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post Sep 22 2017, 06:54 PM
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Whoa... Lycus almost lost it this chapter. I do, but don't feel bad for his father. Kerstus obviously did horrible things and it wasn't until Kraven disappeared that he decided to clean his act up and I think he is truly remorseful for how he was in the past. But I really don't blame Lycus for his behavior, he suffered through a lot and it's hard to forgive and to forget. I am glad that he did restrain himself.

I love the last sentence though, it really takes the whole chapter and wraps it up perfectly, if that makes sense, Lycus has wanted this moment for so long and to have a loving family where they all get along and love each other. He has that, but look what it cost him and look at what all he and his mother had to go through at the hands of his father. I can understand why he doesn't share the sentiment.


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post Sep 23 2017, 04:02 PM
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What a touching chapter, until father and son almost came to blows, that is. It's good they seem to have resolved things, at least.

Come and think of it, I think I read one of Kraven's previous books. There was a book in which he (or one of yours) became a slave in Morrowind?
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post Sep 26 2017, 05:50 AM
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Acadian: There were certain things Lycus couldn’t allow himself to confess. The dark deeds especially. His history was as terrible as it is. If he told them the details of his escape and his murders, I can’t say they would look at him the same way. Perhaps one day he will explain, but for now Lycus has no one he could relate to in the same level as he is, not even Shavaash where his lycanthropy is concerned. His past and nature does make it a challenge, but all it takes is someone who’s been in his shoes to help him.

Thanks Acadian! smile.gif

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He does have to be careful; he does have to control that side of him now. He is going to be living amongst the civilized now, not as a slave in chains. It is important that he keep that other side in mind now that he is not living in Hircine's Realm where everything was okay because the only law was survival. The last thing he needs to do is come to Cyrodiil and let his inner beast come out and run rampant, lol.

Kraven's Father is no longer the brute of the family = Kraven is the brute now. He is the one drinking and bringing home anger to tear up the peace of the house. He is angry at his Father for doing that years ago, but he is doing it now. Will his mother never have the peace she deserves? I'll bet Kraven flipping that table and wasting food that is obviously precious to them right now just reminded her of the pain of what she endured in the past, it didn't/wouldn't make her feel better to see the man confronted for his crimes years later when he had long since changed his ways.


Lycus always had that in the back of his mind. Now it is going to be at the forefront of everything. He is going to have to go to great lengths to keep this a secret now. As far as he is concerned he’s the only werewolf in Cyrodiil and only Shavaash is privy to his secret. He’ll have to make plans on how he’s going to leave on those special nights. How he is going to accomplish this, and if he’ll meet another of his kind along the way remains to be seen smile.gif

Kraven has been traumatized by his father. So much so that he feels justice wasn’t done. He has been thinking and meditating on how to get back for so long that when he does return he’s is met with this different man. Not the drunken scumbag that used to beat him and his mother, but almost a new person entirely. Kraven will understand and allow this peace to continue but he still does harbor a severe feeling of bitterness toward his father, even though as you said he(Kraven) was largely to blame for getting caught and shipped out.

Thank you so much mALX!!!! Welcome back!!

BretonBlood: Lycus has certain issues that have to be resolved. You wrote exactly what I wanted to get across. Lycus has what he wanted for so long, yet ironically he just seems reluctant to accept it completely.

Renee: Yes, it was touching up until that point. Yes! Lycus is Kraven. This is after those two books. He returns to Cyrodiil after slavery in the dark elf province.



Previously on Per Aspera Ad Astra: Lycus confronts his father, who once used to abuse and torment Lycus and his mother. Lycus discovers Kerstus isn't the same man he was before.[/url].


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~Commencement of Trouble~


An alien quietude and stillness settled over the farm the next few days, a hush so profound that it was in itself like the echo or reverberation of a faint remembered sound upon the ear. There was no other laborous sound than that of what I recalled—the mules and the horses and the pigs, the wagons and the farming implements and the tools, saws and spinning wheels and anvils and house furniture, scythes and hoes and hammers.

Music to my ears.

I spent the following days sleeping, eating, and sleeping some more before setting up my own living space, the simple abandoned quarters resting just outside of my home. There I set up tables and chairs, and a bed as well as my own cupboard that once belonged to me. My personal chamber was roomy enough; I constructed an ingenious dresser that I placed my personal belongings as well as a bed. Here I could be alone whenever I needed to, and this privacy was just what I needed. I couldn’t risk being too close to my mother and father with my tumultuous condition.

My family lived in the cottage, a modest, plain but comfortable structure that looked to be more like a hovel than anything else. The place had been built many years before by my great great-grandfather. He had hewn the beams himself, planed the stones, made it all weather-tight with pine tar and mortar, and had been wise enough to leave standing round an enormous oak tree which offered shade from against the summer sun.

Adjacent to the main house, separated from it only by the animal pen and a short path through the vegetable garden, was the other house: here was the center of activity on the farm; at least it was for me. Here were the collection of oaks, ashwood, iron, the forge and anvils, the modeling hammers and tongs and chisels and all the other equipment which I employed in my demanding craft.

Thus these duties, compared to what I had been used to in Morrowind, were light and fairly free of strain given my divine-given strength and fortitude: I kept the place clean and only used my supernatural vigor when bending a wheel rim, or pumping at the bellows of the forge, after hours of carrying logs to the farm. But from time to time, the tasks I encountered were those calculated to tax not my muscles but my ingenuity.

For instance, the loft of the barn had been infested by bats, tolerable enough considering the place was an abode of cattle but an insufferable plague of drizzling bat feces when I labored daily below. I had tried half a dozen futile measures to rid myself of the pests, including fire and smoke, which nearly burned the place down; whereupon at this point I went out into the woods to a certain nest I knew of and plucked a serpent out of sleep, wrenching it from the tail-end of its slumber and installing it in the eaves.

A week later the bats disappeared, and the snake continued in friendly, satisfied residence, slithering benevolently around the circumference of the barn as it gobbled up rats and field mice whenever Tiber could not, its presence earning I a quiet admiration. I named the snake Lashun.

So, all things being equal, ever since my arrival, I was in as palmy and benign a state as I could remember in many years. At times my urge to hunt in inappropriate times was annoying, but it was a small thorn at my side. I kept well-fed on food purchased by my coin, since the drought had dried the plantation, and only now had the rainstorms began to fall. I purchased food from a local tavern a few miles out from the farm.

Instead of the porridge and stale bread on the daily basis, I ate my fill of cheese pork schnitzel, grilled hare and fishy sticks from Lake Rumare. I controlled my insatiable appetite—a lot of lean bacon and red meat, and often bread with cheese and butter or baked bread made of wheat with cinnammon grape jelly.

I felt I had changed in the most remarkable way. Freedom had restored me to the craft I had learned as an adolescent boy. In the fullness of the young age I blossomed. I was genial, even generous in my behavior with my mother. Although at first I was puzzled at how such fortune would befall a man plagued by the missing of it, I did not have to ponder long the mystery of this renascence. After what felt like a lifetime of blood I now returned to being a farmer anointed with good peace: well fed by the abundance of food that jollied my recent days, vigorously tending to the crops, and never having to take up a sword or another's life in obedience to another man's will.

Manning the forge was a decent, healthy, amiable work—a far piece from the grime and sweat of slavery—and if it had not been for Kerstus' peevish presence I might have actually celebrated such labor, since there was something deeply satisfying about this craft and the way in which straight lengths of nondescript rough wood and strips of crude black iron were transformed into symmetrically spoked, perfectly made tools. The days were long but I relished the half-hour breaks we took morning and afternoon, when my mother would bring us from the house a plate of Cyrodiil biscuits, sweetrolls and mugs of sweet cider with a stick of cinnamon; such a pause in labor made the work itself more rewarding, and caused Kerstus to seem even more acceptable in my eyes.

Kerstus gave me some rough plans and asked me if I'd like to work on a most ambitious piece of carpentry to date: an enormous mill complete with tools designed to utilize either a large man or a middle-sized mule. It was a challenging assignment and I set to upon it with zeal, isolating myself in a high-roofed shed next to the smithy where I painstakingly worked out the architecture of the complicated mechanism, and in all respects carrying through the project with a smooth professionalism that gratified me. Since I anticipated that I would be finished with the mill toward in a few weeks, I notified Kerstus that I would have several days off the farm when I was done. I did not linger on it in so many words, but I wanted to go out into the forest that was my sanctuary, there to hunt and pray for a while—during these last days at work on the mill I had felt the weight of the full moons and the Change hovering very close.

I promised myself I’d take rest today after my father attended to his work on the Waterfront, and thus I finished chopping up the last bit of wood. I took a seat on a log by the shade, using a stone pitcher of lukewarm water to slake my thirst. Tiber was stretched out asleep beneath a tree, but he woke when he heard something, bushy gray tail held stiffly upright as he trotted out of his resting place. I heard it too, sounds up the road; laughter, the clink of mail, a horse’s whine.

“Riders,” I thought out loud, my hand dropping to the axe. Even out here, it never hurt to be wary.

We followed the sounds around a bend of the road and saw them; a trio of armed men noisily galloping toward my home. I stepped out to greet them, Tiber at my side.

They came to a halt a few feet from me, and I was able to study each of them. The one on the left was squat and thick, with huge dirty hands. He looked to be a Breton. Black hair covered his arms and legs and chest, and I presumed even on his back.

The one on the left was an archer, and he was bald and pointy-eared. He opened his mouth to yawn like some immense white lizard. He was a mer, a wood elf by the looks of it.

The one in the center, presumably the leader, was an Imperial. He was skinny as they come, but looked just as dangerous as the others. All of them wore mithril armor, and were armed with swords and axes.

“You want something?” was my first and only question.

All three of them cast uninterested glances over the farm, the crops, my handiwork . . . It made me uncomfortable, and angry.

“I asked if you wanted something,” I said again, and I heard my voice grow sharp and impatient.

The Imperial was silent for a moment, gazing at the farm, then turned slowly toward me and said in an edgy, evil, mocking voice: “Where is Kerstus?”

“Not here.” I told them. “You friends of his?”

“What are you doing here?” said the Imperial man, ignoring my question.

There was a pause. “I live here. This is my land and I'm working.”

“Aye, and so are we. Protecting the folks from bandits and marauders. Farms aren’t safe these days.” The fat Breton told me with a sinister smile; revealing rows of rotten teeth that seemed a pale, light reflection of his soul. His tone suggested shameless sarcasm.

Tiber growled at his words.

“You don’t look like Legion soldiers to me. And we don’t need any protection.” I said, my voice thick with the anger I never seemed to put away as my hands wrapped around the axe. “Best you get going.”

Footsteps behind me made a soft slow padding sound across the grass and I looked back and saw my mother draw near. She parted her lips, hesitated for a moment, then said to the men. “Kerstus went to the Imperial City. He’s at the Arena District.”

“Aye, we best get going then,” the wood elf said with a snort as he scanned my home with a look of consummate greed. “Your farm’s improved since the last time we stopped by. Got cattle now, too. Been making gold?”

“I’ve had help around the farm.” My mother said, ever the paragon of innocent docility.

I said nothing, and only listened with my expression of pinched, absorbed irritation and muffled wrath. My mother put her hand lightly on my shoulder. “Kerstus has the gold he promised. Gods bless you for your patience.”

My thoughts raced: Wasn’t he working at the Waterfront? What gold? Does he still owe septims?

The Imperial sneered. “We’ll be on our way, then. The farm looks to be safe for now.”

Then he was gone and it was the fat Breton and the wood elf alone who seems to fill the entire space within my sight, prodigious even as they stood on their horses, grinning to themselves in the blighted, sunbaked farm, prodigious and all-powerful, yet mysterious in their terrible authority, filling me with dread. The appearance of the Breton’s round, heavy face, staring down at my mother with dreamy pleasure sickened me inside. Then he too took leave from the farm, and the elf right behind him.

I whirled to my mother. “Who in Oblivion were those men?”

"Come inside. I'll explain."


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"Every human spends a night or two on the dark side and regrets it. But what if you only exist on the dark side? We just want the same things that you do: a chance at life, at love. And so we try and sometimes fail. But when you're something other, a monster, the consequences are worse. Much worse. You wake up from your nightmares. We don't."
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post Sep 26 2017, 06:50 PM
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This episode opened with a welcome look at the farmstead in some detail. It is great that Lycus has his own small outlying cottage and a working forge to busy his hands and mind. Simplicity and hard work as a smith are an excellent recipe to retune him a bit from his long trip to Oblivion and back. I chuckled to learn he was augmenting his voracious diet with fishy sticks from town.

Lashun the snake! tongue.gif

Uh oh. This looks like a protection racket gang of thugs. I wonder if there is more to it than that. Hopefully, Lycus' mother can enlighten him.


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post Sep 27 2017, 12:43 PM
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He mentions moons and a coming change. He is a ... uh .. a werewolf??? blink.gif
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post Sep 28 2017, 05:34 PM
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As Acadian mentioned, seeing your descriptions of Lycus's farm work was welcome and enjoyable, and a perfect way to keep his mind and body busy. Having the vigor of a Lycanthrope helps with such work I would think, less tiring out.

I got a really good chuckle at Lycus naming the snake Lashun. Nice throwback.

And who are these men? They say they are looking out and keeping the farms safe, but I am thinking that's a lie. Unless they make the farmers pay them for their protection. Either way we haven't seen the last of them and I get the feeling Lycus is going to have another job to take of... one less clean than farming.


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post Sep 29 2017, 07:01 AM
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As far as he is concerned he’s the only werewolf in Cyrodiil and only Shavaash is privy to his secret. He’ll have to make plans on how he’s going to leave on those special nights. How he is going to accomplish this, and if he’ll meet another of his kind along the way remains to be seen smile.gif


GAAAAAAAAAAAH !!!!!!!!!!

KABOOOOM !!!!!!!!!!

*mALX's head explodes*

Oooh, you just teased me with that lure!!!!! WOOOOOOOOOT !!!! Now the excitement is building, I can't wait !!!!!!




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~Commencement of Trouble~


LOVE the snake solution for the bats, rats, mice, and general rodentia in the barn, but the name for it Lashun had me rolling! Makes me wonder if we will see "The Mouth" again here in Cyrodiil!!! Hopefully as a friend this time, lol.

Oh crap, this bit with these men does not sound good. I don't like the sound of this at all. Maybe wolfy Lycus can pay these men a visit when the moon is full and make sure they stop bothering his family. That will give him plenty to eat for a while, but he will have to pick the back hairs out of his teeth for months...

And by the way, it was mentioned in the last chapter and then never mentioned again = where the hell is the gold that Kraven brought home with him? He left it outside the house for anyone to find and take, and his father found it - where is it now?

AWESOME Write !!!!!!! You cannot imagine how much I love this story from the first book; through every book since including this! Awesome, AWESOME Write !!!! You have an amazing talent !!!



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post Oct 9 2017, 10:56 PM
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Acadian: I’ve always wanted to get into detail of Lycus’ farm life. We know from his thoughts and dialogue of his old habits but we never saw it in detail. At his core, Lycus was always a simple and humble man. A welcome change from the more hectic and aggressive lifestyle he was living.
Ha, I knew you guys would’ve enjoyed that bit.
Doennt look too good. Thanks Acadian!

Renee: Yes, Lycus is a werewolf .

BretonBlood: Most definetly having the strength of a werewolf, especially enhanced by Hircine in the aspect of strength has given him a superhuman capability. These men probably pose trouble and Lycus always gets into trouble. There will be exciting things coming!

Lycus learned to use his noggin here. Lashun is in Cyrodiil. I’m sure you remember. It would be interesting to see him return.


mALX: Oh yeah! Speaking of which Blood Coin has not yet ended. I will post up to a certain, strategic moment here and continue Vera’s story.
That would be a clever strategy indeed. He would avoid being detected by the bandits, but on the bad side, it could arouse the suspicion of the locals if any there were any hints of a werewolf in the area. Its something Lycus has to analyze.

The gold was safely hidden in his cottage. That’ll be mentioned in this chapter.
This book does have a different feel from the last ones, and it’ll get more interesting. I promise!

Thanks everyone for the feedback!



Previously on Per Aspera Ad Astra: Lycus works on the farm several days after his return, and meets some unwelcome visitors to his home . . .[/url].


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~Commencement of Trouble~


Alessia sat down, trying to summon up, out of her infinite weariness, strength, and the courage to face me. Bending forward, she would look into my eyes, the reserve, the statuesque poise all going to pieces, as I had learned to expect it to, after a minute or so, and the fine, lovely mouth would quiver a little as she said: “Your father still owns coin.”

I opened my mouth for a biting reply, then closed it again. I tapped my finger on the table, irate beyond measure. “How much?”

“A large sum.”

“How much?”

“A large sum,” Alessia said again. “Just know that your father hasn’t been drinking. He hasn’t been whoring.”

There were so many things I could’ve said. So many things I wanted to say. Things I should’ve said. But I held my tongue, and in doing so allowed my mother some time to explain the reason for history repeating itself again.

“After your dissaperance Kerstus did what he could and worked for his coin. He sold our livestock, worked the fields. Slowly, month after month, he paid what he owed. If I hadn’t I feared he wouldn’t alive today. He paid what he could, and asked for more from lenders who would be less inclined to kill him. One debt to pay another and now we’re swimming in it again.”

Scoffing, laughing wryly, I shook my head. “The gold I brought, all that gold, sits within a hole in the cupboard out there in my quarters. He could’ve asked me for it.”

“He’s ashamed,” my mother confessed. “He’s ashamed to ask you. And besides, those septims belong to you, my son. You were given it as a reward.”

There were plenty of things I couldn’t explain to my mother. The truth, of what had happened, had to remain obscured. Forever. And so I shifted in my seat, and sighed. “What is mine is yours, you know that . . . Damn, things never change do they? He’s never been wise when it came to gold.”

“He lost his wits after he had his knighthood taken,” my mother said. “He didn’t take it well.”

My father had been more than unwell. He’d been defeated. Crushed. He had poked his head up out of the grass, and the boot of civilization had stomped him flat. Slowly. And through it all, his degenerative mind had inexorably transformed him into exactly the kind of man he had given his life to fight: stupid, erratic, and violent. And he knew it.

He never even got to forget.

All those years ago . . . every time he looked at me, he remembered every time he had hurt me. He remembered choking me. Remembered hitting me with his hands, or other things. Books. Chairs. Pans. Once, memorably, a clothing iron.

Sometimes he had blackouts. Not many.

I’m pretty sure he remembered beating near to death.

We never talked about her since the morning of my arrival. Never. But I could see it in his eyes. The memory would hit and his eyes would go empty. Wet marbles. Sadness. Regret. My father had been a gallant man, a knight of some order of knights, and just when I was born, things had went wrong for him. After he was excommunicated from the order of Knights, his life had never been the same. Neither was ours.

It was like my father was dead. Like he’d been dead all along, but once in a while he’d forget long enough to dream he was still alive. Or maybe the dream was that he’d died the way he wished he could have: that he’d given his life to protect us.

I have failed people I loved. Failing them destroyed me. What it did to my father . . . I can’t even imagine.

I don’t want to imagine. I could only remember what he was before, what memories I still had of him.

Rare and prodigious man, my father was. Had he been born in Hammerfell like my grandfather, I think he might have been a very well an old-style radical. As it was—a good man of the world, whose circumstances had located him within the purlieus of the most stiff-necked parish this side of Cyrodiil—he had managed to work out a shaky compromise between his honest piety, on the other hand, and his enlarged views, on the other, and the resulting tension had helped make him the man he was.

To be one of this breed in the Imperial City was childishly simple; to be in Hammerfell surpassed all ordinary guts. Growing up my father had thirsted for understanding, for wisdom, in the same way that others yearn for coin or prestige, and I think that he had lost a great measure of both. Age had bowed him and shrunken him a bit as did life, and he had grown larger and larger in the eyes of my mother. She had never known a more decent man, and if during these later years he became here and there cranky and sententious or overtalkative, I could understand it, knowing that the hypocrisy and meaness at which he raged once had become too much even for a man of his size.

“Son, life is a search for justice,” my father once told me once, betraying not a flicker of self-conscious at the immeasurable phrase. I know now that I never found it, but perhaps that mattered less than that I moved through dooms of love, through griefs of joy, in this seeking. But for now all I sought was information.
“You didn’t tell me who these men were.”

“Bandits. Marauders. Whatever you want to call them,” she said. “Our area has been plagued by them in recent months. Legion soldiers did their best to locate their hideout, but the bandits are quite elusive and they are far spread out. Those men work with a very influential man from the Imperial City. Our farm has been preserved thus far because they owed your father a favor long ago, and he agreed to pay them a sum after a bet. Half the sum, I’m afraid."

I rose at once from the table. “He’s in the Arena District, isn’t he? I want to be part of this meeting.”

Alessia was silent for a while, a quizzical look on her face. “Tis’ something your father has do deal with.”

I shook my head. “I’ll spare him any further embarrassment or stupid mistakes. I can always make more coin, and if paying some of my coin to those men means we’ll be at peace, so be it. I don't want any of us to tremble under the shadow of a pack of dregs.”

Then she said: “Are you certain?”

“Aye, I’m sure.”

“You’re going to the Imperial City like that? With that beard?”

“What's wrong with my beard? I always thought it helped preserve my dignity.” I said.

“Just be safe out there, son. And . . . don’t let what happened to us sever any ties to your father. He longs to be close to you again.” I closed my eyes for a second, opened them again: in the warm, golden, diminishing light Alessia seemed to be smiling at me, though perhaps it was only the dimness of the sun's rays which blurred and made indistinct the details of her face. I felt that I had only faintly understood what she had said— I didn't try to grasp the barest beginnings of it; finally I replied in a dry voice, a lump in my throat: "I won’t take long.”

It is only now—literally now, as I compose these words on the far side of years that feel more like centuries—that this finally strikes me as incongruous. That my father, a former knight, could stare violent death square in the eye without so much as a blink, but couldn’t stand up to a good-for-nothing brood of bandits. At the time, it was obvious. Natural. It was the primary lesson of my life.

You can fight a threat. You can’t fight the way things are.

That’s what got us where we were. Because father had tried to fight the way things are. By the time he had become this “new man”, the scars he carried from the past had him too broken to even do something about this bandit problem. I already had half a mind to go there and kill them all, but such bloodshed would summon unwanted attention to me and my family.

And all I wanted was peace and quiet.

And so I gathered my bag for the trip, donning the guise of a very poor farmer as I dressed in my worst clothes and tied my hair into a pony-tail, and taking most of my gold with me. Though I was far from Morrowind, the Imperial City was the center of Cyrodiil, and I would do my best to blend in with my raw wool and dull brown roughspun shirt and pants. My only hope was that my father hadn’t made any more mistakes by the time I got there.


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post Oct 9 2017, 11:26 PM
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This is a most revealing and welcome look into Kestius’ history and explains a lot. I also happily detect Lycus’ resentment toward his father softening.

So, it is off to Cyrodiil with a big bag of gold prudently hidden under farmer roughspun. Perhaps Lycus will run into Lashun.

I don’t expect his meeting with dishonorable thugs to go well. But I’m also betting that Lycus has the ability to take care of both himself and his family.


Nit: “Your father still owns coin.” - - This quite confused me until gradually I realized that you meant owes instead of owns.


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post Oct 11 2017, 05:42 PM
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Getting to see some of Kerstus's backstory was a really nice touch. While his past doesn't excuse his actions towards his family, it does help us understand why he was the way he was. Great addition to the chapter.

I love the comment Alessia says, "You’re going to the Imperial City like that? With that beard?” Sounds like my mother when I don't shave hahaha.

This confrontation will be interesting to say the least. I have no doubt that Lycus can take care of them, but whether or not it will end in a bloodbath remains to be seen.


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post Oct 13 2017, 11:33 AM
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I don't think Kraven should bring all that money with him, or leave his mother alone to face those leering bandits. But he does seem to know already who his mother was referring to in the Imperial City; so hopefully he has some plan in mind. The trouble I have with this is that = to this date Kraven's plans have not been well thought out and have caused him nothing but worse trouble than he started out with. I hope he is cautious, especially in showing that gold around. Never show someone what you have and you traveling solo when a gang of the worst dregs of society can so easily find you on the road home and take it from you and then you have nothing to help your mother with.

This had to be a hard chapter to write, all the bad memories of his childhood that were never far from the surface of his mind. It has to be hard to forgive or trust this new man, but I hope whatever time it takes that from now on Kraven manages to keep control of his temper and not stir the old coals anymore = at least not in his mother's presence.

As always, an Awesome write! You may not be able to redeem his father in our eyes, or even make us understand his reasons for how he treated his family = but your writing is so good that we find ourselves caring about him despite who he is/has been to Kraven and Alessia.



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Renee
post Oct 13 2017, 01:06 PM
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That's awesome. Mum's worried about his beard, meanwhile it is merely part of his new disguise! Can't wait to see what happens!
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