 A short poem |
| foxo |
 Mar 20 2006, 12:10 AM
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Sorry if this is late, I have been here before, but it was looking fairly dead, so I didnt post anything. I have a short poem here, about a ruthless killer. Criticism please.
The Death-Wife Swiftly she ran Silently she killed Softly she kissed Her deeds fulfilled. Bringer of death Taker of life A kiss her gift Beware the wife. She that walks the shadows She that kills for bliss She shall end your life With but a kiss. Hark, be weary A warning given The death-wife lurks True intentions hidden. Edit: changed "with only a kiss" to with but a kiss, better flow? PS: thanks brgenerator! This post has been edited by foxo: Mar 21 2006, 12:51 AM |
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foxo A short poem Mar 20 2006, 12:10 AM
brgenerator good work, i enjoyed that! Mar 20 2006, 12:54 PM stargate525 very nice. :goodjob: Mar 23 2006, 04:55 AM vaanic~one I love the "death-wife" title. It's... Mar 23 2006, 12:14 PM foxo Thanks! B) Mar 24 2006, 09:02 AM Languein Very Good, Great work. :D Apr 23 2006, 05:22 AM Mazelure This was a very good composed poem
Kudos FOXO Kud... Apr 23 2006, 11:54 PM Ibis I like it too. I hope it didn't mean all wives... Jun 4 2006, 10:33 AM
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