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| The Metal Mallet |
 Mar 12 2007, 10:44 PM
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Wow, you've been really popping these updates out quickly. These aren't even short ones either! It's very impressive.
Keep it up, man. I'm liking this! -------------------- I am currently a Writer in The Order of Schola.
Official Fan Fiction Forum "Commentasaurus" "This body, holding me makes me feel eternal. All this pain is an illusion" - Parabola (Tool) "This here ain't called boasting, it's called truthin' " - Mango Kid (Danko Jones) |
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| ShogunSniper |
Mar 13 2007, 02:43 AM
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yeah thanks. i'm really not planning as i go though... its odd.
like for example, it was originally written that sadril snapped the bretons neck, but i forgot that the way i want things to happen, he would have had another episode like with ardarume... which would reveal much more of the plot than i have developed as of yet  -------------------- War is over if you want it.
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| Dire Cheesecake |
Mar 13 2007, 10:48 AM
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Wow this is an extremely good story. Are you a serious writer? You're better than the ones working on Oblivion.
 Hey, it's a good thing you caught that thing about killing the Breton. At least for me, gross inconsistencies tend to ruin stories. |
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| jack cloudy |
Mar 14 2007, 09:34 PM
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 Master Joined: 11-February 06 From: In a cold place. |
I think we have another postmachine here, folks. Good work!
-------------------- Fabulous hairneedle attack! I'm gonna be bald before I hit twenty.
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| Dire Cheesecake |
May 1 2007, 10:04 AM
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So, I guess there won't be any more of this story.
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| The Metal Mallet |
May 3 2007, 10:28 PM
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Master Joined: 18-June 06 From: Kitchener, ON, Canada |
Well it seems that currently Shogun hasn't been able to visit our site lately. The only reason I could see him doing that is either computer troubles or just that things at home are really busy.
I'm sure he'll eventually make his way back to the forums and hopefully continue this story. It would be great to see this one continue. -------------------- I am currently a Writer in The Order of Schola.
Official Fan Fiction Forum "Commentasaurus" "This body, holding me makes me feel eternal. All this pain is an illusion" - Parabola (Tool) "This here ain't called boasting, it's called truthin' " - Mango Kid (Danko Jones) |
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| ShogunSniper |
May 14 2007, 01:13 AM
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i am surprised to see this remains on the front page.
im afraid my absence is not defined by either troubles of the computer nor busy-ness of life. my leave is one of laziness and carelessness. the story will continue, but i cannot say when for certain. criticism is sure to boost my motivation though This post has been edited by ShogunSniper: May 14 2007, 03:44 AM -------------------- War is over if you want it.
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| Dire Cheesecake |
May 14 2007, 04:43 AM
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Criticism huh? Hm...It's a good story, but the lack of further chapters keeps it from living up to it's potential. I think you could make it allot better if there was more quantity to it.
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| ShogunSniper |
May 14 2007, 09:09 PM
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so... the only thing wrong with it is there is not enough of it?
well not the only thing... but the biggest problem i presume? there is never enough of a good thing. like songs. i hate it when a band does a song that sends chills down your spine, but its like 2 minutes long.... like eleanor rigby.... i will add more hopefully in the coming week. -------------------- War is over if you want it.
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| Dire Cheesecake |
May 14 2007, 11:49 PM
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Well I'm sure there are a few other things wrong with it as is always the case but I'm not that good at critisizing stories, especially those I like. Give me a game and I could critisize the hell out of it. I could explain every reason why I find Oblivion to be a disapointment, but stories are different.
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