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Fiach |
Dec 9 2012, 08:27 PM
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Evoker
Joined: 9-February 10
From: Eire
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Ooo I like how this story is starting to turn out, some interesting intrigue between the sons of Hircine and Bal :3 I wonder what they're fighting over... You have a pretty solid standard in your prose, and your dialogue does lend a lot to the characters, the only fault I can see is that I find who is saying what a bit confusing.. adding something as simple as 'whispered Rex' or 'said the Breton' would lend itself great to enhancing the story Great work with this! Kudos with the regular updates, shall be following this
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Lycanthropic-Legend |
Dec 9 2012, 09:19 PM
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Agent
Joined: 30-June 12
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As a big fan of werewolves, I have to say I am loving this story. It has action and humor written all over it! And a good interesting, story, too. All of the nits were practically said and mentioned by other members, so I can't comment on those. But I love it. If you need any help on lore regarding Elder Scrolls werewolves, I am most happy to help.
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"The speed and strength of the beast. The thrill of the hunt. The triumph of the kill. This is our purpose, our way of life."-Majni.
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King Of Beasts |
Dec 11 2012, 05:41 AM
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Ancient
Joined: 15-November 12
From: Imperial City,Cyrodiil
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Fiach: thanks for reading. I'm Glad to know you are enjoying the story It's my first fanfic, so it's probably going to start out a bit confusing, but it should be easier to understand as I move along in the chapters. Also, I'll work on making the dialogue less confusing, while not being to repetitive. Lycanthropic-Legend: Thanks for reading my story and glad you are enjoying it. Honestly, I like weaving my own lore into the story, but I would appreciate some of the lore you know on the werewolves of the elder scrolls universe, it would be quite helpful. Acadian: I gotta say, I really enjoyed writing the argument between the vampires. Hastrel can be a real pain in the neck. He disagrees with everything anyone says, unless it's the same opinion as his. He's also quite immature, and tends to whine excessively. Everyone who is involved in being around him will most likely have an extreme migraine by the time he is out of there life. mALX: thanks for the kind words! And about the screenshots: sometimes it's hard finding them, especially when the character is one that I made up and I can't use an in-game screenshot. It's fun looking for them though, and for some reason, I feel every new character introduced into the story should have a screenshot to go along with them. ( I'm horrible at describing people)
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King Of Beasts |
Dec 13 2012, 12:15 AM
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Ancient
Joined: 15-November 12
From: Imperial City,Cyrodiil
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QUOTE(mALX @ Dec 11 2012, 02:14 PM) *
Cattle prod ...SPEW!!!! ROFL !!!! Hastrel and Jakben over the wine had me dying laughing! LOVED this !!!! Once again your dialogue has rocked this chapter! Now Seridur and Vicente ... I am LOVING this story!!! Awesome Write!
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Thanks! I enjoy writing the story, and I'm glad you like it. If you have any advice you want to share feel free to share it, because I need it, and it would be a big help.
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mALX |
Dec 14 2012, 06:59 PM
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Ancient
Joined: 14-March 10
From: Cyrodiil, the Wastelands, and BFE TN
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QUOTE " Stop dying on the floor lad! One of us has to climb up there to get the key."
ROFL!!! I will try to keep up with your story while I am out of town, but all depends on what is going on here whether I can or not - just know I will catch up when I get home or whenever possible before then. If your readership is dropping, you may think about slowing down posting a bit and give people time to read before posting the next chapter. I usually post 1 chapter every 4 -5 days (about once per week), and a good chapter length is between 1,000-2,000 words per chapter. That keeps readers from getting burned out, it is important to keep your reader's comfort in mind with your posting schedule.
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