
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Interesting. Very interesting. And now I want to see that body. smile.gif


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post Jul 13 2006, 07:22 PM
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ok Jack you asked for it and you got it

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Revan came closer to the body, the chest area had been blown apart, the armor had lost it's glorious gold coloring. He took the helmet off the solder, to reveal an Altmer-like face, but the solder's ears(like Revan's) were that of humans.

Revan left the corpse there to let it rot, and walked toward a an odd presence, and found a giant tree (it wasn't just tall it was twenty-feet wide). As he circled around it he found a large piece of bark looked like it could be pushed back. Suddenly Revan heard voices approaching and scaled up the tree to the nearest branch,as he looked down he saw two more solders approach the piece of bark and enter the tree. He jumped down and entered the new gap in the tree.

The tree was devoid of illumination, but Revan was unhindered because he could see in the dark without a potion or a spell. As he countinued, Revan bent the light around him to make him invisible, he saw the solders go about their duties oblivious to the mirage-like shape in their midst.

five minutes and two levels later.......

Revan soon saw runes written on the walls and stopped to read some......... and after we were exiled we traved from planet to planet for millenia and eventually settled here. For a sort time we prospered, but 500 years after we landed we were at war with one another, many factions were patronized by a group of creatures called Deadra... Revan stopped to feel the irony of it all. that was why the deadra spared me He thought.

As he moved on he came to a small room with no floor, only a platform with a pedestle. Revan walked up to it and saw an object suspended in the shaft of light that that bathed the pedestle. The object were what looked like two small double-edged hilts carved from the tree above. He reached into the light and took the hilts, and they attached to his backpack that was made of the same alloy as his armor. As Revan turned he saw a large man-sized crystal that looked similar to the welkyd stones of the Aylieds. Revan inspected the crystal and as his hand touched it, the jem chanced from dim cerulean to bright red, and the whole room was illuminated by the runes on the walls.

And then he heard the armored boots behind him, and turned to see Lord Xaries in the doorway.

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post Jul 13 2006, 07:54 PM
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post Jul 13 2006, 11:56 PM
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The suspense strikes again!

I wonder how this showdown will go?


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post Jul 15 2006, 10:07 PM
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QUOTE(The Metal Mallet @ Jul 14 2006, 12:56 AM) *

The suspense strikes again!

I wonder how this showdown will go?

Mmmm so do I.....so do I! Very good work!


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post Jul 16 2006, 06:17 AM
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I'm to tired to update, I'll write it after I sleep in.
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post Jul 16 2006, 07:48 PM
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Trouble???....... well yes, but not the way you think..... laugh.gif

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Revan part 1/ chapter 6: Revelation

Xaries looked at the crystal, the glowing runes, and finally Revan. A grin appeared on his face,"I must thank you for activating the crystal, our scholars have had a difficult time with that relic." Revan realized, that the High Naryyn must have been studying this ruin.
"We could have use for you...", His voice trailed off.
"And what would that be?"
"You could help our archeologists search this shrine, and get reprieve in return."
Revan wieghed his options, he could fight with a small chance of sucess, or help these beings and escape later..... "Not all High Naryyn believe your kind are heretics, trust him." The disembodied voice of the spirit advised.
Revan decided he could trust the spirit....... and the spirit trusted Lord Xaries.

"Alright Xaries you have a deal," he said. Xaries appeared pleased with this and had Revan escorted to a cell area.

some time later.....

The door opened and a young High Naryyn in robes entered,"My name is Xarkum, I'm the head scholar in this shrine." "I'm Revan." Xarkum nodded,"Lord Xaries has told me that you wish to help us unlock the secrets of this shrine." "He's treated me differently then the rest of my kind," Revan muttered. "Sevro-brother- Revan, not all of us hate your race, Lord Xaries is often(and unjustly) critisized for his leniancy toward your people. He and I have lost much because we lack the severity that the council encourages, the only reason he has progressed so far is because of his skill, and popularity among his subordinates. Many of our troops are a part of the executionary force because they have families to support." Revan realized that he could understand, even sympathize, for their moral conflict.

They both walked down the corridor side-by-side, for they had began to form a brotherly bond, both took turns talking about their early lives growing up (this was the first time for Revan to share his past with another being). Soon they entered a huge chamber and Revan began to translate the runes for Xarkum and his fellow scholars.

After several hours............

Revan and Xarkum were heading to the meeting area before parting ways. From the chamber someone was screaming at the top of their lungs,"You allowed the vermin to WHAT!!!" They both stopped at the entryway to listen,"Calm yourself holy one, the council authorized that the scholars any means to acomplish their studies of th-." "The council made it absolutly CLEAR THAT STUDYING THE INFEDEL'S RELICS WAS A SECONDARY OBJECTIVE!!!" Revan caught a glimpse of the 'holy one' as Xarkum realized who the being was,"That is Norik, a 'Qesna Troc Jy Narqay'-Holy Hand of the Council their importance and authority is only surpassed by the councilers themselves. "Lord Xaries, you were [i]ordered to EXTERMINATE any infidels on sight, not take them alive for the sake of a few note-scribling scholars, I could have you executed for TREASON!!!" "I'll have your head for this HERECY!!!" As the holy one stormed out into the hallway, the holy one and Revan's eyes met through his helmet visor.......

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post Jul 16 2006, 09:02 PM
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This time I see things going less nicely, unlike the meeting between Revan and Xaries. Hopefully not too many limbs are lost...


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post Jul 18 2006, 03:47 AM
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Ok, another update everyone

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Revan part 1/ chapter 7: Family Tensions

Norik was a tall, and stately High Naryyn. The gold armor he wore was mostly for display, the pauldrons extended two feet past his shoulders, it looked impractical for melee combat. An exquisite red and gold garment appeared at his waist and ended a few inches below his knees.

But what caught Revan's attention most were the gold clad beings that flanked Norik. They were both large, probably eight feet tall, and their staffs, each two meters tip to tip and at three cintemeters thick, were thicker and longer then his. Their armor completely covered their bodies and looked like it was heavier than anything a Tamrielic armorer would dare make armor, but the bodygaurds moved as though it was as light as cloth. Both of the guards turned and followed Norik without looking back once, they must be strictly disiplined, Revan thought they weren't have as stressed as Norik about him.

Revan turned around to talk to Xarkum who had paled enough for it to appear on his sunlight gold skin."What were those two being following Norik?"

"Honor Guards, there are said to be only fifty in existence, they serve only the councilers and 'Qesna Troc Jy Narqay'."

"Have any been killed?"

"It's said that a pair's master passed away, of natural causes, and fought for entertainment in an arena; they killed several hundred challengers before an unknown character fought and killed them in an epic battle, but he died only moments later from his fatigue and great wounds. They are many times used by their masters to do his dirty work if nessesary, it is said that they can find any prey in a months time."

Revan nodded realizing the situation became more complicated by these creatures, not their master, he might 'might' escape the High Naryyn, but he couldn't hide from the honor guards. Several High Naryyn exiting the council chamber gave Revan and Xarkum only a passing glance, but a few stopped to look Revan over.

Lord Xaries was the last to exit and it appeared that Norik's screaming sessions were taxing him in mind and body. "You two should avoid Norik if at all possible, we don't need to provoke him into something rash." Xaries whispered before walking away.

Revan cound feel Xarkums great anxiety and decided to ask about it. "Sevro, what do you have to do with the 'Qesna Troc Jy Narqay' that your not telling me?"

Xarkum flinched as he realized Revan had felt his unease and guessed the rest,"Sevro I feel nervous around Norik, because............. because I'm his son."

Revan was speechless for several moments, but pulled himself together,"Is there something between xaries and Norik also?"

By now Xarkum had gained some of his composure,"They dislike each other because they were once brothers."





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post Jul 18 2006, 04:27 AM
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Drama, drama, drama. A few surprizing twists in this one, and I'm glad no limbs were lost in this post.

Continue please!


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post Jul 18 2006, 08:15 PM
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QUOTE(The Metal Mallet @ Jul 17 2006, 10:27 PM) *

Drama, drama, drama. I'm glad no limbs were lost in this post


well, that might not last long my friend
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post Jul 18 2006, 10:45 PM
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Yay....thrilling it is.....wait for more I do......woah...


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post Jul 20 2006, 10:03 PM
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Ok here's another update everyone, this is the second last chapter for part 1 of Revan's story.

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Revan part 1/chapter 7 (cont.)

in Revan's quarters........

Xarkum bade Revan farewell and thanked him for his trust and aid in their research. Revan watched him leave and felt an odd sence of regret, he knew that he had worn out his welcome. Regardless of his friendship with Xarkum, he needed to escape by tomarrow night, and he worse he didn't have a plan on how.

He layed inside of the indent of the wall that served as a 'bed', and for a long time he lay there sifting through the details of his ordeal. Suddenly Revan felt an unfamiliar presence before another 'flame atronach' thing appeared in the doorway, but this one was a male-like specimen and its flame was gold like the High Narryian armor (the armor was also different, more bulky).

"Lord Xaries, my master, wishes to hold confrence with you," It (well he) murmered in a deep voice, gestured to follow. Revan didn't see any reason to not listen to it, and strode after him. It lead Revan to the confrence room, and Xarkum, his uncle, (to Revan's displeasure) Norik, and several other High Naryyn (mostly warriors) were in attendence.

Revan approached Xaries, Norik, and Xarkum who were in the podium in the center of the chamber; both turned and spotted him. "Good that you've arrived, we've been discussing your situation and," Xaries indicated Norik beside him," it has been decided that an 'honor duel' will take place to help resolve the dispute." Revan noticed distractedly that Norik was giving him a look of digust looking of disgust, and that Xarkum was again accomplishing the difficult task of causing paleness appear on his golden complexion. Revan didn't need to ask what an 'honor duel' emplied, he had a good guess. Lord Xaries seemed to mirror his lack of enthusiasm, while Xaries' brother appeared to be looking forward to the duel,"You will fight Norik's honor guards." Then Norik yelled what Revan wished he wasn't to say,"and it will be a fight to the death!"

The crowd appeared to have conflicting views on the verdict, but they all shuddered as the to shiny-gold guardians entered the large arena-like chamber. The guards themselves didn't display any anticipation or reluctance as they chittered to each other in some odd tongue, the 'arena' chamber was cavernous but it was well lit. As Revan stode into the stadium he saw the three beings in the 'leader' box of the stands, Xaries was the liegelord of the High Naryyian warriors, Norik was the representative of the council, and Xarkum was the lead scholar.

A person rose from the crowd an spoke as the announcer, but his voice was not audible to the three armored combatants, particularly to the Dark Naryyn that the entire crowd believed was doomed, condemmed to death for past crimes that he nor his ancestors truly commited.

Revan was tense as he watched the twin honor guards approach in a most coordinated fashion, one on the left, one on the right, bothe spreading out killer staffs at the ready. As they closed in he felt the warm caress of the spirit banish his self doubt,"The artifacts you found on the pedestle were made for such adverseries, use their great power to fight back!" the spirit counseled him. He slowly reached for the two hilts and his power (not magic, not this time) flowed from his hands to the duel wooden hilts. Revan heard the miracle before he opened his eyes and saw it himself; the hilts had projected his energy and shaped it as the blade edges of two wakisashis.

The crowd gasped and the two armor-clad enforcers halted and hissed at the appearence of these glowing energy swords. Revan was also surprised not by the blades themselves but his new hieghtened perception of the immediate area around him. He felt the agitation of the honor guards, and the outrage of their master; he felt the surprise of Xarkum and the other non-veteren warriors, but he felt the surprise and recognition of Lord Xaries, the veterens among the solders, and the honor guards. The blades were still as light as the had been originally; they were so light that the concern of balance didn't even apply. Revan and the honor guards knew that the fight had turned from being hopeless to just being difficult.




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post Jul 20 2006, 10:15 PM
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Oooooo, I expect a good duel Revan, don't disappoint us now. No pressure I swear! tongue.gif

Maybe now some limbs will be lost.... *crosses fingers hoping so*


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