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> Memoirs of a Morag Tong Assassin - Solstheim, Chapter Three: Sides Chosen.
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post Feb 21 2013, 09:16 PM
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post Feb 22 2013, 04:36 AM
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Oooh!!...Assassin fight on the cards!!... biggrin.gif ...

Having recently started exploring Solstheim in the Dragonborn expansion, I did find myself thinking "Isn't that where Black Hand was on about?". Doesn't look half as good as your description of the place makes it... wink.gif ...

Brilliant stuff, as always...

I really hope Carnius gets his handed to him in short order...Nicely done with the boo-hiss baddie... biggrin.gif ...

Looking forward to more...

Nice one!!...

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post Mar 23 2013, 12:38 AM
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So the plot thickens? A true assassin in the colony...well except from a certain Seth...ehh Dralas of course. Very interesting...yes i do like that twist.

as usual very very well written....

Hmm I need more..yes YES I do!

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post Mar 24 2013, 01:38 AM
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post Mar 25 2013, 11:09 AM
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Sethyas is back!!

So there's going to be an investigation into the Falmer, then? That'll be interesting, certainly; are you incorporating Skyrim lore about the Falmer into this or is it sticking to the Morrowind line of 'we haven't seen them yet'?

Also, you seemed to have some really odd usage of capitalisation and apostrophes at points within this chapter, stuff like:

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how he was a Scholar as well as a Noble back in the Sumurset Isles.

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Divayth Fyr is one of the Eldest Mortals to walk the Mundus at four thousand years, and one of the most powerful Sorcerer's to have existed. My hands have slain the Dagoth's of Vvardenfell that were at least that old.

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The Miners and Dock Workers flocked into our relatively large tavern.

It's kind of wierd how the profession, like 'scholar' and 'miners and dock workers' are capitalised; it's a title, of sorts, but it shouldn't be. Again, it's the same case with 'eldest mortals', and to be honest I have no idea why you put capitals on that one. It just looks odd now, and it seems to happen all the time, which was kind of jarring to read. Also, 'sorcerers' and 'Dagoths' shouldn't have apostrophes, as they aren't meant to indicate possessives.

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post Mar 26 2013, 12:21 AM
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post Mar 27 2013, 02:42 PM
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He took them in quietly, his eyes merely reflecting the glow of the fireplace. In a sense, it was like my words were a strong liquor being poured into the calm well of his soul.

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post Mar 28 2013, 08:05 PM
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Now then! Brilliant Blackie! Soooo our Seth..Dralas is going into the Falmer-stuff? That is very interesting I'm so looking forward to it.

I love the "lore" parts in your story...gives it body so to say.

Now Seth..take it easy in that bar, don't drink too much biggrin.gif


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post Mar 31 2013, 09:44 AM
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OOoh, blimey...Going off again on some sort of wanderlust again?... biggrin.gif ...

Should be fun...Although, his telling the fire-bint and his girlfriend that he's going should also be fun... biggrin.gif ...

Looking forward to more, as ever...

Nice one!!...

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post Apr 7 2013, 07:02 PM
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post Apr 7 2013, 07:49 PM
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OOooh, that was pretty excellent!...

Loved the way he exercised restraint in the fight...Well, as if he'd do anything else really, but still, I loved the demonstration of it... biggrin.gif ...

I also loved the reminder of northern Solstheim...I really enjoyed that Skyrim DLC...Wonderful place...

And then...Enter Pene!!...

Brilliant stuff, as always...

Nice one!!...

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post Apr 11 2013, 12:39 AM
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post Apr 11 2013, 08:06 AM
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Nice sidestep of the Pene situation... laugh.gif ...

Loved the way that you had the drink continue to affect him...Perhaps a lesson learned here...Although you'd think he'd know better at his age... biggrin.gif ...

Loved the way Falco was backing away from him when he was waving the knife...And then the headache because he'd forgotten how to dispel the Night-eye made me laugh... biggrin.gif ...

Nice one!!...

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post Apr 14 2013, 10:07 AM
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And I've caught up! biggrin.gif

It's still a fantastic story, so I'm absolutely delighted to see it's being continued, I'm just sorry I was away for so long that it's taken me a while to get up to date. One thing that is interesting - when you have such a lot to read - is that you see how styles change over a period of time. Our assassin has slowly started to change from an "all action" character, into a much more measured character. He weighs things up, anticipates and reads people. You always had an interesting lead, but now... he's a damn sight more interesting. And believeable. And sympathetic. And just coool!

More please wink.gif And I must admit, I'm looking forward to the moment where assassin meets assassin again. The idea of flare spells to disrupt nighteye was inspired...
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post Apr 15 2013, 01:08 AM
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post Apr 18 2013, 07:47 PM
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Ahhh three new installments! Sometimes life is goood! Oh my I totally agree with Burnie, Sethyas develops continously...
I laughed at his predicament in the Bath tub! Poor guy, I mean doesn't people know it's customary to KNOCK before just barging in like that..

Anyway I'm looking forward for the moment when Seth meets the other assassin..THAT will be quite something

As usual I want to compliment you for your brilliant writing!

Soooo S.G.M!!


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post Apr 19 2013, 04:41 AM
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laugh.gif ...Bless him, all he wanted was a nice quiet bath... biggrin.gif ...

So much of that made me laugh... laugh.gif ...Loved it...

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I stopped as he opened the door, and came in. Why didn't they install a damn latch on that door?

"There's been a discovery in the mine! I need someone with your acumen in adventuring to give it a trained eye!" He said excitedly.

I coughed as I gave him an annoyed stare.

"What? Oh, the bath? Don't flatter yourself, you've got nothing I haven't seen before. I have children for Stendarr's sake!" he laughed it off.



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Looking forward to much more...

Nice one!!...

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post Apr 21 2013, 06:16 PM
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post Apr 27 2013, 04:37 PM
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OOooh!!...So excellent!!...

I love the stalhrim stuff!!...It was one of my fave bits of the whole Dragonborn thing...Getting the complete set of armour and the swords 'nd shieldie stuff...

Brilliance as ever, loving the way it's making me want to go back and do a bit more... biggrin.gif ...

Nice one!!...

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post Apr 29 2013, 02:55 PM
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"Dammit Falco! I'm an Adventurer, not an Archaeologist!" I replied.

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Ooo, sacred ice! Of course they have to open it!!


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