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post Nov 26 2010, 12:41 AM
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Again a familiar segment, with some improvements. I really enjoyed meeting Alix yet again in this story, as well as Sir Salvius.

As for the licking, it is not something I've observed as being natural for horses to do - rather, it is an acquired behavior and seems to happen mostly where the owner/handler offers the horse treats on a regular basis, then finds the licking for more treats so charming the horse starts doing it as a behavior to elicit treats or other signs of favor from the handler. Makes me wonder who's training whom.

Some horses will do it on their own, but I've seen it mostly in those horses that expect treats every time they interact with people. It's simple Pavlovian reflex. Many horsemasters (not horsemen) discourage treats and licking because it is such a thin line between licking (or lipping) and biting, which is not acceptable with people, as it so easily can become dangerous. I have heard stories of stallions biting fingers off their handlers because they were encouraged/permitted in the licking/lipping behavior. I've never been consistent with treats, and I only provide treats after a good ride, not every time I interact with the horse, so they don't lick me. They also don't crowd around me in the pasture (another inherently dangerous situation) because I don't encourage it. I learned this from friends who have kept stallions for many years, and also learned this from a stallion who was more mouthy than usual. He learned very quickly from me that that kind of behavior was not tolerated, though we enjoyed each other's company quite well (I was his vet student for two weeks, and spent quite a bit of time grooming him and hitting all his itchy spots). He respected me enough to quit with the lipping/nipping business within a day. But he still pulled that crap on other vet students who didn't know better or were easily intimidated by him.

From the forum you sent me to, I figure that most of the horses mentioned here are accustomed to treats every time they interact with people, hence the Pavlovian reflex. And these folks doing the postings think it's cute, where I see dangerous situations everywhere, because it is such a fine line between being mouthy (i.e. licking or lipping) and nipping/biting. And if you've ever been bit by a horse, you know it's not pleasant!

I just figure Valfreya would know better than to allow her horse to lick at her face, as it can lead to a dangerous situation with him. I have a hard time seeing an experienced horsewoman/horsemaster (as I would assume Valfreya to be) allowing such a dangerous situation to develop with her horse, especially since they are out in the wilderness on their own.

My own horses had their own ways of showing affection, and one of their favorites was rubbing their heads on me, and another was sticking their noses in my face and blowing on me (but not nipping or licking). Blowing on each other's noses is really a way for horses to greet each other. As for mares licking their foals, every mammalian mother does that with their babies - dogs, cats, horses, cattle, etc. Has to do with drying them off after birth. I would call it grooming for that reason.

What is natural for horses sometimes can be hard to differentiate from what comes with training or interactions with people. Feral horses don't lick each other so much, though when grooming they do use their lips and teeth quite a bit (called 'withering') to scratch each other's itchy spots. That is what equine BFF's do with each other. That's how I befriend horses - I find their itchy spots and really dig in. They love me forever for that! My friend's stallion (and my own gelding) enjoyed this habit of mine so much that they would 'present' me with their withers whenever I approached them.

And mALX is right, lipping is a play gesture - and once they grab something, it's game on!

My point is, all the experienced horsemasters I know don't allow their horses to get mouthy (licking, lipping or nipping) with them period. Around the face, absolutely not. And if Valfreya is more than just a legionary on horseback, she also would not allow Justinian to lick her face like that (not to mention that horses don't like sticking their tongues into such narrow slits, either). But there are other ways for Justinian to show his affection for her, like nudging her with his head (as Superian did with Buffy when she wanted water) or blowing into her neck (like mine loved to do).


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post Nov 26 2010, 01:06 AM
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Old business: The little 'song' for Teresa was simply my own vision of one of our elves prancing through a meadow at night. smile.gif


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"I'm Teresa, um, archer, potion-maker, and explorer."
Poor Teresa. At least she didn't say 'um, stringy wood elf and former street urchin at large'. It was great fun being inside her head as she interacted with Alix and Lucius.

This entire episode was a lovely indulgence into description, with far too many delightful passages to quote. Teresa really brings us with her into the forest as she makes her way from the Imperial City to the Faregyl Inn. Staying off the roads makes perfect sense for her (regardless of what the Imperial Legion says about staying on the roads if you've got to travel.)

I'm so pleased you are not rushing Teresa along, but allowing plenty of time for her to pick the flowers and experience Cyrodiil.

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"Abhuki just does not make for a maiden most fair, if you know what I mean."
What's wrong with kissing furry hands? laugh.gif

Next, I hope she will indeed enjoy some of everyone's favorite potato bread. tongue.gif


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post Nov 26 2010, 04:22 AM
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Ah..Faregyl Inn. I love that place, and how easy it was to get those potatoes back from the trolls/ogres/what have you.
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The eyes of the Breton flashed on Teresa. He whispered something to the other man, and suddenly they exploded into furious action.


Sounds like someones about to be competed for...


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post Nov 27 2010, 05:43 PM
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Next: Teresa gets better acquainted with some of the residents of the Faregyl.

Chapter 24.2 – The Faregyl Inn

Within was a storeroom filled with barrels of ale, jugs of wine, sacks of flour, and all manner of jars and crates. Alix quickly navigated through the jumble of goods and led Teresa through another door that brought her into the large kitchen of the inn. Long tables stretched along two of the walls, and a great oven of bricks took up part of a third, flanked by an equally large wood-burning stove. Across the room from the stove were several large chests, which Teresa imagined might be frost-boxes.

Standing at one of the tables chopping carrots was a Khajiit with golden fur. She was dressed in simple tan work-clothes, and her hair was tied up into numerous brass triangles that were held together by brightly-colored ribbons.

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"We have a visitor S'jirra!" Alix proclaimed as Lucius moved past him and through another door. Through its swinging boards Teresa could see what must have been the inn's common room, as it was filled with people eating and drinking. "This is Teresa, and she is someone special I should say."

"Oh my!" The Khajiit turned and her jaw dropped open when she set her eyes upon Teresa. "You look just like her!"

"Ummm, good day." Teresa's eyes darted from the Khajiit to the Breton. Now that his friend was gone, even the swordmaster had begun to stare at her. She took a step back the way she had come. Just what had she walked into? and why were they looking at her like she was a ghost?

"Alix, for a moment this one could have sworn it was her!" S'jirra breathed, her eyes practically glowing as they stared at Teresa.

"Yes, I thought the same thing too," the Breton sighed as he stepped nearer to the Khajiit and put a comforting arm around her. The Khajiit pressed against him. Her head fell to his shoulder, and he dropped his stare to kiss her once on her scalp. If it were not for their strange looks at her, Teresa would have found it to be very sweet and romantic. But instead she felt her hackles rising at the bizarreness of it all.

"Please forgive us, we mean you no harm," Alix said in that soothing voice of the Bretons. "I know this must seem odd, but you look just like our daughter. We have not seen her in years. We do not even know where she is, or how she is."

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"Oh yes, this one is so sorry!" The Khajiit stepped away from the Breton, and with the cat-like quickness of her race she was standing in front of Teresa an instant later. "You must think we are all terribly strange. Please come sit with me while this one makes stew, and we can speak. Alix, get her something to drink, and fetch a stool for this poor girl."

With that the Khajiit was dragging Teresa across the room to a seat that the Breton almost magically produced, followed by a glass of wine. S'jirra herself brought over a loaf of bread which Teresa could see still steamed from the oven. The smell of potatoes filled her nostrils as the Khajiit cut her a piece and offered it to her.

"Here, try some of this one's famous potato bread," she said.

"So, you two have a daughter?" Teresa said, looking from the Breton to the Khajiit. She had no idea that the cat-folk could even have children with the other races.

Then she took a bite of the hot potato bread and for a moment she forgot everything else. The taste in her mouth was far too good to be simply bread. She had scarcely tasted anything so delicious outside of a few stolen sweetrolls, only this was not sweet and sugary. She was not sure exactly what it tasted like, but it was more than just potatoes. She thought there must be spices like rosemary and basil in it as well, but could not be sure. Teresa closed her eyes and savored the bread before swallowing, then chased the lovely flavor with a sip of wine.

"That was incredible!" she breathed afterward, looking at S'jirra, "how did you make that?"

"That is this one's secret," the Khajiit declared. Her ears perked up and tail floated high with pleasure. She looked as if she was almost preening, and something told Teresa that she had said just the right thing.

"People come from near and far for S'jirra's potato-bread," Alix declared with a smile. "Maxical used to love it too. She is our daughter, we adopted her when she was a little kit."

"Oh, so you adopted her," Teresa said. Now things were making more sense. The forester reached for more of the bread, but stopped herself when she realized that she had not asked first. For a moment she was afraid S'jirra would object, but instead the Khajiit beamed with what could only be pride as she pushed the entire loaf of bread in front of her. "I'm an orphan too, I never knew who my real parents were. Is she a wood elf too?"

"Oh no, she is a Khajiit," S'jirra explained as she went back to cutting vegetables and throwing them into a steaming pot over the stove. "But she's snow white, just like you. Except her hair, that's red as fire, same as yours."

"Oh, oh my," Teresa said as her hand reflexively drifted to her scarlet tresses. Somehow that tickled something in the back of her mind, yet she could not place what it was. "I did not know there were white Khajiit?"

"There aren't," Alix answered. "Maxical is one of a kind, that is for sure. The gods broke the mold after they made her."

"And a good thing too, the world could not survive two like that one!" S'jirra laughed as she stirred the pot of stew.

"Did she wear her hair in braids, with a headband?" Teresa thought out loud, wondering why that image had suddenly leaped into her mind.

Teresa heard a crash from behind her, as the clay cup from which Alix had been drinking shattered on the floor. The wood elf nearly jumped from her seat, but the wide-eyed stare that both he and S'jirra gave her made her pause.

"You've seen her!" S'jirra cried. Once again she moved with that blinding Khajiit speed, and just like that she was grasping Teresa by the arms, her eyes pleading for an answer.

"I…" Teresa stammered. She tried to remember where that image - no, that memory - had come from. Then she had it. "It was in the Market District of the Imperial City, at the end of Second Seed."

"Did she say anything? How did she look?" Now Alix was by her side as well, laying his hand upon her shoulder. Under any other circumstances Teresa would have jumped. But the emotion was so raw in their voices, and their eyes such a contrast of sparkling hope and empty dread, that she felt her heart tear itself open for them. Teresa wondered if this was how Simplicia felt when she went into the forts and Ayleid ruins?

"She looked well," Teresa said. It was true, but even if it had not been she would have said the same thing. She could see how much the Breton and Khajiit needed to hear that their daughter was safe and sound. She would not dream of saying otherwise. "She looked muscular. Not big, but she was solid, in good shape, like a fighter."

"It was early in the morning, so there was hardly anyone else on the street." Teresa went on, trying to recapture every moment from her fleeting encounter with the snow white Khajiit. "I saw her hair and I said it looked good on her. I remember she said we looked like twins. I didn't think much of it at the time, but now I see what she meant. Then I walked by, and that was it. Now I wished I had stayed and tried to talk to her more. She seemed… kind, like a good person. Do you know what I mean?"

Then S'jirra was enfolding her in a warm embrace, and Teresa did not know what else to say. Even though she could hear the Khajiit was crying, Teresa had the feeling that her tears were not a bad thing at all.


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post Nov 27 2010, 06:35 PM
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You brought tears to my eyes the first time I read this, it is still just as good. You brought the Faregyl, Alix, and S'Jirra to life. Teresa is as dear and deep a character as anyone could create - Awesome Write Sage Rosa !!! Just Awesome!!!


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post Nov 27 2010, 08:05 PM
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I remember when I first read this that it was one of the best crossovers I've ever read (and there's been quite a few, if EYE may say so cool.gif ). I still feel that way - you've captured Maxical's spirit through Teresa's interactions with her adoptive parents. Beautiful!


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post Nov 28 2010, 02:00 AM
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I've said it before - Perhaps young wood elves are at their best when used as vessels to bring out the wonderful nature of those around them. Teresa certainly does that here. A delightful episode, and beautifully done.

Thanks for the yummy 'tato bread and wine! tongue.gif

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"She looked well," Teresa said. It was true, but even if it had not been she would have said the same thing.
Even if it had not been true. . . You made this one smile at the young elf's wisdom and consideration for others.

Since much of Maxical is written in first person, it was neat to get Teresa's impression of her as a tough little scrapper. We tend to forget sometimes that she is quite the little swordskitty - and in Alix, we are reminded where she gets it.


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post Nov 29 2010, 05:57 AM
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You too have a daughter?


laugh.gif A good chapter. You brought those characters to life in a way that the game never can. Good job.


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post Nov 29 2010, 05:17 PM
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All: This was one of my favorite chapters to write. Not only did I get to do a semi-crossover (with the character in question not actually appearing, but being referenced), but I was able to use it to put a spotlight on Teresa's own relationship with Simplicia. Not mention just being able to do some chick-writing. wink.gif


Next: we wrap up this chapter, as Teresa sends a letter home.


Chapter 24.3 – The Faregyl Inn

The sun had long since fallen over the horizon by the time Teresa made her way to the room she had rented for the night at the inn. S'jirra and Alix had spent nearly the entire afternoon and evening regaling her with stories of their daughter's misadventures, first at home as a child and then later when she was a student at the Arcane University. Each escapade was more hilarious and unbelievable than the next, and they even showed her the letters from Raminus Polus to prove them.

Yet as cheerful and lighthearted as the tales were, Teresa could not help but to see how much they missed their little kit, as they called her. It was sunken into the pools of their eyes, pregnant within every long silence, and laden in every glance at an empty chair.

Again, she wondered if this was what it was like for Simplicia every time she went on her expeditions? With that in mind Teresa asked for parchment, ink, and a quill as the evening drew to a close. When her newfound friends learned why she wanted them, they were produced as magically as Alix had procured her a seat and glass of wine in the kitchen.

So with quill in hand, she sat at the small table in her tiny room with several pieces of blank parchment before her. Drawing her oil lamp closer to the page to better see by, she tried to think of what to say. Yet somehow the words did not seem to come. What was she going to say?

Finally, she closed her eyes and just remembered Simplicia. She thought of all the times as a child that the old woman had brought her a crust of bread to eat and a cup of goat's milk. She remembered how Simplicia would hold her when she cried and gently hum in her ear. She remembered all those times she had yelled at her for being too wild when she was off with Methredhel and Adanrel. She remembered holding the old woman when she had told her the truth about being maimed, and her following skooma addiction.

Teresa opened her eyes and began to write.

Dearest mother,

I am sitting in the Faregyl Inn writing you to let you know that I am safe and well. I am half way to Bravil now, and should be there in less than a week. So far my journey has been uneventful, and the only excitement was a meeting I had with a legionary on the road.

She was a woman! I did not know they had women in the legion, but she told me that there were quite a few actually. I guess I just never noticed under all that armor they wear. She said I should join the legion as a forester. She told me they need people now badly, as many died in the battles during the Crisis. Can you imagine me in the Imperial Legion!

Valfreya, that is her name, mentioned the Fighter's Guild too. She said they were recruiting as well, and they would train me and make me better at what I do. I never thought of it before, but I think I might do just that. I know you think I am reckless sometimes, but I really do try to be careful. If they can teach me how to be smarter and better at how I do things, then I think it will be worth it.

Once I am in Bravil I will start looking for the Ayleid sites I talked about when I left. I know the ones I need to find are somewhere down here in the southeastern part of Cyrodiil, so I still think Bravil is the best place to stay while I look. There might even be people in the Mages Guild there that can help me. Herminia said that there is an Altmer in Bravil who is studying the Ayleid ruin of Anutwyll, which is right outside of the city. So I am hoping he will know more. See how careful I am being? I am learning all I can before I even go inside them. Maybe this Altmer will even come with me? Having a University wizard at my side would make it a lot safer I am sure!

I met some wonderful people here at the inn. It is filled with a caravan heading north. They say that bandits are becoming a problem on the roads, so merchants are starting to pool together like this when they travel and hire bodyguards to protect them. I have not seen any bandits myself though, so I am not sure if it's really that dangerous. But maybe if I do join the Fighter's Guild I might work some of these caravans, that way I can come back to see you and get paid for it at the same time. Wouldn't that be something, to be paid just to travel?

But I was going to say how the people I met here are so kind and generous. S'jirra is one of the cat-people, and she makes the most incredible bread! You would not even believe it is bread at all from the taste of it. It is like something that the patricians probably eat. I will bring some with me the next time I come back. I think she is married to a man named Alix. He is a very kind Breton. Apparently he's a famous swordmaster, although I have never heard of him. I saw him teaching a knight when I arrived.

Oh, and I met a real knight! and he kissed my hand like I was a lady! I did not know what to even say. His name is Sir Lucius something-or-another. I forget his family name. He is part of that new Order of Saint Martin the Chancellor created to protect travelers on the roads. I am sure that the Emperor Martin would be glad to know that people like him are out helping other folk in his name. I know his father, the Emperor Uriel, would be proud.

S'jirra and Alix both have a daughter named Maxical that they told me all about, and I think I actually met her in the Imperial City a few months ago, when I first came back from prison. Of course I did not know it was her at the time. She has white skin just like me, and red hair too. I did not tell them that I dye mine red, hah! hah! They told me all about Maxical this afternoon, and how she got into all kinds of trouble playing pranks at the Arcane University. But I can tell they really miss her and wish that she was home.

That made me think of you. I know you do not like me going off like this to Bravil, and putting myself in danger. But I promise it will not be for long. Know that I am doing everything I can to stay safe and out of harm. I will write you once I get to there so you know I am well. They tell me the post can be a little slow on the roads, so do not worry if it takes a while for the letter to come. You might even get the one from Bravil first, because I think they carry it by a ship from there.

I miss you, and hope I can come back to see you again in the city soon. I thank Mara for bringing us together. You are the best mother a girl could ever hope for.

I love you with all my heart,
Teresa


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post Nov 29 2010, 07:49 PM
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This has always been one of my fave chapters as well. The first time I read it back on the BGSF, when she started the letter "Dearest mother" - it brought tears.

Teresa may have only a faint smile, but she brings beaming smiles from those who love her. (us readers). She has such depth of feelings that one can't help but love her.


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post Nov 29 2010, 09:31 PM
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I second mALX.

Yes, that "Dearest mother -" salutation grabbed me from the get-go the first time around (and I'm not even a mother), and it still brings a pang to my heart the second time around.


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Ah, back from the Holiday Wars! Nothing says 'family' like fisticuffs over stuffed turkey!

Chapter 24.1 – The Faregyl Inn

The sparring match at the Faregyl reminded me of the immortal scene from Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid:
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Butch: No, no, not yet. Not until me and Harvey get the rules straightened out.
Harvey Logan: Rules? In a knife fight? No rules!
[Butch immediately kicks Harvey in the groin]
Butch: Well, if there ain’t going to be any rules, let’s get the fight started. Someone count 1,2,3 go.
Sundance: [quickly] 1,2,3 go!
[Butch knocks Harvey out]
Flat Nose Curry: I was really rooting for you, Butch.
Butch: Well, thank you, Flatnose. That’s what sustained me in my time of trouble.


And Teresa . . . rendered speechless! By a man!! Will wonders never cease?! laugh.gif

Chapter 24.2 – The Faregyl Inn

This is one of the chapters that stand out to me in the TF. You show a great deal of range going from the epic grandeur of the Battle of Bruma and the Oblivion Crisis in the Imperial City to this small, intimate chapter of dialogue between three individuals in the Faregyl Inn. Even on this second reading, when Alix drops his wine I could feel the chills traveling up my back. Bravo, SageRosa!

Chapter 24.3 – The Faregyl Inn

Every once in a while you read something that makes you shake your head with admiration, even as you gnash your teeth with envy. This paragraph:
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Yet as cheerful and lighthearted as the tales were, Teresa could not help but to see how much they missed their little kit, as they called her. It was sunken into the pools of their eyes, pregnant within every long silence, and laden in every glance at an empty chair.

Has my head shaking and my teeth gnashing!

I also love how in Teresa’s letter she spares Simplicia the worrisome details of her encounter with the legionary. And I also notice that she lies to her about not seeing bandits.




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post Nov 30 2010, 02:28 AM
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Another lovely episode.

'He is part of that new Order of Saint Martin the Chancellor created to protect travelers on the roads. I am sure that the Emperor Martin would be glad to know that people like him are out helping other folk in his name. I know his father, the Emperor Uriel, would be proud.'
I quite like how you translated events that have happened in TF into logical and reasonable impacts. It makes so much sense that after his mortal heroics, there would be a noble order named after Martin!

Teresa's letter was wonderful. With as much storytelling and speechtagging as we do to include natural actions and pauses into dialogue, it is difficult to write a letter, where one assumes your character thinks before they write and perhaps even proofs (dare I say. . . edits tongue.gif ) their written word. The first letter I wrote in BF required many drafts, so my envy of your results comes from my own frustrating experience. You did a great job here at capturing Teresa's voice in the letter, while making it indeed sound like a letter, and not dialogue. Well done!

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post Nov 30 2010, 05:29 AM
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Wow, very nice. We see Teresa taking responsibility for reassurance, and we know the pain that the odd couple bear from the loss of their kit. You bring the whole thing to life, adding those small, realistic details that make the world a bigger, more interesting place.


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"You're a girl!" Teresa gasped with wide eyes.

"Your grasp of the obvious does not fail you citizen," the legionary said dryly…


That will always be one of my favorite moments in the TF.

The explanation for the scarcity of Legion riders is a nice bit of world building- the Oblivion Crisis had consequences that are still being felt. The revelation that the bandit is former Legion and Teresa’s immediate thought of Vols are both interesting. He is almost as central to her life as Simplicia.

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"You put down two bandits?" the legionary marveled as she took the axe, "on the run?"

"Well, I stopped to shoot."


And now Teresa and Valfreya are even- though I imagine Teresa was simply being literal.

Again, the way you prepare for Teresa’s entry into the Fighters Guild is wonderfully complex. Membership in the TF is not a whim or an after-thought- it actually has responsibilities and consequences.

The ending of the chapter is wonderful- Teresa’s impulsive gesture of good will shows how much she has grown.

Hooray for the Faregyl- and Alix and S’jirra!

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"When it's for real, your enemy won't fight fair either,”


There was a moment in Roger Zelazney’s (ph) Princes of Amber series where Corwin explained his philosophy about fighting. Paraphrasing liberally: “It isn’t a game, and I fight to win.”

Teresa’s awkwardness as she realizes she is neither street urchin nor fine lady- (I started to use a more colloquial phrase, but my double entendre radar warned me off)- was a treat. There is a comfort in knowing one’s “station” and an equal discomfort in uncertainty. The other bit of information, almost lost in the shuffle, is Lucius’ appreciation of Teresa as a “maiden most fair.”

The whole scene as Alix and S’jirra stare at Maxical’s “doppelganger” is sad and sweet and wonderful. That is especially true as Teresa is able to see Simplicia’s fear and worry in the eyes of these other parents.

The letter was a masterpiece- I wonder how well Simplicia can read between the lines…


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post Dec 1 2010, 05:45 PM
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mALX & haute ecole rider: The" Dearest Mother" part always gets to me too. I was channeling my estrogen pretty heavily there. For this whole chapter really.


Destri Melarg: Your mention of fisticuffs over turkey has me thinking of dusting off some of my holiday movies, like Planes, Trains, and Automobiles, or Pieces of April.

I am glad you liked that one gnashing part. I put a great deal of time and effort into those few sentences.

Isn't it great how Teresa lies about anything that might even hint at her being in danger? Something she learned not long after she started hanging out with Methredhel I am sure!


Acadian: The letter was difficult to write, as I had to change gears from my normal style of writing prose to "letter style". I wanted to make sure it kept that "I'm writing a letter" voice through it all. The letter also received quite a bit of reworking for the TF 2.0 as well, to bring up up to date with new things.


Linara: One thing Teresa has always been good at is trying to make other people's lives better. To the point of breaking promises and outright meddling if she has to.


treydog: I always loved that "You're a girl!" bit as well. I had to work so hard to avoid Teresa noticing any female soldiers in all the new material just so I could keep it there. And yes, Teresa was just being literal about stopping to shoot. She is completely out of her depth when it comes to verbal sparring and stunning repartee.

You are spot on about Teresa's uncertainly over where she belongs socially. It is something I have been thinking about lately in fact. Technically she is still a member of the proletariat, as she does not own property, or even have a permanent address. Yet in the last few months she has made more money through dungeon diving than most plebians who do own land make in a year. So by the latter scale she could be considered an equite, the highest class of commoners.

And yes, I am sure that Simplicia is far better at reading between the lines that Teresa would like! biggrin.gif


Next: While Teresa continues on her way to Bravil, Simplicia has her own adventure back in the Imperial City.


Chapter 25.1 – Unfriendly Competition

19th - 20th Last Seed, 3E433

"It's deader than the Reman Emperors in here," Jensine grumbled. The emptiness of the shop around her betrayed the truth in her words. The middle-aged Nord closed her eyes and rubbed her lined temples. She clenched her teeth with a grimace, and reached for a glass of water.

"That headache is back again, isn't it?" Simplicia asked, already knowing the answer as she moved to cover some of the glowstones in their wall-sconces. "I'll go grind up some more of that ginkgo, and you can have it with some milk."

Jensine sat heavily in the chair behind the counter while Simplicia went about her work. She was still there when the aging Imperial plodded back with a mortar filled with fine green powder in one hand, and glass of cow's milk in the other. The Nord took them from Simplicia without a word. Taking a moment to down the ground gingko leaf, she chased the powder with the milk and leaned back in her chair.

"Ever since the Crisis these damn headaches just won't leave me alone," the Nord grumbled as she returned to massaging her temples. "Of course that fetcher Thoronir isn't making it any easier."

"You still think he's a fence?" Simplicia offered, sliding into a chair beside the Nord with a creaking of old bones. She took a moment to massage her knees. All that walking didn't do them any good, she thought. Damn stonejoint, she silently cursed. It had been nearly five years since Teresa had cured it with a potion, and still her joints felt like they were stiff as a board.

Teresa, where are you now cherry blossom? On the road to Bravil? Mara protect you, the old woman thought, and save you from your own damn foolishness.

"That dreck he's selling has got to be stolen," Jensine grumbled. "There's no other way he could afford to sell it so cheap. Maybe that tribune Lex down on the Waterfront is right, and there really is a Grey Fox. That little fetcher Thoronir might just be him too! Who knows, maybe that Lex would actually listen, instead of that lazy bounder Audens Avidius we have here in the Market District."

Simplicia had to stifle a smile. If only you knew! she thought. It still amazed her how many pedites, equites, and patricians thought the Grey Fox was hoax. Every prole knew the reality. If it were not for thieves in need for eyes and ears on the street she and Teresa probably would have starved.

So how was it that she found herself on the opposite side of the street? It still seemed strange, Simplicia thought, working in a shop, having a roof over her head and a bed to sleep on - even if just in the basement storeroom. To think it was all because of the Daedra attacking the city!

"Why don't you take the rest of the day off Simplicia," Jensine sighed. She rose to her feet and made her way to the stair leading up to the second floor. "We may as well just close up for the rest of the afternoon. I think I'll go upstairs and lay down for a while."

"Want me to help you with the stairs?" Simplicia's knees protested as she climbed to her feet. Getting old was just not fair, she thought to herself, not fair at all.

"No, if I fall, I'll just take you with me, then where will we be!" Jensine chuckled. Placing one hand against the wall to steady herself, the Nord slowly made her way up the stairs while she held her head with her free hand.

That clannfear took a lot out of her, Simplicia thought as she watched the shopkeeper totter up the steps. Whoever would have thought that beating the monster on the head would crack your own skull open? No, life was just not fair at all.

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The Copious Coinpurse was busy with customers as Simplicia made her way along the racks of clothing near the front door. Velvet, lace, and fine linen, she noted. All of it the price of wool and flax. Then she came upon a jewelry case and stared at the necklaces, rings, earrings, and other gemstones within. All going for half what they were worth.

How could he afford it? Simplicia wondered as she stared at the blond wood elf behind the counter. He was short for a man, shorter than even she was. Yet he made up for his lack of height with girth. The elderly Imperial imagined that his round stomach must weigh more than she did all on its own. He was clearly not going hungry from his low prices.

Who was giving him such a good deal for it all? Simplicia wondered as she looked around the shop. All manner of things were for sale, but most of it seemed to be clothing, shoes, and jewelry. Still, there were a few weapons, statuettes of various gods, some vases and urns, and other assorted knick knacks.

He could not really be working for the Thieves Guild, could he? They had always been too smart to do anything so obvious. She was surprised that the tribune Jensine had complained to was ignoring it. Unless he was being paid to look the other way? But how could Thoronir come up with the money for bribes if his prices were so low?

Well, there was one way to find out, Simplicia thought as she made her way out of the shop on creaking knees. Casting her gaze up and down the length of Commerce Street, her eyes ignored the patricians and plebeians making their way down the busy thoroughfare. Then her gaze set upon a narrow alley across the street, between a bookstore and a leather shop.

That would be perfect, Simplicia thought as she pushed her old bones across the street and found a spot in the narrow cut between insulas. Settling down behind a small mound of trash, she put her back to the wall and gazed back across the street. With the front door of The Copious Coinpurse square in her sights, she settled in for the night and waited.

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post Dec 1 2010, 07:23 PM
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So Simplicia decides to play investigator, huh? I'm already settling down for a delightful diversion, as I'm sure this is bound to be.

And would Simplicia tell Teresa about this adventure of hers? Or will she avoid making Teresa worry about her? Now who'd be protecting whom?



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Miss Jane Marple and Jessica Fletcher watch out, here comes Simplicia!! This promises to be one of the more memorable adventures in the TF (and that is saying something). I love how you tied in Simplicia’s investigation of Thoronir to her inside knowledge of the inner workings of the Thieves Guild, while also commenting on the irony of her current circumstance working in Jensine’s shop. I still can’t decide whether she’s investigating out of some need to exonerate the Gray Fox, or if she is motivated by the guilt felt seeing the Gray Fox from the perspective of a shop keeper. Either way, it just works! The only problem I have now is that I can't help picturing Angela Lansbury as Simplicia!!

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That was be perfect, Simplicia thought as she pushed her old bones across the street and found a spot in the narrow cut between insulas.

That would be perfect, perhaps?


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GAAAH!!! Agarmir and his henchmen will hurt Simplicia !!!!! I hope Teresa gets back in time to save her!!! (Or Vols does) Great Chapter Sage Rosa !!! ... Cliffhanging, though, knowing Simplicia is walking into danger !!!! GAAAH!!!

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Thank you for pausing to let Simplicia regale us with an adventure! Much to like here indeed.

I quite loved Simplicia's 'drifting' thoughts as she was talking with Jensine - -
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Teresa, where are you now cherry blossom?
- - oh my goodness, I love it! Every bit as wonderful as a butterfly, and how clever an appellation for a wood elf. I so hope this nickname for Teresa sticks!

Oh, anyway. . . back to. . . where was I? It's ok Simplicia, I understand.

I'm not sure if it was your intent, but I enjoyed how you showed Thoronir's prosperity, in part, via his belly. I expect in TF, money = food = belly. Suntanned skinny blondes had to be poor dirt farmers laboring in the sun for their food. Now. . . Teresa, with that Arimer skin and loads of gold just needs to start eating a lot (and not start that jogging program of course) and she can look like real wealth! biggrin.gif

Oh, and I like Jensine as well!

As said above, visions of Jessica Fletcher dance through my head. Uh oh. . . I'm reminded that Mrs Acadian figures out whodunit 12 minutes into Murder She Wrote. Poor me feels lucky to understand it when Jessica announces it at 54 minutes into the mystery. embarrased.gif


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