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post Sep 2 2006, 11:36 PM
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Wowieee!!! What a livid, vivid description of Forumus Officialis in all it's enraging, engaging disglory! Why am I rhyming? This is what happens when my mind is truly chiming, from being blown away! ... this is a great great story! I'm wondering if that one keened arrow is going to be the death of the beast ... or just the beginning of a slow and writhing ending?!?

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The Metal Mallet
post Sep 3 2006, 03:11 AM
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The showdown commences!

The way the creature speaks, and what he actually says is really interesting. It creates an interesting dynamic to the story, as I'm beginning to question whether this creature is truely evil.


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post Sep 3 2006, 04:46 PM
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WOAH!!! Can´t believe I´ve missed this one! Heey you once more proved yourself to be an excellent writer Blackie!

Wonderful story.......I read it with great joy!


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post Oct 4 2006, 03:05 AM
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Whoa….sorry for the delay folks, and BIG apologies to Ibis. How could I have been so inconsiderate to let a Month go by? Jeez. Im a big jerk.

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“HRRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHH!!!!” Forumus Officialis screamed in rage and pain. How could this mortal succeed in harming him where so many others had failed?

“The arrow….” Its voltaic voice whimpered.

“Checkmate, Forumus.” Said Ibis, aiming the next arrow at it.

The tendrils flayed no more, and red diodes began too illuminate all over the creature, and they all came together weaving a single multi- fingered hand, and they flew to Ibis Raze, whom let the arrow go, and jumped quickly to the side, as the monsters tendrils pounded into the ground, a fury of debris and electricity flying up into the air.

“What do you mean, Checkmate?” Officialis raged, his eyes gazing upon the SpellSword, his tendrils now retracting back to his levitating body, but still flaying slowly.

“You are connected to this armor, this weaponry. The same corruption that spawned you is connected to my Mother. For without her you would be naught. This armor was hers…but it is so much more than that.”

A single tendril whipped through the air, moving at speeds even Ibis could not match, striking the left pauldron, creating a set of orange sparks, the inertia of the attack knocking Ibis to the ground, but the attack could not penetrate the armor.

Ibis unsheathed her sword, and began to sidestep slowly, looking for an opening into Forumus’ defense.

“So much more?” the creatures diodes dimming from a red to a dull orange.

In a spectacular acrobatic feat, Ibis cleared forty feet from her position on the ground, arcing by Forumus Officialis’ left flank, and with a mighty swipe of her matching Amethyst Glass Longsword, she dismembered the creatures left arm.

The electronic screaming grew silent after a few seconds, and Ibis’ green eyes held the creature in an equal mixture of rage and calculating cunning.

“Tell me Daughter of Raze,…what is the connection?”

Ibis pulled out a few glass throwing stars, purple amethyst of course, and did an incredible throw with one hand, and a flurry of the stars burst out before her, many of them lodging themselves in the creatures back and tendrils.

Ibis back stepped, and flipped her sword into an overhand preparation to strike, her anticipation into the creatures next move was proven true as the creature pressed another tendril attack, and Ibis shifted her weight from her extended right foot, to her left, and the tendrils barely missed her standing position, and her blades edge had converted from over hand to underhand, and she brought the blade up, severing Forumus’ tendrils.

The creature was now greatly weakened, nearly completely dismembered, and its abilities weakened significantly, as it began to fall to the ground. Its legs making the slightest of sounds as it touched to the ground.

Ibis switched to the Bow once more, and fired arrow after arrow into the creature, each one brought the lights of the creature ever dimmer. Her eyes growing ever more resolute, as she fired as fast as she could.

Finally, the creature filled to the max with arrows, Ibis saved the final two for an in case situation and unsheathed her sword once more, and walked slowly over too the creature, taking careful points to hack off the final pieces of forumus, until it was little more then a pile of metal and wires.

The head was still full of light, and the blue lights of its eyes looked at Ibis as she walked with a fury in her legs, and hate in her eyes.

“I am passed. Your victory here was pre-determined it would seem. What was the secret of you weapons and armor that led to my defeat, Ibis Raze? I graced you with my True Name, and I ask you grace me with your mystery, before you send me to where I know not?”

“Oblivion is the name of your next destination. Not the realm of the Daedra, but the dark Void from which all has sprung forth. You will know no thought or feeling, pain and ambition will find you not.”

“And know, that the very soul of the woman whom you led to death, was enchanted into this armor, and these weapons. Jyllia Raze, my mother, before taking her own life, encased herself within a Dark Soul Gem, with instructions that her energies be put to use against you, I had to dabble in the dark arts. Made bargains with Necromancers. I even thought to try and revive her with the gem, but it was not her wish to do as such. You took my world from me, and every time I take a piece of you, I gain a little of that world back.” Ibis said between sobs, the bitter tears of past memories streamed down her cheeks.

“How……noble. “ Forumus Officialis mused, the lights of its eyes growing dimmer.

“I should have thought that as she brought me into this world, she could also take me from it. And it would seem that she has, through you. I am a virus, a disease to all that functions. I thought myself the ender of things, but as it would seem, I am not. Perhaps, I am just a part of this world, and you were my balancing aspect. Grant me peace now, Ibis Raze. Fulfill your destiny…..” the voltaic voice trailed off, the lights finally shutting down.

Ibis let out a sob, and gripped her sword hilt tighter as she brought the blade back full swing, halfing the head of Forumus Officialis.

Dunmer arose from around the ruins of Tusenend. The Telvanni, the Ashlanders, and the Redorans whom bravely fought the Monstrosity looked at each other in confusion.

As they searched the area for answers, they merely saw a pile of inexplicable material, and a woman walking away in the distance, pulling a blue silk hood over her head.
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The Metal Mallet
post Oct 4 2006, 05:25 AM
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Neato fight, Black. Very easy to follow fight with a nice, emotional ending to cap it off.

Seems like there's going to be an epilogue, but if not, great short story.


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Ibis
post Oct 5 2006, 07:53 PM
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Wow BH, thank you. It's a wonderful story. The idea of Jylia Raze encasing herself in a black soul gem is awesome. I love it.


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post Oct 6 2006, 06:03 PM
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Neat. Needed more Endgame Drama, though biggrin.gif


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