The tales of a ogre, and a ring magical ring. Options

[Badda-Tish]

This is my first TES fan fic ever.
Please tell me what you think of it and how I can improve it.
I don´t really know much about TES ogres but they can form tribe society so I guess they can communicate in some way.
It is about a young ogre who was out on a walk and got lost.
They way he is special is that he is very smart for a ogre and very big for his age.


In the lands of Cyrodiil a ogre were born, he was very special.
When he turned 15 he was the chieftans favorite brawler, just beacuse he was big as a fully grown ogre already and that he had won many battles against other ogre tribes, marauders and one or two goblins.
He was called Ugrogg the Breaka'.

Part 1.

"Me hungry". Ugrogg thought when he heard a small growl from his belly, but he kept on going until he stopped near a lake to drink some water. While he was drinking he saw something shiny under the waters surface.
"Uuuh... Wads dat"? He said to himself and picked it up. It was a ring. He didn´t know what it was but it was shiny so he put it in his little (big in human standards) pouch.
What else he didn´t know that the ring had some magical proportion.
His belly growled a bit more and Ugrogg was so hungry that he swallowed the ring just to eat something.
"Me so hungry, me so hungry". He complained while he was walking by the river, he heard a scream and turned around.
A little girl saw Ugrogg and sat hidden in some bushes to scared to even breath right now, luckily for her Ugrogg couldn´t see her beacuse the sun was so bright that he coulnd´t see anything at the little girls direction but his nose sniffed her up.
He started running towards the smell and grabbed the little girl by her wrist and swallowed her whole.
"Tasty, maybe theres more food around ere' somewere". He said to himself.
Some trees blocked the sun and he saw he had walked right into a small settlement, everyone were staring at him. They were chocked that he ate the little girl.
"It is my lucky day today! Tasty food, ere' I come!" He ran as fast as he could towards the crowd and everyone ran different ways, he was to slow to react and wondered wich one he would eat first but that took some time for his slow mind.
He let out a big roar when he saw everyone had ran away when he was done thinking.
"Those litte puny food got away from me!" He was so angry that he had to stop and think what he would do next. He ate some carrots from the crops field and some tobacco from another.
So the ogre kept walking by the river again and he felt a intense pain from his belly and dropped to his knees and throwed up.
And suddenly the little girl was lying infront of him, the ring and the carrots and the tobacco was also found on the ground.
The ring was glowing with a green light that were hard to see during the day.
"Da shiny thing glows". He said and didn´t notice that the girl ran away.
"I wonder what it does". He wondered.
He tried to put it on his smallest finger but it didn´t so he placed it in his pouch again.
He drank some more water and then ate the carrots he had thrown-up and Continued his search for food.

This post has been edited by Badda-Tish: Feb 15 2009, 09:53 PM

[granslacker14]

it was um...intesting ill give u that

[ureniashtram]

umm....yeahhh,,,,that was,,good <i think>anyhoo that was good man keep it up dud