Not Really Elder Scrolls related..... Options

[Wolfie]

Ok so this isn't Elder Scrolls related but it's a good story written by Romana (or Romana Elen if your know her from the ES forums)

Mixed Emotions


Amy tried to scream again in the pitch-black car trunk. Her wrists and legs were tied tautly with rough rope. Tears streamed down her face as she tried to struggle free. The car sped down the road with Tom gripping the wheel. Amy gave up trying to scream and escape and broke into fresh tears. She could hear the pelting of the rain and hailstones from outside.
If only I hadn’t come.

“Amy, please, I just want to talk. I was an idiot,” Tom said, begging her.
“I know. You are an idiot.” Amy replied stonily turning away.
“Please, you know you’re everything to me.”
“Why are you doing this?” Amy had started to cry. Tom hated seeing her cry.
“Just five minutes, I’ll try and explain” he turned her cheek to face him. “I love you.”

Tom at the front of the car stepped down on the brakes suddenly. She was thrown against the inside roof of the trunk. Tom’s heart was beating fast and he was confused. He covered his face with his hands and wiped the small tears that had started to form.

“You’re cute.” Amy said laughing.
“Huh? Wha-”Tom asked confused. Amy reached over and pecked him on the cheek. He put his arms around her and held her close kissing her lips.
Tom got out of the car and went to the trunk, opening it roughly. The hailstones had stopped and the rain had started to ease. The moon illuminated the sky and a few frosty clouds hung in the sky. It was a beautiful night. He looked at Amy and his eyes softened, but they hardened soon again and he reached out and took her in both of his arms.

Tom glared at Amy across the room. She had turned around to talk to the guy behind her and was laughing and smiling. Hatred and anger filled him. Then she gathered up her books, and waited for the guy to walk her to class. Tom just stared, and when they left he got up and left the school.

Amy was soon in Tom’s arms and she kicked and tried screaming again. She glared up at him hatefully but he just looked on. Her kicking did nothing not even annoy him. They were in the middle of nowhere. Panic flooded Amy’s mind and she started to sweat. What was he going to do? Was he going to try again? She had left her phone on the locker beside her bed. She silently cursed and started crying again.

“What are you doing?” She asked annoyed, pushing Tom slightly away. Tom just looked peeved and pushed her down, pinning her to the bed. She tried pushing him away and screaming. Her friends had warned her, who would have thought they would have been right? He covered her mouth with his hands and pinned her down harder.

Tom continued to carry her towards the trees but she had started to kick harder. He cursed almost dropping her. She fell and he kicked her picking her up again. He carried her towards the river and set her down by the side. Tom looked at her crying. She looked so helpless. He still loved her and felt immense grief and guilt.

“I can’t believe you, you’re such a jerk. Do you have any idea what you’ve done to me?” Amy shouted attempting to hit him but broke down into tears again.
“I’m so sorry, please believe me,” Tom said crying. He loved her; he didn’t want to lose her. The one thing they had in common was pain and the one thing they shared was each other. He didn’t want that to change for anything, ever.

Tom bent down and took of the gag tied around her mouth. She tried to scream as he had expected and quickly covered her mouth.
“Look we can sort this out, I tried to make you listen but you wouldn’t”
“I can’t beeping believe you, do you know that? I hate you. I HATE you!” she shouted trying to force her free.
“Don’t say that, I know you don’t mean it,” He said getting angry.
“After everything we’ve done together, after all I told you and how much I loved you, you still do that to me? You’re disgusting. You’re sick and you need help!”
“Shut up! Would you just beeping shut up!” His head was clouded with so many things.

“Here,” Tom shyly gave Amy her Christmas present.
“And here you go” said Amy laughing. It was their fourth date and it was perfect. So was their relationship.
“You know, I was so depressed before I met you, I’m so happy now” He put his arm around her and she turned to kiss him.

Amy looked up at him. Even after everything she still loved him. But she knew it was over and nothing was left.
“It’s over and you know it is,” she whispered. Tom’s face contorted and he knew he had to do what he had come out here to do. He put his hand around her neck and started to choke her. She kicked him violently but once again, she was completely under his control but she wasn’t going down without a fight. She scratched at his face leaving long dark red marks down his cheeks. She couldn’t breath anymore and started to cough. Finally she lay limply on the ground. Tom stared at her and took out his knife. He sliced at the soft skin on his left wrist, covering the veins. He screamed in pain and attempted to drag Amy to the river. With one last try he pushed Amy into the river and fell in with her, the water washing away all the blood.

This was originally posted on http://www.setbb.com/phpbb/index.php?mforum=pushtrak

[Sinder Velvin]

[quote=LoneWolf]Ok so this isn't Elder Scrolls related but it's a good story written by Romana (or Romana Elen if your know her from the ES forums)
[/quote]

No offense, but do you have her permission to post it here?

[Wolfie]

Yes indeed i did. I asked her first

[Sinder Velvin]

[quote=LoneWolf]Yes indeed i did. I asked her first[/quote]

That's good.

[Wolfie]

so what do you think of the story? i told her i'd get her some feedback

[minque]

I think this young lady has a good sense of drama, really she has and I think she can make a complete story of it, just add some background info about Tom and Amy, what has happened before ? what events lead to this situation?..and it would be just awesome

In fact it´s very well written, good usage of language, good flow....The flashbacks are really good, so I would like to read more of her work!

You can tell her that I liked it very much and that I think she definitely has a gret potential...... :goodjob:

[Wolfie]

cool i'll let her know once she gets online
Thanks Minque

[OverrideB1]

Very interesting story. She certainly has a flair for the dramatic tale, good use of flashbacks too. I agree with Minque that the story is too damn' short ~ I'd like to have read more of it.

The only critical comment I would make is that there isn't enough character development ~ which is simply because the story is so short. Please note, I'm not criticising the length of the story ~ I suspect that my wish for more character development is a function of wishing the story was longer. (I like long stories ~ if you hadn't guessed )

I hope you can persuade Romana to post more stories...

[Wolfie]

cool thanks for that Override. I just passed on your post to her
She has another earlier piece too. I could post it if ou want. It's another short story though

[DarkHunter]

Ummm... I must say... even with all the evil my Morrowind Character did I've never (ever, not even after watching all the Dawn of the Dead movies) been this disturbed by a story... creepy man.