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A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Adventures, The Truth Behind The Oblivion Crisis |
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mALX |
Jul 17 2011, 03:36 PM
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Ancient

Joined: 14-March 10
From: Cyrodiil, the Wastelands, and BFE TN

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@ Acadian - Thank you so much Acadian - and for the encouragement that wrought that chapter out of me!! You ROCK !!!
*** @ Jacki Dice - Lol, Thank you so much Jacki !!! Technically, (or actually) - Alix the Mouse was a regular sized mouse when Maxical gets him - she has a tendency to fatten up pets when she gets them, lol. He'll get big soon enough, lol. Thank you again, Jacki !!!
*** @ King Coin - Thank you so much KC !!! And especially for all the help making the "Alix the Mouse" for my game !!
*** @ Foxy - Now THAT is what I love to hear !!! You are very missed when you are AWOL, Foxy !! Thank you so much for stopping by to see Maxical, she misses you too !!
*** @ Grits - Oh, you have made my day, week, month !!!! GAAAAH !!! Thank you so very much Grits !!! Your kind words mean so much to hear, Thank You !!!
*** @ Treydog - As long as the story still makes you snort at your desk I'll be happy !!! Thank you so much Treydoggie !!! (liked getting the inside line on your theater days too, lol)
*** @ Naughty Haute - Oh, I loved that vid !!! How cool was that !!! Thank you so much Haute, and yeah - I've missed Maxical's slapstick too, lol. Thank you again for reading !!!
*** @ Doommeister - Now THAT's what I love to hear, Thank You so very much Doommeister !!!!
*** @ Ghastley - ROFL !!! Thank you so very much Ghastley !! I happened to catch sight of a YouTube vid just before writing that chapter where she "lit" the fire - URG!!! GAAAAK !!! Lol !!! Thanks again !!!
*** @ Hazmick - ROFL !!! Thank you so very much Hazmick !!! And welcome back, you are always missed when I don't see you for a while !!!
*** @ Athynae - WOO HOO !!! I love that, Thank You so very much, your kind words mean a lot - and by the way - WELCOME to the Forums !!! I loved your chapters !!!
*** @ Master Chef TK - Lol, maybe Jim Carrey after he has trans-gender surgery !!! ROFL !!! Thank You so much TK !!!
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mALX |
Jul 22 2011, 06:34 AM
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Ancient

Joined: 14-March 10
From: Cyrodiil, the Wastelands, and BFE TN

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mALX |
Jul 27 2011, 07:54 AM
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Ancient

Joined: 14-March 10
From: Cyrodiil, the Wastelands, and BFE TN

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* @ Athynae - GAAAAAH !!! Not my hair !!! Urg !!!! Thank you so much for your support Athynae, it is greatly appreciated !!! *** @ King Coin - Thank you so very much for those screens, you ROCK !!!! *** @ Acadian - Thank KC & Aravi !!! They went out and slaughtered the town, took the screens, then interviewed all the vampires and took their screens too, lol. Awesome job he did too !!! Thanks Acadian !!! *** @ Foxy - WOOOOOOT !!!!! So glad you are back, Foxy - and thank you so much for stopping in here too !!! WOO HOO !!!! ******************************************************************As most of you know, (and have already watched this vid) - this is a vid of my very first real mod I ever made - "Alix the Mouse!" As everyone knows, I am as dumb as a brick when it comes to computers, lol. So this was HUGE for me. Alix had some glitches that needed fixed since the first vid I made of him, well they are all fixed now and everything is working perfectly !!! 1. Alix is instantly summoned when I equip his ring. 2. Alix has a voice! Alix is the rodential version of Vilja, he squeaks as much as Vilja talks! (and his temper is just as bad as hers too, lol). He has different squeaks for diverse situations, including ones that sound like he is laughing, crying, and cursing. (right now his squeaking is kind of quiet, I am trying to figure out how to turn up the volume a bit). 3. Alix loves sweetrolls! He is programmed to follow Maxical, but will only follow closely if Maxical is carrying sweetrolls. If she doesn't have one on her ... and someone else walks by with one on them, Alix will get as far as 50 (game feet) from Maxical - following the one with the sweetroll. He'll return to his following duties before getting any further away than that, but will have a bad attitude about it, lol. 3. Which brings us to Alix's personality. Alix has a temper, and is not beyond throwing a tantrum (as seen in the vid below). If he is asked to wait, he will make his crying squeak. If you take it back and ask him to follow, he will accept your "apology" (not with a very good grace) - but if you don't take it back pretty quickly, Alix gets MAD and throws a temper tantrum! (It is very funny to watch him do it too, lol). 4. Alix is a magic mouse, he can heal himself! Watch him closely after his fight in Greyland, you will see him do it! Alix can also breathe under water! 5. Alix will not pick a fight, but if any enemy makes an advance he will kick some butt pretty quickly - and a little too well, I need to tone down his combat skills, lol. Right now his combat package is way too hefty. (see the vid, lol). 6. Alix might be a sore winner. He got up on his hind legs and appeared to be pointing at the dead enemies after his battle in Greyland - was that the sound of laughter I heard coming from him? Anyway, Alix is finished other than those two tweaks (volume and combat) - and it is the first real mod I ever made !!! OK, here is the finished product, (drum roll) ... "Alix the Mouse!" http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9TKive-f8pk* This post has been edited by mALX: Jul 29 2011, 06:14 AM
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Grits |
Jul 29 2011, 12:34 AM
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Councilor

Joined: 6-November 10
From: The Gold Coast

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I love Alix!! It only makes sense that he would mock his fallen enemies, after all he throws such a fit when his beloved kitty simply asks him to wait!  If you don’t tone down his combat, he could be Bruma’s guard mouse all by himself. Just put a pile of sweetrolls out in the field and everyone haul tail behind the walls until the battle’s over. Then there would be an Alix statue!! Or perhaps Grits has had too much caffeine. Anyway he is so cute, and I love his squeaks. Congratulations, mALX!!! This post has been edited by Grits: Jul 29 2011, 12:35 AM
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mALX |
Jul 29 2011, 04:54 AM
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Ancient

Joined: 14-March 10
From: Cyrodiil, the Wastelands, and BFE TN

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@ Athynae - Thank you so much, that really means a lot for me to hear, you have no idea !!! I finally got a free minute and forced myself to not read anything till I got a chapter out. I have really struggled lately with writing each chapter, and that isn't like my usual self. Thank you again, Athynae !!!
*** @ Acadian - You know you didn't have to comment the vid both here and on my vid page, lol. But it means a lot to me that you did, thank you so very much Acadian !!!!
PS: Alix may not have been defending Maxical in there, he may have just thought they were holding back on the sweetrolls, ROFL !!!!
*** @ Hazmick - ROFL !!! Yes, he could, lol. I def have to tone it down. He was getting flung about by mudcrabs before, I just went a little too far with "fixing" him, ROFL !!! Thank you so very much Hazmick !!!
*** @ King Coin - YOU ARE MISSED !!! COME HOME !!! Lol. Thank you so much KC, you didn't have to comment it twice either, but it really does mean a lot that you did, especially when I know you're away from home !!! You ROCK !!!
*** @ Grits - SPEW !!! A statue in Bruma of Alix the Mouse - standing on his hind legs pointing down at the Seige Machine - ROFL !!! I fell out of my chair when I read that !!!! You had also commented this on my vid thread and didn't have to do it again on here - but I am so glad you did, (especially with too much caffiene in your system). It means so much to me that you did, Grits !!! Thank you so much !!!
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Chapter 113: The Prisoners
“GUARDS! Get this cat off me! She’s committed unspeakable atrocities on me!” Falanu shrieked.
“I did NOT! I saved your life!” I pulled myself up off her quickly and then reached my arm down to help her up.
Falanu slapped the hand away as it neared her and heaved herself to a stand with a grunt that somehow managed to sound ladylike. “Saved me from the fire you started, you…arsonist!”
Whoever said there was never a Legion around when you needed them was dead wrong…or maybe just wasn‘t Falanu and naked. With widened eyes and leering faces the Legion poured out of the crowd of refuges like cockroaches whose nest had been disturbed.
Several of the guards gave my small bare breasts a cursory glance before honing in on Falanu, their eyes running appreciatively over the flawless charcoal of her body and resting far longer than necessary at almost every curve.
“I didn’t…not on purpose. It was an accident! Your cooking gave me gas…”
“Don’t blame your bodily functions on me, cat. You were a fur-covered gasbag when you were brought in, don’t think I couldn’t smell you…”
“That was the sewers! I didn’t get gas till I ate that disgusting meal!”
“Disgusting! What right does a prisoner have to complain when they are fed a hot meal!” Falanu’s eyes were boiling lava pools in her glaring face, but as she turned them from me to the guards they miraculously changed to a simpering expression.
Her voice was amazingly altered as well, the rich tones no longer filled with venom…she sounded helpless suddenly, and uncharacteristically…cute.
“Please Guards…she robbed me as well. There is evidence, that pillowcase tied to her waist is filled sweetrolls I had imported from Morrowind. I paid 100 gold each for them. This cat was a prisoner brought to my shop to work out her sentence…only the gods know what unspeakable crimes she committed before now.”
Falanu turned and pointed dramatically to the blazing remains of her shop on the opposite shore, but her voice reflected genuine pain. “My shop is destroyed, she set the fire to escape.”
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The guilt was overwhelming knowing I had brought that pain, even if inadvertently. “I’m really sorry, Falanu. It truly was an accident.” I stretched my damp arms around her shoulders and tried to give comfort with a hug.
“GAAAAAH! Get your paws off me you filthy pervert!” Falanu spun around and faced the guards, her eyes blazing again. “You see? She can’t keep her hands off me! LOOK! Look what she did to me!” Falanu pointed to the scratches on her butt.
The guards were more than happy to carefully inspect the scratches, I was surprised Falanu didn’t object to the overt ogling taking place. Instead she threw me a glance over the bent heads of the guards that told me exactly what she thought of me…and in what would have been censorable words if spoken.
After a minute bit of arguing over who outranked whom, two of the lesser ranking guards were assigned to escort me and another young girl Khajiit to a refuge camp set up for female prisoners. The rest were making spectacles of themselves fawning over Falanu as I was led away.
“Hey, I know who you are! You’re that Ape Woman! What’r you in for?” The Khajiit turned a startled set of brown eyes fringed in thick lashes towards me.
Her rough, uneducated speech matched her ragged clothing; but was at odds with everything else about her. She was beautiful, dainty. I’d never seen any Khajiit with such perfect bone structure and features and felt a flicker of envy instantly. It died just as quickly as it came. She was my age, couldn’t be much older if any…but her eyes were hardened and world weary like those of someone older than Fathis. What could have caused that in someone so young?
Her cheeks flushed red under the fur at my staring. When I dropped my gaze in embarrassment they fell on a parchment tied around her neck with yarn. In large malformed letters it spelled out “Bandit.”
I got the feeling she had written it herself, and was sure of it when the guard stopped at a make-shift barricade set up at the entrance to a cave. The guard pointed to a small folding table set up in the perimeter of the barricade that held similar parchments, yarn, and several quills and inkwells.
“Ye can write your name or yer crime, Ape Woman, an don‘t take yer time doin‘ it.”
“Dear gods, I hate that name,” I mumbled, struggling to think what to write. Should I write arson? It really was my fault Falanu’s shop had burned down, even if by accident. Robbery? I fingered the pillowsack tied to my waist. I was not writing rape, that was the one thing I really hadn’t done.
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The Khajiit girl was watching closely, obviously curious about what I had done to be arrested.
“Er…I don’t know what I’m here for, I didn’t do what I’m accused of…well, except for spitting on Ocato…” I held the blank parchment up to the guard.
The guard snorted, then pointed me back to the table. “I don’t have all day, git to it!”
I wrote out, “Spit on Ocato” and threaded yarn in a loop through the parchment like the girl Khajiit had done.
The guard pushed us through the entrance to the cave where another guard gave us a shove down the darkened tunnel. Being Khajiit, we could easily see in the dark, yet still found ourselves stumbling over tree roots and rocks as we made our way down the long corridor.
“What is that horrible smell? … GAAAAH!” I clutched her arm tightly to keep from falling.
“You’ll get used to it. Hey…er…Ape Woman? I know you said you hate that name, but I don’t know what else to call you.”
“You speak Khajiit?” I asked her in Khajiit. When she nodded, I told her my name. “My name is Ma'Thjizzrini Qa.”
“Dear gods! No wonder then…er…never mind.” She turned her face away and gave a low whistle.
“It’s okay, I know what it means. I don’t use it much, believe me. Everyone usually just calls me Maxical.”
She stopped walking and turned to face me in the dark, still speaking in Khajiit. “That’s something you don’t tell most, I’ll wager. You’ve seen my eyes, I read your thoughts on what you saw there. You know what kind of life I’ve had…and now I know what kind you have.“ She hesitated overly long, her eyes glittering in the dark…waiting for me to respond to a question she hadn’t asked.
“Friends then?” I held my hand across from my mouth, ready to spit on it.
“If you say so.” Her voice reflected nonchalance, but she spat on her hand and held it out to me. I did the same and we clasped our hands in a slimy embrace and kissed each other’s cheeks on either side. She drew back first, speaking in Cyrodiilic again. “Don’t expect no gift from me, I got nothing to give.”
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“All I’ve got is these sweetrolls…er…but they’re stolen, and there’s been a mouse on them.”
“You got sweetrolls? Mice don’t bother me none, I’ve had worse. Let me have one to seal the friendship. If anyone I know is here, I’ll see they gives you a shirt…if you want.”
“Sure.” I hoped my voice sounded suitably enthusiastic, but truthfully I was not really excited about wearing someone else’s clothes I didn’t know. The pants from Captain Renault were bad enough, but at least I knew she wasn’t scurvy from listening to Owyn’s rants about her. I untied the sack at my waist and held it open.
“GAAAAH! The mouse is still in there!”
“Well, yeah. I thought it was Falanu’s pet and tried to save him from the fire. He wouldn‘t leave without these sweetrolls. I’ve kind of been accused of stealing them.” I watched her reach down into the sack and then draw her hand back quickly when the mouse started squeaking loudly.
“Get the mouse out first, I think he’s going to bite me.” She took a step back. “Better yet, you just get me one out.”
The mouse made several angry sounding squeaks as I pulled one of the fat rolls out and handed it to her.
She shook it before biting into it. “Make sure he didn’t leave any extra raisins on it,” she laughed.
“Urg! That’s really gross!” I gacked.
“You’d be surprised what you’ll eat when you’re hungry enough…oh, this is really good!” A loud purring rumbled from her stomach area.
“I know, I had one before the mouse got in there. I never tasted anything like it.” I tied up the sack and started walking again.
She grabbed my arm and turned me around to face her, forcing herself to swallow before speaking. “My name is Nisaba. I’ll get you that shirt if I have to steal one.” She pounded her fist against her chest twice and grabbed my hand, raising it up in a tight clasp and leaving a wet gooey spot on the fur of my cheek when she kissed it this time.
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“Nisaba! What an unusual name!” I was surprised into blurting. That name was not Cyrodiilic, but she definitely hailed from Cyrodiil by her accent.
“Aye, I know what you be thinking. I’m from here, but the name isn’t. It was my Ma’s name, she died birthin’ me. The only thing my Da give me was the name, afore he dropped me off at the orphanage.”
I watched Nisaba closely as she spoke, the shadows flickering across her eyes at certain memories she didn‘t want to recall. Khajiit is such a beautifully flowing and formal language, she spoke it with no lapses or taints. Her Cyrodiilic however…it varied from street tough to what I would only privately refer to as “gutter.” I’d heard it before at the Bloodworks when we got in Pit Dogs from the prison or orphanage.
“I was in the orphanage too, the one at the Imperial Legion Compound before it closed. We’re about the same age, you had to be in there at the same time I was…I don’t remember you, though.” I strained my mind to picture faces or names from my time at the orphanage, but the only ones that came to mind were Alix, Pilus, Fathis, and Phillida. Why couldn’t I remember my friends there? “Er…it’s just me, Nisaba. Don’t take it personally, I can’t seem to remember any of my friends from that time.”
“I wasn’t in there long, I’ll bet you were though, ‘Vaba’” Nisaba pointed to the white fur of my arm and then up at my red hair. “And a bad tempered one. I was cute…a baby.”
I winced slightly at being called a jinx in Khajiit, it had been a long time since I‘d heard that.
“Then what? What…er…happened?” I indicated her “Bandit” sign.
Nisaba stared hard at me, what seemed like a thousand retorts rippling her jaw and twisting her lips with anger as each flashed across those beautiful eyes glowing now in the darkness. Her tail didn’t signal a fight though; instead it hung almost straight down, nearly brushing the filthy floor of the cave…I must have brought up a painful memory.
“I’m not judging, just…wondered. I’m sorry, Nisaba. I won‘t ask any more questions, you just tell me what you want to…or not. Remember we‘ve sworn friendship, I stand by my oaths.” I held up my hand, showing the gooey mass of mashed spit still clinging to the fur.
Nisaba held hers up facing mine, but didn’t speak. It occurred to me she may be near tears, and suddenly I didn’t feel that far off myself.
Too much had happened in the last day…too many things that could never be taken back, my life felt shattered into millions of pieces and no one I cared about was there to help me find the shards.
I ached to know where Fathis was, was he even alive? Itius said Gils was fine and working with Uriel Septim’s Army…but I needed him too, and he wasn’t here with me. My tongue had felt seared in two most of the day, Azura’s mark felt like it burned a hole through me without Gils or the vampires near. The only thing that made me forget it for any time at all was the painful gas I got from Falanu’s cooking. I guessed exhaustion stilled its pain now.
A vision of Alix and S’Jirra cradling me in their arms came forcibly to mind, bringing an overwhelming feeling that all the forces in Nirn were flooding into my throat to form the huge lump that now filled it.
“I want…home…“ I heard the sob escape my lips and echo off the rock arch of the tunnel, heard Nisaba’s answering crying.
She was facing me, her hand still raised showing the glistening spit in her furry palm. Tears hung like dew off her thick eyelashes and soaked the fur of her cheeks.
Something about that moment tugged at a long buried memory, a glimpse so fragile it was gone in a trice, and trying to bring it back was like trying to catch a feather in a windstorm.
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This post has been edited by mALX: Jul 29 2011, 03:34 PM
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Grits |
Jul 29 2011, 02:00 PM
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Councilor

Joined: 6-November 10
From: The Gold Coast

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Oh my goodness, the guards swarming over the naked and furious Falanu! I could quote everything she said for hilarity. But this line nearly caused me injury: “Don’t blame your bodily functions on me, cat. You were a fur-covered gasbag when you were brought in, don’t think I couldn’t smell you…”Poor Maxical, everything Falanu said was based on something that did happen – even Maxical was doubting herself when she had to fill out her card of shame!! Nisaba is wonderful, I love that Maxical has a Khajiit friend! Extra raisins!  I love her loyalty, she is already looking out for Maxical by promising her a shirt. And there is an enticing mystery, their history at the orphanage forgotten by Maxical. The emotions that came out when they realized they had a common past as well as a shared present dilemma felt powerful and real. My heart ached for Maxical when she cried for her home! Something about that moment tugged at a long buried memory, a glimpse so fragile it was gone in a trice, and trying to bring it back was like trying to catch a feather in a windstorm. I love this line, so vivid and true, and it adds a mystery to the chaos that is overwhelming the Imperial City! Layers upon layers, I love it!!
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King Coin |
Jul 29 2011, 03:51 PM
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Master

Joined: 6-January 11

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The beginning was hilarious! The lesser ranked guards had to escort Maxical while the higher ranked ones “took care of” Falanu. The guards sure responded to Falanu  Poor Maxical! Ape Woman?? I have to say I liked the end the best. Very touching. I hope Maxical’s new friend is around more in future chapters! Fantastic chapter mALX!!!!
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Acadian |
Jul 30 2011, 12:11 AM
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Paladin

Joined: 14-March 10
From: Las Vegas

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This was roll on the floor funny as only mALX can deliver - until you so delicately changed the weave and displayed your equal mastery of poignancy. This was surely Maxical at her best. Despite the venom from Falanu, our kit managed to blame herself instead of unsheathe her claws. I loved meeting Nisaba. You did a fabulous job of working in Khajiit things here in a very natural manner while making sure your readers who are not fluent were never confused regarding kitty customs and language. As both Grits and KC have suggested, the ending you left us with was both bittersweet and teased of what might be ahead. Gosh, I really enjoyed this! 
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ureniashtram |
Aug 3 2011, 05:04 PM
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Knower

Joined: 12-October 09
From: The River Acheron to the Gates of Hell.

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mALX! I caught up! Long time no see, eh? Or is it just my imagination? It feels like an aeon has passed since I last posted here. The secret to my speed of catching, you might wonder? The deals I make with the Daedra should not be discussed with the innocent.
But then again Maxical isn't so innocent. After all, her FARTS just made her life turn for the worse. You weren't kidding when you named the earlier chapter 'From Bad To Worse We Go' etc...
And Alix the Mouse!! Grrrrr. Must ... Resist... Buying a Computer.. Just to ... Download Oblivion's ... Mickey Mouse. Or is he now? His temper suggests otherwise.
mALX, you simply casts a spell of hunger on your readers. So what can we say other than 'More please'?
This post has been edited by ureniashtram: Aug 3 2011, 05:04 PM
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Djinn: What wish would you like to have, young master? Random dude: SUPA POWAZ! -- Djinn: Is there anything I could make true, lord? Old guy: .. Youth and charisma. -- Djinn: Your heart speaks of wanting. I could make it true, milord. Me: Hmmm. I wish to know what I want. Then you could hook me up in some insidious deal, spirit.
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