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Soulseeker3.0
post Apr 14 2006, 02:24 AM
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Well yeah, I got bored one day and started writing this up... I think i'm going pretty strong. My only downfall is I can't type so, if you like it there might be some delaye in the later updates, have fun.

Oh and this is fairly short... I don't havbe the patience to sit and type three paragraphs like Trey does biggrin.gif (that is a weird compliment to you guys who type that much)

INTRODUCTION


Ty awoke to a low thundering noise and looked out his window to see dirt and dust billowing up on the horizon. Ty rubbed his eyes to look again and his mother burst into the room looking around frantically. Ty glanced out the window to see dark figures on the horizon take shape.

“Hey mommy what’s-”

“Hurry dear, come here.”

His mom pulled Ty through the house and Ty was starting to get scared. “Mommy, were is dadda? I’m scared.” Ty started crying and his mom picked him up. “Its okay, daddy’s with all the other men and they are going to protect us.”

“The peoples in black?”

“Yes, so we are going to be really quiet and hide.” Ty started to stop crying and nodded.

Ty’s mom took him to the basement wee they hid under a blanket waiting, just sitting there waiting. Waiting for Ty’s dad to call down the stairs. Ty laid there in his mother’s lap for what seemed like an eternity. Eventually he heard the door open, but something didn’t feel right. The sounds were rough and the smell was horrible. Ty peeked out of a hole in the rugged blanket and saw a group of men looking around.

Ty gasped and one of the men turned his head in Ty’s direction. The man moved closer and Ty grabbed his mother, who was trying to comfort him. The man’s hand seemed to hover over the blanket and the blanket was wrenched off and the man grunted, a signal to his comrades. Ty looked from his mom to the man and his mom was shaking her head and the men were smiling.

One of the men tore Ty away while the other two held her back. The one man looked over Ty and the only thing he said was “not worth it” and he threw Ty across the room. Ty hit his head on the wall and started to lose consciousness. He heard his mom scream and the men laugh. “No! Get off! Get off!” But the only answer was more laughter and Ty blacked out completely.

---Well the next update might throw you off but if you think about it, it should make since. Cheers

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Soulseeker3.0   Vengeance   Apr 14 2006, 02:24 AM
Kiln   Not a bad start here Seeker, I wonder what will ha...   Apr 14 2006, 03:06 PM
Tellie   Oh no...poor Ty...I dont dare to think on what tho...   Apr 14 2006, 03:14 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Well here is another update, thanks for the positi...   Apr 15 2006, 05:07 AM
minque   Oh dear! I´ve just noticed this one, my my the...   Apr 16 2006, 11:51 PM
treydog   A very good start here- it shall be interesting to...   Apr 17 2006, 05:02 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Yay more comments... anyhoo, this one is short, wh...   Apr 20 2006, 03:24 AM
jack cloudy   Hmmm, interesting. Very interesting. Go on.   Apr 20 2006, 04:19 PM
minque   Nice ......very nice, I likey...so please continue...   Apr 20 2006, 09:59 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Score... I finnaly got this done. I'd like to ...   Aug 22 2006, 02:40 AM
Kiln   Score... I finnaly got this done. I'd like to...   Aug 22 2006, 03:35 AM
The Metal Mallet   I remember this one! This was back when I was...   Aug 22 2006, 06:01 AM
treydog   Glad to see you updating. Enjoyed the interaction...   Aug 22 2006, 01:35 PM
minque   Ahh Soulseeker! great to see you´re back...and...   Aug 22 2006, 09:51 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Huzzah I got more done. I would have typed more b...   Sep 9 2006, 04:26 AM
The Metal Mallet   Oooo an altercation! Hopefully Ty can pull th...   Sep 9 2006, 05:02 AM
minque   Yay Soul! great update.....I´m expecting an in...   Sep 9 2006, 04:03 PM
Abu the Cat   MORE, MORE! ME WANT MORE! This is a cool s...   Sep 23 2006, 01:04 AM
Soulseeker3.0   I appologize for not updating earlier, I got my ha...   Oct 6 2006, 09:22 PM
The Metal Mallet   Ooo more suspense; I'm liking it. I wonder wh...   Oct 6 2006, 09:42 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Hello... i have some sad news.... Well it involves...   Oct 31 2006, 11:12 PM
Kiln   Well I'll be waiting until you continue Seeker...   Nov 1 2006, 09:51 PM
minque   Well I'll be waiting until you continue Seeke...   Nov 1 2006, 10:01 PM
Taillus   Hey it could be worse... You could have vanished w...   Nov 1 2006, 11:50 PM
Soulseeker3.0   <snip> I really hope this makes up for my ...   Nov 22 2006, 01:31 AM
The Metal Mallet   Interesting conversation with that old man; quite ...   Dec 16 2006, 05:18 AM
ugmung   ah great story very suspensefull and full of smart...   Jan 20 2007, 03:02 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Here's more... i found out that there isn...   Feb 2 2007, 05:07 AM
The Metal Mallet   Good to see you getting back to updating this. Ke...   Feb 2 2007, 10:23 PM
Soulseeker3.0   *sigh* i know... and i'm sorry...BUT without f...   Apr 4 2007, 04:20 AM
The Metal Mallet   Ooooo a cliffie. Glad to see you posting this sto...   Apr 4 2007, 10:57 PM
minque   Yes!!! You´re back up and posting agai...   Apr 7 2007, 04:47 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Heh, wow, two updates within a month of each other...   Apr 12 2007, 05:17 AM
The Metal Mallet   I don't mind dialogue at all! Especially ...   Apr 12 2007, 10:36 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Two things to say... 1) Sorry (again) 2) It...   Jul 9 2007, 07:26 AM
The Metal Mallet   And so things get complicated. I think Blaine isn...   Jul 9 2007, 07:18 PM
jack cloudy   Consequences? Who cares about consequences? Show m...   Jul 9 2007, 09:21 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Thanks MM and Jack. I messed this whole scene up ...   Jul 10 2007, 06:18 PM
jack cloudy   There's always something horribly disturbing a...   Jul 12 2007, 07:31 PM
The Metal Mallet   Hmm, I personally thought that Dalave would manage...   Jul 12 2007, 08:23 PM
Soulseeker3.0   Wow... this part was difficult to rewrite the firs...   Jul 19 2007, 07:41 AM
treydog   Excellent. An update. I like your characterizati...   Jul 20 2007, 12:37 AM
The Metal Mallet   Nice update. Full of lots of goodie characterizat...   Jul 20 2007, 01:32 AM
minque   Yeah Soulie..you´re doing a great job with this st...   Jul 20 2007, 11:13 AM
jack cloudy   Short but nice. Now I wonder why Dalave is so ...   Jul 20 2007, 04:53 PM
Soulseeker3.0   No, I haven't died yet. Sorry guys ----------...   Sep 6 2007, 02:32 AM
The Metal Mallet   I'm beginning to sense something here, but I...   Sep 6 2007, 05:56 AM
jack cloudy   Women, I'll never understand them. You were of...   Sep 7 2007, 09:54 PM


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