Aftermath, When one crises ends, another shall rise Options

[Fiach]

Ooo I like how this story is starting to turn out, some interesting intrigue between the sons of Hircine and Bal :3
I wonder what they're fighting over...
You have a pretty solid standard in your prose, and your dialogue does lend a lot to the characters, the only fault I can see is that I find who is saying what a bit confusing.. adding something as simple as 'whispered Rex' or 'said the Breton' would lend itself great to enhancing the story
Great work with this! Kudos with the regular updates, shall be following this

[Lycanthropic-Legend]

As a big fan of werewolves, I have to say I am loving this story. It has action and humor written all over it! And a good interesting, story, too. All of the nits were practically said and mentioned by other members, so I can't comment on those. But I love it. If you need any help on lore regarding Elder Scrolls werewolves, I am most happy to help.

[King Of Beasts]

the only fault I can see is that I find who is saying what a bit confusing.. adding something as simple as 'whispered Rex' or 'said the Breton' would lend itself great to enhancing the story
Great work with this! Kudos with the regular updates, shall be following this

The thing is about saying he said, or she said after every sentence someone says can get repetitive, but I will try to find a way to make it less confusing to understand, and if you have questions feel free to ask. I'm glad you're enjoying the story

[Acadian]

" No. You're not my boss, I'm not listening, I can't hear you!"
" Hastrel, stop acting like petulant child!"
You’re not the boss of me! This whole exchange was very funny!

You did a good job developing the squabbling vampires. And it was fun to see Jensine giving Westley an interrogation to buy a blanket!

[mALX]

Loved the dialogue in this chapter, had me rolling! Great Write!

** I am really loving the screenshots you post to go along with your story! Thumbs up on Hastrel, WOO HOO!

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[King Of Beasts]

Fiach: thanks for reading. I'm Glad to know you are enjoying the story It's my first fanfic, so it's probably going to start out a bit confusing, but it should be easier to understand as I move along in the chapters. Also, I'll work on making the dialogue less confusing, while not being to repetitive.

Lycanthropic-Legend: Thanks for reading my story and glad you are enjoying it. Honestly, I like weaving my own lore into the story, but I would appreciate some of the lore you know on the werewolves of the elder scrolls universe, it would be quite helpful.

Acadian: I gotta say, I really enjoyed writing the argument between the vampires. Hastrel can be a real pain in the neck. He disagrees with everything anyone says, unless it's the same opinion as his. He's also quite immature, and tends to whine excessively. Everyone who is involved in being around him will most likely have an extreme migraine by the time he is out of there life.

mALX: thanks for the kind words! And about the screenshots: sometimes it's hard finding them, especially when the character is one that I made up and I can't use an in-game screenshot. It's fun looking for them though, and for some reason, I feel every new character introduced into the story should have a screenshot to go along with them. ( I'm horrible at describing people)

[King Of Beasts]

We out here taking out the trash

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[mALX]

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Cattle prod ...SPEW!!!! ROFL !!!! Hastrel and Jakben over the wine had me dying laughing! LOVED this !!!! Once again your dialogue has rocked this chapter! Now Seridur and Vicente ... I am LOVING this story!!! Awesome Write!


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[King Of Beasts]

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Cattle prod ...SPEW!!!! ROFL !!!! Hastrel and Jakben over the wine had me dying laughing! LOVED this !!!! Once again your dialogue has rocked this chapter! Now Seridur and Vicente ... I am LOVING this story!!! Awesome Write!


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Thanks! I enjoy writing the story, and I'm glad you like it. If you have any advice you want to share feel free to share it, because I need it, and it would be a big help.

[King Of Beasts]

mALX: Thanks for reading! I wonder where everyone went, in guessing to visit other family members because of Christmas. I'm glad you like my story, I'm not the best writer though.

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[King Of Beasts]

No

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[mALX]

" Stop dying on the floor lad! One of us has to climb up there to get the key."

ROFL!!! I will try to keep up with your story while I am out of town, but all depends on what is going on here whether I can or not - just know I will catch up when I get home or whenever possible before then.

If your readership is dropping, you may think about slowing down posting a bit and give people time to read before posting the next chapter. I usually post 1 chapter every 4 -5 days (about once per week), and a good chapter length is between 1,000-2,000 words per chapter. That keeps readers from getting burned out, it is important to keep your reader's comfort in mind with your posting schedule.

[King Of Beasts]

I've rewritten the ending of this chapter because I hated the original one.

[Acadian]

What a pair the two vampires make with all their arguing! The plan to get Westley out of the city didn’t pan out too well. You really cranked up the tension as we learn that Ben has been turned to the dark side and Westley learns to control his inner wolf.

[King Of Beasts]

mALX: Thanks for the advice! I hadn't thought about that. Been a bit busy lately but I enjoy writing my fanfic, and when I enjoy something I tend to rush through it.

Acadian: Thanks for reading. The forums seem somewhat....dead. I don't often see many users online so it's nice to actually have someone read my story ( I hate and like my story at the same time so I'm a bit surprised when people actually read it.)

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[King Of Beasts]

Absolute disgust

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[King Of Beasts]

Wish I could delete threads I started

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[Elisabeth Hollow]

SWEEEET, they're gonna go kick Vokun's butt!

[mALX]

I loved both the Hircine screens/pictures - especially the one of Hircine himself - Awesome job! The drawing of the wolf pack was grossly well done, lol. Awesome chapter update !!!

[Acadian]

That was a well-done meeting with Hircine. I’m glad Westley didn’t kill a unicorn as an offering. So, Westley’s small army is off to take on Wolfsbane Castle to help out poor Ben.