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Mazelure
post May 26 2006, 09:37 PM
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Abyss


God how much I love this… how they scream… how they beg for mercy… as there lives are slowly consumed by darkness… they twist and turn to try and lighten the pain… but it is always in vain…

Abyss could hear the bones of the small boy crack… his agony filled screams sounded like magnificent notes of music to Abyss’s ears … the boy cried… the boy begged… the boy died… but only after an eternity of torture and pain…

Abyss loved killing children more than anything else in the world… even more than killing infants… infants could only cry and whine… but children… children begged for they’re mothers and fathers… they cry out for help even if they are alone and no one is around to listen… they scream out in complete anguish and cry tears of horror when Abyss stared them in the eyes… and the kid Abyss just got finish killing was of no exception… he begged and cried… he bleed and he died… nothing is more beautiful than the passing of life…

A guard heard the screams of the small boy before he died… he came running to the direction where he last heard them… and instead of finding a boy in need of help… he found a monster toying with a dead corpse…

“By the Divines”… was all the guard could muster… before Abyss descended on him… the screams of the guard were not as sweet and as pretty of the one’s of the boy…but it did just fine for Abyss…

Abyss extended his left arm… and the tattoo in his arm came to life… it moved through the air like a shadow with the edge of the sharpest of daedric weapons… it pierced through the guard’s throat… and then it came back around and pierced through the guards marvelous bone mold armor and through his kidney… so he would bleed to death… and no matter how much he tried to scream to lighten the pain… he could not… instead Abyss just heard little bubbly sounds coming from the guards mouth…

The guard’s corpse fell on the stone floor… Abyss stared at it for a while… absorbing the beauty of death… and then he started walking down the stony path towards the center of Suran…

He took a step… and then he heard the sound of wood breaking… he looked down to see a broken lute… a once beautiful lute… he had forgotten all about it… he was having to much fun torturing the child that he forgot that the child was holding on to a lute the entire time Abyss was killing him…

Abyss threw one last look at the child’s lifeless corpse… there was not a drop of the child’s blood in him… it was splattered all over the wall of the city and the stony floor… not to mention the blood splattered all over his exquisite pitch black pants…

He looked at the beautiful night sky… and took a deep breath… “This is going to be fun”… Abyss thought… and then he started marching towards the heart of the village to destroy all life that exsisted in it… to slowly bleed the life out of this city’s beating heart…



Man I haven’t written a story like this for a while now… I think I am going to enjoy writing it… anyways… like always I would appreciate some criticism and to know if you like this story… or the character… by the way this picks of where A DEAD MAN'S TALE left off... and yes... that was the small boy from the other story who played his lute for the old man... am I evil or what?...

Kudos Mazelure… Kudos

P.S. The character's name is Abyss... kinda weird I know... but I like it...


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post May 26 2006, 10:24 PM
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QUOTE(Mazelure @ May 26 2006, 08:37 PM)
P.S. The character's name is Abyss... kinda weird I know...  but I like it...
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No stranger than what the character likes to do for fun. ohmy.gif

Very creepy man, I like it. It was pretty strange killing the kid from your last story but you know...it fits the mood. Anyways please continue soon.


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post May 27 2006, 02:06 AM
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I had to kill the kid from the other story... he knew to damn much... but in reality I kinda come up with this stuff up as I go... like yesterday I knew I was going to start a fan fic about this guy... but I had no clue that he was going to kill the boy and destroy the city of Suran... plus I needed to prove how evil this guy truly is by showing that he would kill a innocent little child... and his atrocities get bloodier and bloodier as the story unfolds... well at least that is what I'm hoping for...

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post May 27 2006, 02:18 AM
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ohmy.gif That guys a monster... oh right...

You know what would be funny? The Neravine coming and killing him later tongue.gif


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post May 27 2006, 02:24 AM
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Actually that was one of my original thoughts... since I needed someone to defeat the ultimate evil guy... but then I said... na... this takes several years after the nereverines death or whatever... so I'm going to let this guy run wild for a bit... or something... I'm not quite sure what to do after this... I gotta go and brainstorm a little...


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post May 27 2006, 04:18 AM
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ummmm... theres just one little thing... The Neravine Can't die...

But yeah you can have someone else kill Abyss there tongue.gif


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post May 27 2006, 05:01 AM
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Hey man... who said anything about him dying... maybe he might be stoped... but not killed... did you think of that possability?... actually I dont want to say anything more... I'll come back and update on this story when I have it all figured out...


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post May 27 2006, 06:18 PM
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Mmmm Mmmmm children killing. tongue.gif


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post May 28 2006, 05:10 AM
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Alright I think I have the story figgured out... to a certain point... so here is what I got so far...


Abyss


Abyss laughed uncontrollably… his laughter boomed inside the head’s of his victims like thunder… his smooth but terrifying voice was enough to make the blood of his victims stop cold… and as they laid their eyes upon him… all became petrified with fear… with unimaginable fear…

Abyss was completely drenched with blood… his pitch black pants now looked scarlet red… and even his eyes were consumed by his bloodlust… his eyes once being a bizarre gray now transformed to a fierce red…

The sun was now coming up… he looked at the devastated town of Suran one last time… it’s houses and shops were burning to the ground… the smell of burning flesh filled the air… and the river near the city ran red with the blood of the dead…

Abyss started to chuckle… he chuckled since he knew that Vivec’s water will be tainted red by tomorrow… he could imagine the terrified looks of the priest as they will gaze into the gooey red water… and how they would all prey to their false god…

Abyss was now entering the Daedric Ruin that belonged to his father… Molog Bal… he walked pass his father’s worshippers and down the dark and sinister corridors of the ruin… he reached the last room with the giant statue of his father’s image… and Abyss sat down in one the corners of the dark lair… he slowly yawned as he saw his father’s priest approached him…

“Did you have a good time mighty one?” she try to say with her most tender voice… because the fact was that Abyss terrified her to her very core… he was nothing more than a monster of unimaginable evil that haunted her very soul…

“A good time… yes… a great time… no… no matter how many villages I burn… or how many lives I claim… the joy never lasts long enough…” Abyss said with his calm and mesmerizing yet sinister voice…

“I’m sorry for your discontent mighty one…”

“No you’re not… well at least not yet…” Abyss coldly said… he was now getting up from his corner and growing closer to the frighten priestess… his tattoo on his left wrist came to life… this time it consumed his entire arm… it covered his left hand so it looked as if it was pitch black… and then a giant dark claws replace the human fingers that where there once before… he kept getting closer and closer to her… step by step…

She started walking backwards until her back hit the dark wall of the lair… her heart was consumed with despair and beating gallons of blood at a time… her voice had disappeared from her throat… replace by panicking little shrieks of terror… Abyss was now an inch away from her… he stared her right in the eyes and raised his claw up in the air… but before he could bring it down with all his might…

“What do you think you are doing… you are the son of the great Molog Bal… not the son of the wretched Mehrunes Dagon… how dare you raise your filthy little hand against your mother!”

“Calm down father… I was just having a little fun… I wasn’t going to kill her… just frighten her a little…” Abyss said while backing away from his terrified mother… and staring up at the statue of his father that had come to life… he could not help but chuckle in the inside…

“I don’t know what to do with you sometimes… you already destroyed yet another town… even banishing you to oblivion for a century was not enough for you…”

Abyss stood in the darkness of the ruin all day long… listening to his father nag and nag… until he had enough… until he could contain his lust for destruction no more…

“That is it father… all you ever do is complain… I guess it’s time for me to put you out of your misery…” Abyss proclaimed with a dark and sinister voice…

“You little fetcher…” was all the mighty statue was able to say before Abyss destroyed it…

Abyss raised his right arm and the demonic tattoo came to life… it took the form of a giant dark scimitar connected to a pitch black chain… he threw it with all his might at the giant statue… it reduce the statue’s head to a pile of rubble… before returning to it’s masters arm as a tattoo…

Abyss turned around and looked once again at his terrified mother… his left arm took the form of a dark claw once again… the priestess backed against the wall for a second time… but this time around there was nothing or no one to stop Abyss from his fun…

He raised his claw and let it come down… he loved how it felt… how it feels when your bare hand cuts through flesh and bone… when blood gushes out and splatters all over the place…

He sat in the darkness of the ruin… watching and absorbing the beauty of death… until his mother’s heart was drained of life… until not a single drop of blood was left in the corpse… the corpse that stared at him from the darkness… with cold dead eyes…


I kinda think this chapter sucks... but wether it is good or bad depends on you... tell me if you liked it... or if I went overboard with it... I would appreciate that alot... I would also request that everyone who reads this tells me how they feel about Abyss... the character...


Kudos... Kudos

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post May 28 2006, 12:58 PM
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Oh dear, Abyss is certainly a bad little monkey. tongue.gif Not wise to get on Molag Bals bad side, even if he is a relative. I certainly hope that soon somebody shows up and tries to stop this Abyss before he kills anymore innocents. Another good job Maze.


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post May 28 2006, 02:33 PM
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ohmy.gif ohmy.gif This should be amusing... Malog Bal is going to STEP ON HIM!
laugh.gif Killing his mother wasn't the smartest thing to do... especially since Malog (our dear friend) can just have her stand back up and go on with living...


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post May 30 2006, 10:45 PM
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This is going to be a short update… since I am currently tied up working on a video game plot and with RP… so my updates are going to be rather short from now on… but I do hope you get to enjoy this little update…


Abyss


Molog Bal was furious… he was not going to tolerate his son’s behavior any longer… he had already destroyed two villages with no reason other than for his amusement… he has slayed his own mother and all of Molog Bal’s worshippers… along with his temple and statue made after his own image… Molog Bal felt rage as he has never felt before… and all was directed towards his son… Abyss…

Molog Bal was sitting on his throne… thinking on what to do with his son… should he cast him to Mehrunes Dagon’s realm again?… no… he had enjoyed his last visit there and came back with an even bigger appetite for destruction… Molog Bal was running out of ideas… until one hit him… he sat in his magnificent sinister throne… admiring at his cunning plan for two whole human days… two whole day that Abyss used for the destruction and annihilation of all living life…


This update kinda send events into motion… well you will see later on… until then…

Kudos… Kudos


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post May 30 2006, 11:03 PM
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ohmy.gif What's Malog going to do? Lock him in a room and use his Deadric powers to make stone people that can't be hurt? Have all of Abyss' victims rise from the grave and kill him? Something even more evil?

Nice to see that even a Deadra Prince can be angry... mellow.gif


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post May 30 2006, 11:37 PM
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They can get angry... and very angry at that... Abyss is going to find out the hard way how it feels to bare the wrath of a god upon his shoulders... and by the way you are close to what is going to happen to Abyss... keep guessing and I bet you will get it right...


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post May 30 2006, 11:49 PM
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send him to oblivion all by himself without anything else to fight with?

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post May 31 2006, 03:11 AM
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QUOTE(Mazelure @ May 30 2006, 10:37 PM)
They can get angry... and very angry at that... Abyss is going to find out the hard way how it feels to bare the wrath of a god upon his shoulders... and by the way you are close to what is going to happen to Abyss... keep guessing and I bet you will get it right...
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Lol, doubt we'll guess. laugh.gif

We'll just have to wait until you can continue to find out...hopefully not too long.


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post May 31 2006, 10:02 PM
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Alright... let's see if anyone guessed right...


Abyss


Abyss was just getting finish torturing the last living being in the city of Balmora… the poor creature’s screams filled the night air… she twist and turned to lighten the pain… but it was all in vain… she begged and she cried… she bleed and she died… nothing is more beautiful than the passing of life…

Abyss stood up… he looked at the night sky and took a deep breath… he slowly started to levitate into the dark air… two mighty fireballs started to form in his palms… they grew to an enormous size… he looked down at the ruined city to absorb the beauty of death and destruction… the city looked more like a lake of blood than anything else… with the exemptions of the tall buildings… the buildings where going to be his targets for now… he hurled one of the gigantic fireballs at one of the buildings… it exploded and rubble came crushing down on top of corpses of the dead that decorated the city’s streets…

Abyss let out a smile… he lifted his hand once more…. he was getting ready to hurl another mighty fireball at the tallest remaining building… but then he saw something in the corner of his eye… a living creature?… how could it be… he hunted down every living being within the city… o well it seem like he was going to have some more fun… or so he thought…

He stared at the creature… and the longer he stared at it… the more he recognized it… Abyss was staring at himself!… the creature lifted his hand and aimed at Abyss… a giant fireball builded in his palm… and then the fireball went flying directly at Abyss with unimaginable speed… then came the huge explosion… and afterwards the silence of the night…


Muahahahaha… I told you that daedric gods/goddesses could be angered… by the way when Abyss saw himself… he really didn’t… it was more like someone who looked the complete opposite of him… the skin was pitch black… and the tattoos were silvery white… so yeah… I hope you like what Molog Bal came up with… ok more like what I came up with… but you get the point…

Kudos… Kudos


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post May 31 2006, 10:36 PM
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So thats the end then? Destroyed by his opposite for angering his god. I guess you can only be evil and powerful for so long before you get what you deserve, unless you're a politician of course... laugh.gif

Anyways great update Mazelure, cheers. goodjob.gif


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post May 31 2006, 10:52 PM
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laugh.gif those politicians.... Hmmm I have a feeling that Abyss isn't dead yet. But there's no way to Kill a Deadra Prince so... Abyss is in trouble...

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post May 31 2006, 11:10 PM
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You are right my good friend... he is not dead... actauly he is far from dead... and I dont know... maybe there is a way to kill a god... or maybe just stop him... anyways that is all I am willing to say...


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