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A DEAD MAN'S TALE, the story of a dying man |
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Kiln |
May 23 2006, 03:48 AM
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Forum Bard
Joined: 22-June 05
From: Balmora, Eight Plates
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Interesting start mate, I especially liked the deal between the old man and the child (even if the child was reluctant to accept). Seemed pretty well done and I'm hoping that you are inspired to continue this one.
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He who fights with monsters should be careful lest he thereby become a monster. And if thou gaze long into an abyss, the abyss will also gaze into thee. - Friedrich Nietzsche
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Joryn |
May 23 2006, 12:14 PM
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Agent
Joined: 26-June 05
From: England
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A very interesting, if rather melancholy tale. I can see that Im probably going to like this troubled soul who drowns his problems in Flin. Im looking forward to an update to find out more about this poor fellow. Good job.
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Faith, Law, and Justice. Walk on
Joryn - Lvl 40 Dunmer Mage born under the Mage.
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Ice |
May 23 2006, 04:36 PM
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Retainer
Joined: 22-May 06
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:waits patiently for the next part of the story: ............ :Starts rocking back and forth: "it will come soon".......... :freaks out because he doesn't know what is about to happen: Anyway, very nice job I really like the fact that there is so much detail in very little words ^^
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My Current Char. LVL : 22 Race : Female Kajit Class : Custom Class Proficient in Bows Listener Guild Master of the Thieves Guild Champion of the Arena Master of the Fighters Guild
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Joryn |
May 25 2006, 10:15 AM
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Agent
Joined: 26-June 05
From: England
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Heh, very interesting how this has played out. Im looking forward to seeing how it all goes along in the bigger picture. Great work Maze.
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Faith, Law, and Justice. Walk on
Joryn - Lvl 40 Dunmer Mage born under the Mage.
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Ice |
May 25 2006, 02:48 PM
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Retainer
Joined: 22-May 06
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:claps his hands: Very nice ^^ Sorry I wasn't able to post after your update, I was working last night and not able to log on. I can't wait to hear the next chapter. This is something that I noticed, you can take it or leave it, just a bit of help I would work on your battle scene. Yes, it drew me in, but I found myself really lost in finding out what was going on. But maybe that was your attempt. Take it or leave it, it's your story. Just a bit of advice ^^
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My Current Char. LVL : 22 Race : Female Kajit Class : Custom Class Proficient in Bows Listener Guild Master of the Thieves Guild Champion of the Arena Master of the Fighters Guild
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Joryn |
May 26 2006, 04:53 PM
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Agent
Joined: 26-June 05
From: England
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That was very dark indeed Maze, I enjoyed it. Well not all the killing and such obviously, but great work. I certainly hope that pale tatooed demon gets whats coming eventually. Excellent.
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Faith, Law, and Justice. Walk on
Joryn - Lvl 40 Dunmer Mage born under the Mage.
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gamer10 |
May 28 2006, 05:33 AM
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Master
Joined: 7-June 05
From: Home
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I'm commenting on the start of the story here, because I didn't get around to commenting on it earlier. For one thing, you did a heck of a job. Its classic, and well detailed. It reminds me of so many good stories, ones that I can't name because I've forgotten their title with time. Great job.
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