Jerric's Story, A Nord's Adventures in Cyrodiil Options

[SubRosa]

He drew an orb of arcane frost into his hand and tossed it into the canyon.

When you use the word 'drew', it makes me think of pulling it out of a sheath or pocket, like drawing a sword. Perhaps saying something like created, or willed, or called up might sound better?

What a horrific description/theory of how deadra are created in those flesh pods!

Maybe we should get the hells out of here before it eats us and skitts out a staircase.
Sounds like a capital idea! That would explain all those staircases in the woods too...

Wonderful depiction of the psychic link between Jerric and Izzy, especially the deadric laughter.

And Jerric spills his real name at last. Given that he's closing gates with these people, there doesn't seem to be much risk that they will sell him out to the Mythic Dawn! Though they might wag their tongues boasting about how they fought with the Hero of Kvatch once they get back to Bruma...

This post has been edited by SubRosa: Apr 11 2016, 10:12 PM

[Acadian]

Yay! More Jerric!

Regarding your communication conventions, they worked fine for me. The "speech" and thoughts bits are quite conventional so it is only the ''telepathic'' that is unique here and that seems like a fine way of conveying Itchy's telepathic thoughts. I face some of the same concerns since Acadian sometimes communicates to Buffy via voice and sometimes telepathically. The voice part is easy. For the telepathic parts I will often 'speech tag' them to help clarify. Something like this:

I stared at Sam after he challenged me to a drinking contest. What have I gotten myself into, I pondered.

I wouldn't try it, Buffy, Acadian silently urged.

Thanks for the ‘in our last episode’ warm up.

You really show us the terrifying disorientation and fear of perhaps never getting out of this creepily strange place.

Great touch bringing in Itchy! He seems to be proving his worth.

Jerric’s self-doubts, humility and heroism all shine through wonderfully!


Nit: '...and all of our blades together so that we can closed the damned Gate and make it home.' - - close?

This post has been edited by Acadian: Apr 11 2016, 10:00 PM

[Darkness Eternal]

I curious, wondering when you'd return to us with another chapter. Here you are. Let's begin.

The conversation between Schnitzel Ishckrihk wasn't confusing at all. Didn't confuse me one bit.

"What is this place?"
I have no idea. “I’ve seen this before.

Well at least he's partly honest

Daedric creation sounds as Daedric as it can get. Disturbing for fellow mortals. If they don't hurry, Darnands words may be true not only for those scholars. Ishy found the group amusing, as did I. Certainly can't trust a Daedric being, but so far he's been loyal. Let's hope the familiar stays that way.

Still wondering what realm this is.

[Kazaera]

I love how you've kept Oblivion Gates continually threatening and alien (I still haven't played the game but I get the impression they can start getting rather same-old same-old) by first changing everything Jerric thought he knew about them and then actually having the gate close while they were in it! That seems like one of those dangers that should really be a big concern but you just ignore in the game since you know it won't happen. Jerric and co., stranded in Oblivion... the whole thing really brings home how dangerous jumping in a Gate really is.

Very nice Daedric worldbuilding touches, too. Those pods...

Also, I have to say I wasn't surprised to see Jerric gave in and told them his real name. Made for subterfuge, our boy is not.

This post has been edited by Kazaera: Apr 13 2016, 06:39 AM

[ghastley]

This is brilliant, and almost un-Jerric at that. If you're lost in a cold place, ask a Frostie, especially when Itchy is available on demand.

I like the continuing tension between Jerric and Kjestrid. And that she's not falling apart when things get way out of her control. Since Jerric has already tried that, and found it didn't help, he's got an advantage she doesn't.

Looking forward to July's episode

[McBadgere]

Aw hell yeah!... ...

I go away for a bit and I get a whole TWO instalments to go through... ...

Very much loved the, "I'm going on my own!!"/"Of course you are, and I'm coming with you!" thing throughout...And then with added Frostie-Boy too!!...

Most excellent!!...

Very much a favourite...

Brilliant stuff, as ever...

Looking forward to another instalment as it turns up... ...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...

This post has been edited by McBadgere: Jun 12 2016, 03:19 PM

[mALX]

I am catching up, it will take some time though!

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Two

This chapter was a rich immersion back into what makes Jerric (Jerric). The pee-writing his name in the snow when he is supposed to be using an alias; then immediately losing track of his alias at the sight of a pretty girl and blurting his name out; then forgetting he is supposed to be Darnand's servant of sorts - but the best line of all came from the Altmer at the end!!! SPEW !!!!

I'm with Jerric in wondering what is going on in Lildereth's mind and what she meant by Darnand not getting laid in Bruma; have she and Darnand continued to "forkulate" since that first time? And if so, why hasn't it been written into the script?

Awesome chapter, this is exactly how I remember this story to be = excellent and fun!





This post has been edited by mALX: Jul 15 2016, 12:05 PM

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Three


BWAAHAA! You've really captured the Bruma Mages guild here! And Alga at the end; SPEW! I didn't understand the ‘Mara Mother Mild’ and Chapel family business.” either; but get the feeling this has something to do with Lildereth's telling that man that Jerric and Darnand were lovers,

Great chapter!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Four


This chapter had me rolling with how fast word is spreading around Bruma about Jerric and Darnand; and the fact that word of his getting whooped upstairs reaching downstairs before he even gets there was the icing on the cake!

EW! They cook the food after the dog chews on it, urgh! Gross!

Asgerd immediately spouts his true name, and just when he was getting good at remembering his alias! Oh, then ... BWAAHAA! Gives his full correct name, THEN gives him some code to figure out about Jauffre; like if anyone was listening to hear the coded stuff about Jauffre, they wouldn't have heard the Jerric part? DOH! A little late to remember to be secretive there, Asgerd!

Oh great, and as for trying to slip under the wires unobtrusively as an associate; now Asgerd is going to raise him up to a command position that will draw attention to him - especially such a fast rise in ranks. Oh, Asgerd most def blew his cover!

Now to see how he gets out of this...or does he? Maybe Jearl and Saveri Faram will attack him and expose themselves.

Great chapter!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Five

Oh no, he didn't ... Jerric is most def out of his element with women in the last few chapters, does this have something to do with his feelings for Abiene? I've never seen him so ... gauche; that is twice he has insulted poor Selena!

Oh, very cool intro to Camilla Lollia; what a great idea!

Ulfe the "Cat" chasing dog; and J'Skar the balls scratching Cat had me rolling, and the "Not the lads!" line had me choking!!!!

Jerric's warning to Volanaro not to try pulling any pranks on him was very smooth; and I liked how well Volanaro took the threat!

Great chapter!




This post has been edited by mALX: Jul 15 2016, 03:38 PM

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Six


BWAAHAA! Jerric trying to field personal questions and can't think up lies quick enough or tell them convincingly,

And he gives away secrets anyway! BWAAHAAA!

I get the feeling everyone is thinking that wedding ring is a symbol of he and Darnand's "Marriage,"


Now, I wonder what this initiation will do? I'm with Jerric on not being able to come up with anything but peeing on a wall!



Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Seven


Jerric going all but naked to a brothel in the middle of the night = and with no gold! SPEW !!! Loved what he come up with though; now let us see if they really keep his secret! BWAAHAA!

Awesome Write!!!

To be honest I am surprised it took Jerric that long, given his history. Even if it was just a tug, and not a drill.

Or "bite?" BWAAHAA!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Eight - OMG, Jerric and Jaan !!!!! SPEW !!!!! Now THAT is the Jerric I remember from the beginning of the story,

Awesome Write, I may come back many times to re-read this chapter and have a great laugh again and again !!!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Nine - I think the Bruma Fighters Guild is about to develop a whole new respect for Jerric. He has experience with these gates - boy, it seems like forever since he has had to use that experience though! I remember him coming back to Anvil a shell of the man he started out being in his story; and Darnand having to bring him back from that awful place! He has sure come a long way in his story!

Awesome Write!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Ten - GAAAAAAH !!!! What in the holy hell is this? Is it how Jerric goes to Skyrim or something? Urk, this is freaky!!!! Can't wait to find out what is going on! Awesome Write !!!

[mALX]

Chapter 17: Bruma, Part Eleven - HOLY CRAP !!!! This is the most AWESOME world building - What the living hell is going on in that gate? Holy Crap !!!!

*mALX's head explodes*

AWESOME, AWESOME Write !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Acadian]

Just wanted to bump this magnificent story to wish dear Jerric a happy birthday!



Buffy’s always been drawn to the furry funny Nord. Perhaps it is the fact that, between Lil and Abiene she knows he is unavailable - and the little elf tends to want what she cannot have. Perhaps it is that he is everything she is not – big, strong, brave, can lift heavy objects and break things. Perhaps it is because he and she both bear the title of Blonde. Or perhaps it is the treasured toe-ring of resist frost that he gifted to her and she never removes.

Regardless, happy birthday to the big Nord!


Buffy has a massive collection of worms, guts and other things that she understand fishermen use as bait. It is safely preserved with frost salts awaiting his arrival to ESO’s PC North America server.

[mALX]

Happy Birthday Jerric!


(two cakes, knowing Jerric's appetite, lol.)

[ghastley]

Something tells me two cakes will take a lot of mead to wash it down, too.

Merry Birthday! (Hic!)

[Grits]

Aw, thanks everyone. and all around! It means so much that you have stuck with us through this story's many long silences.

Acadian, Buffy's kindness warms a Nord's heart. His petite fellow blonde has always held a fascination for him. Even as he respects and admires her dragon spirit, her butterfly fragility makes him want to get his shield between her and danger. (Perhaps this is why he gets shot in the back so much.) How sweet and generous that Buffy is collecting and preserving bait for Jerric! When he gets there he is going to catch and cook so many fish, the cookfire smoke will make folks think an anchor has dropped. Beach party!!

Jerric found himself in Malabal Tor with Ulfe and Flash on his birthday, where he stumbled upon this spot. After thoroughly checking the falls for naked, frolicking wood elves and alas finding none, he knew exactly how he was going to celebrate: Plan B.

[Acadian]

'This spot' - Wow, Jerric's biceps are bigger than Buffy's waist!

'Plan B' - Aww, so glad Jerric got some fishing in today!