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post Jan 5 2007, 09:59 PM
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Alas, I couldn't wait for Agent to finish before I began my next story. Oh, curse me, all of you whose blood shall be spilled before this story comes to an end.

Ahem, I don't expect my loyal readers to complain though. Heh, I hope I managed to portray the first of my main characters nicely. And one last thing that might be interesting to know. This story takes place before the birth of Luper. So yes, that means at least 23 years before any of my other stories. Now, without further stalling I present:


Corrupted heart.

Chapter 1: Among the cold dirt, the fallen lie.

Consciousness flickered, remaining just out of reach. His senses delivered their messages to his clouded mind, broken fragments of a greater whole. The sound of heavy boots hammering cold rock, the smell of dust in his nose, the feeling of being carried in a boneshattering grip. A taste, plaguing the tip of his tongue. Blood, his blood.

The feeling of movement stopped. Words now echoed in his ears, words he did not comprehend.
,,This looks good enough. Open the door.” The shriek of rusted metal being moved ripped through the haze clouding his mind. Now consciousness returned fully and with it, a chance. For a moment, he continued to feign unconsciousness. Long enough to hear more words, words not meant for him.
,,You, don’t move unless you want even greater problems.” The hands holding him pushed him along. His tail brushed against iron bars. Now was the time.

With the frightening grace of a natural killer, his muscles sprang back to full readiness. He used the body of his captor to swing around, somersaulting into the air and landing on the unfortunate man’s back. With a quick swipe, claws ripped out the man’s throat and crushed his neck. Even before the man began to lose his signs of life, the killer had leapt away. The next guard found himself smashed against the iron bars of the cell. Claws leaving a trail of blood in the air where the last thing the man saw before his eyes were removed. He too died soon afterwards. The whole event had taken less than a second from start to finish.

Breathing heavily from both his exertion and the rough treatment he’d received earlier, the killer stared down at his latest victims. In a slow symbolic movement, he raised his claws and licked them clean of blood, savouring the taste. His ears began to pick up the sound of distant boots coming steadily closer. A standard patrol. His hand snatched the nearby torch from the wall and he slammed the piece of wood into a dusty pool of water. There was a large cloud of smoke and then, darkness.

Even though there was practically no light left, his eyes still saw as good as if he was standing outside on a clear day. He quickly scanned the nearby cells. The one which had been destined for him was already occupied by the short stature of a Bosmer. The one directly on the opposite side of the tunnel was occupied by a muscular Dunmer who looked around warily, not seeing a thing. The killer took a double take on the two beings. While the Dunmer displayed all the expected signs of fear, the Bosmer surprisingly acted as if she hadn’t noticed the massacre at all. She just looked at the ground in front of her bare feet with a blank stare.
,,Must have lost its mind so deep underground.” The Killer concluded. He knew from experience that many Bosmer were extremely claustrophobic and hated being in a room without any windows or underground. A natural result from living in the treetops of Valenwood.

The boots had now gotten close. Soon, the owner of these boots would see the darkness ahead and know that something was wrong. By then though, it would be too late. The Killer crouched at the edge of the darkness, confident in the natural camouflage he had. Now the guard ventured into view and the killer’s heart skipped a beat. This was no guard. The fingers of fear reached out for him, embracing him with their cold touch. It was a feeling he hadn’t felt since childhood. The darkness in the tunnel was vanquished by a bright burst of light. With that same burst, the light in his eyes faded and he slipped into unconsciousness once more.

An armoured boot stomped on the ground beside his head.
,,You’ve missed your chance. Enjoy the blood you’ve claimed. They were your last kill.” A gruff voice said as the killer was picked up and taken to his cell.


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jack cloudy   Corrupted heart.   Jan 5 2007, 09:59 PM
canis216   Niiiice!   Feb 24 2007, 10:06 PM
minque   Ahhh... so many updates......good grief! Took ...   Feb 25 2007, 01:02 PM
jack cloudy   And the next chapter. Chapter 4: The keepers o...   Feb 26 2007, 09:15 PM
The Metal Mallet   A worthy portrayal of the Ashlander belief, jack. ...   Feb 26 2007, 11:12 PM
Black Hand   Go Aran! My God, I love this Ashlander! Th...   Feb 27 2007, 01:37 AM
jack cloudy   Ah, the Ashlanders. They're such interesting p...   Mar 6 2007, 10:18 PM
The Metal Mallet   Oooo, cryptic. I wonder who's lurking in the ...   Mar 7 2007, 04:07 AM
jack cloudy   Aran sat on his room’s bed, his legs folded undern...   Mar 10 2007, 09:34 PM
The Metal Mallet   .... And the journey begins. Cue the epic travell...   Mar 11 2007, 12:04 AM
jack cloudy   And do you know what else travelling does? It prov...   Mar 12 2007, 09:48 PM
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jack cloudy   Short one! A scorpion crawled out from under...   Mar 14 2007, 09:27 PM
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canis216   Aye, the khajiit is indeed cunning, diabolical, de...   Mar 15 2007, 12:41 AM
Dire Cheesecake   Hm, he's also a bit of a cocky punk though isn...   Mar 15 2007, 05:20 AM
jack cloudy   No update, I need to work it out first. All I wan...   Mar 15 2007, 09:29 PM
jack cloudy   I should've known that this would be a bit har...   Mar 20 2007, 10:08 PM
The Metal Mallet   There's always plenty of material to use with ...   Mar 21 2007, 03:00 AM
Black Hand   Sorry for the lack of postings Jack! I have be...   Mar 22 2007, 07:19 AM
jack cloudy   Yet another storyline? Maybe. And I'll get an ...   Mar 23 2007, 10:38 PM
The Metal Mallet   Hmmm, Novis seems to be quite the mouthy fellow. ...   Mar 24 2007, 12:18 AM
minque   Sweet Jackie! Very good writing as always........   Mar 24 2007, 06:06 PM
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jack cloudy   Hmm, I had serious trouble with the next scene so ...   Apr 4 2007, 09:38 PM
karpik777   Great update as always! Oh, and about the batt...   Apr 4 2007, 09:55 PM
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Lord Revan   Yes, we all know about that series. The Moral, we...   Apr 10 2007, 10:27 PM
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The Metal Mallet   Tactful and vicious, not good traits for a bad guy...   Apr 14 2007, 03:18 PM
jack cloudy   That's the charm of him. The way I made him, h...   Apr 25 2007, 02:41 PM
jack cloudy   And more killing. Grumble, why can't I seem to...   Apr 27 2007, 10:03 PM
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jack cloudy   Edit: Could anyone give me some more information o...   May 18 2007, 01:48 PM
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