A New Sun Rises - Maxical's Adventures, The Truth Behind The Oblivion Crisis Options

[mALX]

@ Foxy - ...Er...Geeks build it so you will cu...oops ...er... come...
Er...Geeks do it with role play...
Er...Geeks have been berry berry good to mALX...Er... (the last one spoken in a Roberto Clemente voice)

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@ Rachel - ROFL !!! Someone's finger is pointing at grumpy, was he getting a lecture? And the Devil ... SPEW !!!! Thank you Rachel !!!!

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@ Foxy - there is always something triple X on my PC ... (me).

This post has been edited by mALX: Jan 10 2011, 04:39 PM

[mALX]

Future Home Sweet Home for Maxical:


http://www.kingps3.com/screenshots/Elder%2..._1294461306.jpg

[Acadian]

WooHoo! Waterfalls!!! Buffy is dancing around tossing off her clothes and singing, "It's beautiful! When do we leave!"

[hazmick]

Can't wait for Haa-Rei to go for a swim in Skyrim! (I'll figure something out to sort the 200 year time difference )

[Arcry]

Indeed, quite beautiful. Going to be odd, being an Argonian in the birth place of Human civilization on Tamriel.... Not to mention cold....

Oh, I almost forgot! I'm on chapter 56 and loving the new story! SO very awsome Fathis has become!

This post has been edited by Arcry: Jan 16 2011, 12:20 AM

[Jacki Dice]

Hi mALX. I've been catching up on your story and I was planning to hold all my comments until the end until I came across this from Chapter 39:

He ‘been snatching people up and trying to rape them, we had to hide the kids, hide the wives and the husbands. Obviously he was rapin’ everybody out there.

I've never heard the song before, but its everywhere and to see it here of all places made me burst out laughing in tears! In your word: SPEW! ♥

[mALX]

Hi mALX. I've been catching up on your story and I was planning to hold all my comments until the end until I came across this from Chapter 39:

He ‘been snatching people up and trying to rape them, we had to hide the kids, hide the wives and the husbands. Obviously he was rapin’ everybody out there.

I've never heard the song before, but its everywhere and to see it here of all places made me burst out laughing in tears! In your word: SPEW! ♥

Here it is, it is hard to hear the words on this, I think it was a personal recording and not off the studio equipment:


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TKayCCKKUIs

[mALX]

Hi mALX. I've been catching up on your story and I was planning to hold all my comments until the end until I came across this from Chapter 39:

He ‘been snatching people up and trying to rape them, we had to hide the kids, hide the wives and the husbands. Obviously he was rapin’ everybody out there.

I've never heard the song before, but its everywhere and to see it here of all places made me burst out laughing in tears! In your word: SPEW! ♥

Here it is, it is hard to hear the words on this, I found a better recording of it:


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UTrV3EAr8EE...feature=related

Here is the original interview after the attack on his sister where the lyrics came from:


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W9lwh8J33pw...feature=related


Here is a remix of the song where you can hear the lyrics better:


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WrxjmyRAJ1U



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This post has been edited by mALX: Jan 17 2011, 06:07 AM

[mALX]

@ Acadian - And Maxical will join her at that waterfall! Thank you Acadian !!

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@ Hazmick - I heard about that 200 year time difference too, I hope it is not true - but if it is, we can always have our characters become frozen in the Jeralls and a great thaw wakens us just in time to troop down into Skyrim, lol. I am getting more excited as the time nears - have the game reserved for both the PC and 360 - can't WAIT !!!! Thank you so much Hazmick!!

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@ Arcry - It is so good to have you back reading Maxical again, Arcry! You have been greatly missed! As you probably noticed, this version is not the same at all as the one on the BGSF, I hope you like it as well. I kind of like it better in a lot of ways - but there are some things I miss about the original Maxical (stupidity and clumsiness, lol). Thank you so much Arcry !!

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@ Jacki Dice - GAAAAH! You stopped Champion of Madness! How could you? GAAAAH !!!! I am begging for you to finish it, don't mess with perfection !!! GAAAAAH !!!

I am so glad to see you reading Maxical again! I changed a lot in this version, I hope you like it - and believe it or not, you are absolutely the only one that noticed Antoine Dodson! Thank you so much Jacki!!

[Jacki Dice]

@ Jacki Dice - GAAAAH! You stopped Champion of Madness! How could you? GAAAAH !!!! I am begging for you to finish it, don't mess with perfection !!! GAAAAAH !!!

I am so glad to see you reading Maxical again! I changed a lot in this version, I hope you like it - and believe it or not, you are absolutely the only one that noticed Antoine Dodson! Thank you so much Jacki!!

Finally caught up! Oh goodness I loved it! See, when you first started posting, I figured I'd wait until you were at the same place as at the other forums. By time I realized that things changed majorly, I was so far behind and procrastinating.... I did the same with SubRosa's story too

Antoine Dodson? Is that the guy who sings that song? Its that lyric! Its everywhere! Even someone in my Sorority Life house has it as their screen name Of all places I never expected to see it here

And I'm not stopping Champion of Madness, I just gave it a better title and edited a few things. When I was off for that time, I wasn't writing at all...so I forgot about some major things in the story or I would rush to get done with chapters so I could get to the juicier bits. I promise I'm not quitting. "Wrothken" wouldn't let me if I tried!

[mALX]

@ Jacki Dice - GAAAAH! You stopped Champion of Madness! How could you? GAAAAH !!!! I am begging for you to finish it, don't mess with perfection !!! GAAAAAH !!!

I am so glad to see you reading Maxical again! I changed a lot in this version, I hope you like it - and believe it or not, you are absolutely the only one that noticed Antoine Dodson! Thank you so much Jacki!!

Finally caught up! Oh goodness I loved it! See, when you first started posting, I figured I'd wait until you were at the same place as at the other forums. By time I realized that things changed majorly, I was so far behind and procrastinating.... I did the same with SubRosa's story too

Antoine Dodson? Is that the guy who sings that song? Its that lyric! Its everywhere! Even someone in my Sorority Life house has it as their screen name Of all places I never expected to see it here

And I'm not stopping Champion of Madness, I just gave it a better title and edited a few things. When I was off for that time, I wasn't writing at all...so I forgot about some major things in the story or I would rush to get done with chapters so I could get to the juicier bits. I promise I'm not quitting. "Wrothken" wouldn't let me if I tried!

It is either Antoine Dodson or Antoine Dotson - I've seen it spelled both ways by the news media. I saw the original newscast before he made the song - and just had to add him as a character. He fit perfectly as Owyn's nephew, and it spread the story of his needing a way to get his family out of Lincoln Park (not Linkin Park, no one would want to get out of them, lol). Anyway, it was my way of supporting him for saving his sister and helping his family get out of the projects. I liked both his personality and his sister's, once you see that original newscast you never want to forget them. For him to take that situation and make it the song that saved his family was Awesome!

Thanks so much for reading, Jacki !! I really appreciate you taking the time to catch up, it is a total re-write from the original story after the first few chapters - thank you <3

This post has been edited by mALX: Jan 21 2011, 05:19 PM

[Jacki Dice]

Thanks so much for reading, Jacki !! I really appreciate you taking the time to catch up, it is a total re-write from the original story after the first few chapters - thank you <3

It's my pleasure! The rewrite turned out so wonderful! I didn't think it could get any better but it really, really did. And it was so funny, it took a couple days to get through the entire thing and I read it right before bed so for two nights in a row I dreamed of Maxical

[mALX]

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@ Jacki Dice - Thank you so much, that really means a lot to me to hear you say that!!!


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Chapter 89: Azura’s Gift



******* Fathis


Fathis restlessly pestered the boys in the band as the night wore on to see if Traven had returned. The festival was over hours ago, where could he be?

Hassildor could realize he’d been duped at any time, Fathis couldn’t keep sitting here waiting for Traven. Raminus Polus and Josey were his only back-ups right now, statistically that was bad odds that the messages would reach Traven. Fathis got no response banging on the door of the Courier office. Protocol was to go to Ocato in the event Traven couldn’t be reached. Reluctantly, Fathis went to the Palace.

“I’m under strict orders, no one is to enter the Palace until further notice…“ The guard broke off mid-sentence and deftly pocketed the bribe from Fathis. “I‘m not supposed to tell, but they found some tourists murdered. That‘s all I know.�

No protocol existed for the event neither Traven or Ocato could be reached. Fathis had to do something…Jack Thompson.

Jack opened his door, scowling. “Aren! What do you mean by waking me at this time of the morning? You look awful, have you not slept?�

“No. No, I haven’t. Jack, I need help with a situation…and can’t give you any information about it.�

Jack stared hard at Fathis, then opened the door wider. “Come in. I can‘t offer you wine or coffee, we don’t drink it…have a seat. I’ve got freshly squeezed orange juice...�

“That will be fine, thank you. I need to get a message in code to Traven, Jack. It is imperative he get this right away…I may not be able to tell him this in person when he sees me next. Will you help?�

“I know you and Hannibal well enough to know it is nothing illegal. I’ll help, but I can’t go looking for him. You do remember I have to oversee the matches?�

“I understand.� A sudden thought occurred to Fathis. “Say Jack, in the event I can’t get hold of Traven in time, I’m supposed to meet someone outside the administrative gate…would you mind if I sat in your box this morning with a…guest?�

“Slipping around behind Maxical’s back already?�

Fathis gave a tense half laugh. “No. But I plan to rudely demand her presence so she‘ll be angry and refuse the invitation to join me…and hope she forgives when this is over.�






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“You don’t want her there?� Jack’s eyes lit in appreciation of the irony. “Married just last night and already fighting…you could easily smooth any ruffled fur that hasty marriage caused, according to your reputation. It‘s too late for second thoughts…�

“It’s nothing like that. I don’t want her to meet this man…but can’t let him know that.�

“A man?�

“Yes…a very oddly dressed man. Cowled, in fact.�

Jack looked intrigued.

“I can’t say more unless something occurs and it ends up in the Courier.�

“You are becoming quite the newshound.�

Fathis cuffed Jack’s shoulder. “Thank you for your help, Jack. Here’s the message. I don’t care if Traven is sitting on the urn, see he gets this…that’s how urgent this is.� Fathis handed him one of the coded messages.

“That’s an image I didn’t need stuck in my head, especially at this time of the morning.�

Another thought occurred to Fathis. “Jack, may I invite some others to your box, just for today?“

“You may as well, my curiosity is rarely perked…but I must admit you have it.�

“I need some fancy parchment and a dab of your wife’s perfume as well.�

“I ‘d better eventually learn what is going on here.“

Jack returned with the items and watched Fathis craft the letters, deliberately disguising his handwriting with feminine loops and flourishes. Instead of a signature he put an illegible scribble. When he was done he dabbed a touch of perfume on the parchment, then started on the next…doing it the same way.

“That’s not your handwriting…you’re deliberately making them think a mysterious woman has invited them! Hassiri…?�

“Exactly. He’s a newsman…and Khajiit. The curiosity will eat him, he’ll show. I hope you don’t mind, but I intend to fill up your box a bit with curious men. I want this man in the cowl to feel extremely uncomfortable.�

“Curious men…like who?�

“All three brothers from the Courier, Antoine Dodson, maybe that ‘Hero of the People‘.�

“Oh my, this will be like a play unfolding…I may have trouble watching the matches.� Jack gave a rare laugh.









******* Maxical


As soon as Gils and I entered the Bloodworks he pulled me into the bathing area. All our stuff was back in there.

“How did our stuff get in here?�

“Before we left the Merchants I paid Owyn to have it moved in here when we got back tonight. You told me we would be together tonight, remember? The truce was off...�

Gils pulled his bottle of brandy out and tipped up the bottle, taking a long pull on it…and then the dam broke.

“How could you raise your palm to him? You already swore vows with me! You were supposed to end it with Fathis!�

“He never showed up for me to break it off with him. I planned to try again tomorrow. Gils, what happened? Why did he challenge you that way? That means he won’t stop till you’re dead. We’ve done nothing together other than that kiss, what was that challenge all about? And to beard me suddenly with marriage vows? Hassiri was there, the promotion going on…I couldn’t make a scene by turning him down publicly there.�

“He knew that, it’s why he chose that time and place. Maxical…are you going to honor our vows that came first, or his?�

“Ours.�

“Then take his ring off.�

I pulled the ring off and stuck it in the bottom of my pack. When I started to slip Hannibal’s ring back on, Gils stopped me.

“Nae Maxical. You’re my wife, I want you to wear a ring of my giving.� Gils reached in his pocket and pulled out a beautiful ring, unique. I had never seen anything like it before.

“What is this?�

“It’s called the Jewel of Rumare. The man I got it from said you’ll never drown as long as you wear it. I meant my vows to you, Maxical.� Gils slid the ring on my finger.

“The Rumare? That's a symbol of us, our beginning! Our first kiss was on the banks, we swore our vows overlooking it! And it‘s the name of my ring?� I turned around and held it up to the candle so I could see it better.






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Gils turned me around to face him, it was all there for me to read; the love and the fire, the promise of forever. Whether he was able to keep them or not…I was in love with Gils.

Being together with him at the end of this day from hell…and suddenly nothing that went before now mattered. We were here together, and all that meant anything of today was the kiss we shared at the Merchants and right now…the love in his eyes, our plans for a life together in Anvil...

He drew me into his arms as if in slow motion, or maybe my memory was locking on to this moment to look back on later. There was no romantic setting, only the tiles of the bathing room that had been the site at which our relationship had developed. The scents were the intoxicating aroma of Gils and Owyn’s brandy, his kisses tasted of it just as they had that first night on the Rumare.

Making up after thinking it was over is a powerful force. I had already made the decision that Gils was the one I wanted to be with before Fathis did what he did. The ring…having a wedding ring made the vows we’d sworn together feel that much more real; having the name of the Rumare, the place that was a symbol of our whole beginning…a lot of factors came together and fueled the fire between us beyond where we had ever allowed it to go. I pulled no stops, didn’t use Hannibal’s potions. There was no doubt in either of our minds Gils had already started me…till it happened.






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Like cosmic tumblers falling into place I felt everything inside me suddenly aligning as a powerful force, unlocking dormant impulses from ancient leopard ancestry…

There was a feeling of weightlessness, of being suspended in a pitch black void…then being pulled backward through it, witnessing the splitting of the original cell that bound leopard to human.

Suddenly I found myself in a forest looking up to the night sky. The scent of green moss filled my nose, I could feel its dampness on my knees and hands. The moons above me parted and Azura appeared between them. Her voice was all around me, inside me…the words echoed.

“Child of the forest…�

She stretched her arms out to the moons and a beam of light shone off her foot, touching my face. A sweetness came on my tongue where the light hit it and I found myself tilting my head back and opening my mouth wide for more. My eyes closed as I savored the sweet taste; when I opened them…there was Gils. When I started to reach toward him the last tumbler fell into place and the lock was sealed.

In a blink I was standing in front of an ancient Khajiit, so old his muzzle was absent of whiskers, sagging. The sides drooped against the bones below it. He raised a bony finger and pointed it at me. His claws were over-long, curled and softened from age. When he spoke his voice crackled and shook.

“What Azura has bound, let none put asunder.�

When I opened my eyes again I was back in the bathing room with Gils. His voice echoed off the stone walls and was all around me, but I couldn’t make out any of the words. The taste of moon sugar was sweet on my tongue watching his lips moving, the expressions in his eyes, his hair brushing the side of his cheek…his breath filled my nostrils…I inhaled deeply to fill my lungs with the scent of it…Gils.

The next thing I know, I was waking with the morning light streaming in the high air vents. Had it all been a dream? I was cradled in Gils arms. I looked up, he was watching me. The sight of him brought the sweetness of moon sugar to my tongue. It hadn’t been a dream. Gils had started me…I was bound to him for life.






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This post has been edited by mALX: Aug 9 2016, 06:38 PM

[Jacki Dice]

Oh my word!! Fathis! The poor man! Oh goodness I wonder what he'll do! Damn cliffracers-- I mean, cliff hangers

[Thomas Kaira]

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*shocked*

Excuse me, I need to take a few minutes to get my head on straight.

So, Maxical, you've finally made your choice. I sure do hope you are ready to accept the consequences.

Let me say right off the bat that this was one of the most powerful scenes I've ever read, not just because of the emotions at play, but rather the simple fact that there was a real choice involved. You set up two men, both of which heavily flawed, neither the greatest example for love, but who both stole the heart of a young, white leopard-girl. So many people over the course of this story have pointed out these flaws, but it simply was not possible for Maxical to try for others, she was too engrossed in both of their lives. Neither man was, vis a vis, the "right" choice, but Maxical loved them both dearly, and love is the perfect counter to rationality.

Which man would it be? The one who is so deep in the Vampire's pocket that it is almost certain to strain their relationship to the breaking point, or the other who's obsession over her is enough that it could destroy the foundations upon which their love had been erected, and is also a known womanizer. Both are endearing in their own way, but neither are ideal, and Maxical was all but forced to choose which evil she would be most comfortable with, which set of consequences she wished to bear. This is choice. It's not about what to wear in the morning, or what brand of cereal is your favorite. Choice works hand-in-hand with consequence.

The buildup to here was flawless. You presented both men, their flaws, and what Maxical stood to get into with either one. She has now decided which man she preferred... accepting every last one of his vices with the full understanding that there is no going back. She must now accept her commitment, no matter how much pain it may cause her in the end, because the road back is now shut. I will be very surprised if Fathis even talks to her again after this.

True choice is a hard stone to get your readers to swallow, but all I can say is you did it.

[D.Foxy]

All I can say is..









MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE !!!!!

[mALX]

@ Jacki Dice - Thank you so much Jacki!! I feel for Fathis too, he is really doing the right thing here - but it def bit him in the butt.

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@ Thomas Kaira - Thank you so very much Thomas!! Wow, you said it all, thank you !!! Maxical is just as flawed as her choices, of course, lol. I just hope she doesn't regret it.

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@ Foxy - Oh, thank you so much Foxy !!! Boy have you been missed!!

[Grits]

Oh. My. Goodness. I thought things were complicated for Maxical before, but I think I'm going to have to stay on the edge of my seat!!

Now I'm really worried about Gils! Gaaaaah!

[Acadian]

I was so hoping that your next story would strongly feature Maxical herself. Oh my, did this ever. I think the word that comes to mind is magnificent. Yes, magnificent and magnificent some more. This was truly one of your finest efforts. Finally, Maxical has made her choice. I know she's a loyal kitty and she will try her best. In all her imperfect vulnerability and strong emotions, you captured everything perfectly.

Somehow, I think imp chips all over Cyrodiil are now going to hit the fan. . . .

Well done, mALX!

[King Coin]

Wait... is this story different from the one on here?

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2096789/mALX