 The Talendor Chronicles, Part One |
| TheOtherRick |
 Jan 25 2011, 07:39 PM
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AUTHORS NOTE AND DISCLAIMER This is my first attempt at fan fiction. I am not a writer, by profession or hobby. At least it wasn't a hobby until now. We'll see where that goes. So since I am not a writer, grammatical and spelling errors may slip past the spell-check from time to time. Please feel free to point them out so that I may make the proper edits. I have read very little fan fiction, which is to say that I have not finished reading any story that I started reading...yet. But starting to read a few has put a flow in my creative juices. (Go Buffy!) Any similarity to any other fan fiction posted in this or any other forum is purely coincidental, with one exception. I have posted this story on another site. I am posting it here because I would like feedback, and I am not getting any at the other site. The readers here seem to post more feedback than readers at the other site. I'm not trying to be a glory hound, and I encourage constructive criticism. The story is a gameplay narrative. It starts in the 3rd person for the prologue only, the rest will be in 1st person. It is not a walk-through of the Main Quest. However, as it is a gameplay narrative, so readers will have to plod through the tutorial section much as I had to plod through while writing it. The tutorial is essential for character development, as you will see. The posts will be relatively short so that the reader will not have to wade through miles of text per post. To keep them short, I am going to borrow Acadian's chapter numbering system (1.1, 1.2, etc.) so I don't end up with three digit chapter numbers. I hope you will enjoy...The Talendor Chronicles Post Script - I have already screwed up. Instead of putting "Authors Note and Disclaimer" in the subject line, it should read "Part One". Is there a way to change that? Post Script #2 - The first four installments after the Prologue are way too long. This was a rookie mistake and has been rectified Beginning with Chapter 3. I apologize for the long posts, but I promise you'll be glad you slogged through them.  This post has been edited by TheOtherRick: Feb 5 2011, 02:00 AM -------------------- |
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TheOtherRick The Talendor Chronicles Jan 25 2011, 07:39 PM
TheOtherRick [size=3]Prologue - Unknown Origin
“My head is kil... Jan 25 2011, 07:58 PM TheOtherRick [size=3]Chapter 1.1 – Out of the Cell
[i]Okay…I h... Jan 25 2011, 08:27 PM mALX A great start !! I like the little detai... Jan 25 2011, 11:41 PM
TheOtherRick
A great start !! I like the little deta... Jan 25 2011, 11:46 PM mALX
A great start !! I like the little det... Jan 26 2011, 01:17 AM TheOtherRick [center]Chapter 1.2 – Out of the cell
[i]I can’t ... Jan 25 2011, 11:43 PM TheOtherRick [center]Chapter 2.1 – Finding My Way
I have no id... Jan 26 2011, 12:37 AM TheOtherRick [center]Chapter 2.2 – Finding My Way
I replaced t... Jan 26 2011, 01:19 AM mALX I just got a glimpse of where I think you are goin... Jan 26 2011, 01:26 AM mALX OMG, you put another chapter up while I was readin... Jan 26 2011, 01:40 AM TheOtherRick
OMG, you put another chapter up while I was readi... Jan 26 2011, 02:21 AM Acadian Welcome to Chorrol and to the arena of fan fiction... Jan 26 2011, 04:52 AM Jacki Dice
That's a very good point!
:rofl:
V... Jan 27 2011, 05:20 AM TheOtherRick Some gratitude first...
@ mALX - Thanks for all o... Jan 28 2011, 12:47 AM Acadian A neat view of Chorrol as we traveled with your Bo... Jan 28 2011, 02:06 AM mALX From your description and encounter with the Khaji... Jan 29 2011, 04:53 AM Grits I’m enjoying your story, and I’m glad you’re posti... Jan 29 2011, 10:35 PM TheOtherRick A few thanks are in order...
@ Acadian - Great ca... Jan 30 2011, 05:42 PM Acadian This was great fun! You did the full measure ... Jan 31 2011, 02:56 AM mALX What a brilliant twist you added to the story... Jan 31 2011, 04:59 AM TheOtherRick To my two fans, a word like "brilliant" ... Feb 1 2011, 01:56 PM mALX You are doing an Awesome job of giving Talasma per... Feb 1 2011, 10:18 PM Acadian Stick to your posting discipline. No faster than ... Feb 2 2011, 02:01 AM TheOtherRick I will remain disciplined and post no more often t... Feb 3 2011, 06:45 PM Grits I continued along, crouched and attentive, with th... Feb 3 2011, 11:16 PM mALX ROFL !!! I absolutely love this chap... Feb 4 2011, 01:15 AM Acadian Old business - I reread your edited version of th... Feb 4 2011, 03:18 AM TheOtherRick Another two days has come and gone...time for more... Feb 5 2011, 03:30 PM haute ecole rider The moral struggle here over preemptive strikes is... Feb 5 2011, 05:56 PM Grits And now, Talendor was heading to the inn after sel... Feb 5 2011, 11:05 PM Acadian I agree that the first scene was a delightful exch... Feb 6 2011, 03:30 AM mALX I am still wondering if Honditar is really claustr... Feb 6 2011, 04:04 PM TheOtherRick First, to the authors of Buffy the Bowgirl, A New ... Feb 7 2011, 05:57 PM haute ecole rider Great vengeance segment! But I'm not sure ... Feb 7 2011, 06:48 PM Acadian I suspect Talendor is not at his best toe-to-toe. ... Feb 8 2011, 03:09 AM mALX Beautiful descriptive phrases - and the Talendor g... Feb 8 2011, 07:39 AM TheOtherRick Another couple days have come and gone...time flie... Feb 9 2011, 06:33 PM Acadian I continue to thoroughly enjoy this! You have... Feb 10 2011, 01:42 AM mALX I'm struggling on whether Honditar can really ... Feb 10 2011, 02:29 AM TheOtherRick @ Acadian - Talendor did an "aw shucks" ... Feb 11 2011, 11:18 PM haute ecole rider I should have mentioned that I always clear a dung... Feb 12 2011, 12:02 AM Acadian To your question, regarding the trustworthiness o... Feb 12 2011, 01:56 AM mALX I think it is really well done the way you are hav... Feb 12 2011, 02:08 AM Grits “If you run in here and fail to close the door jus... Feb 12 2011, 02:39 PM mALX
“If you run in here and fail to close the door ju... Feb 12 2011, 03:14 PM TheOtherRick @ All - I noticed a common theme in the comments, ... Feb 13 2011, 10:27 PM Acadian Another enjoyable chapter. The lessons continue a... Feb 14 2011, 01:59 AM Thomas Kaira Greetings, Talendor! Glad to see there is yet ... Feb 14 2011, 09:17 AM Captain Hammer Okay, caught up on this one as well.
Let me just ... Feb 14 2011, 07:10 PM Grits The scene with the stag was enthralling. Talendor ... Feb 15 2011, 04:05 AM TheOtherRick @ Acadian - Glad to see you're starting to tru... Feb 16 2011, 01:26 AM Captain Hammer Maybe ‘fetcher’ is what the Dunmer called children... Feb 17 2011, 01:49 AM haute ecole rider Once again I enjoyed the latest installment in Tal... Feb 16 2011, 05:32 AM Thomas Kaira I agree, there's no need to apologize for stra... Feb 16 2011, 07:34 AM Grits The sword/no sword debate is intriguing. After all... Feb 17 2011, 04:54 PM mALX
[i][b]Maybe ‘fetcher’ is what the Dunmer called c... Feb 18 2011, 07:18 AM ghastley The only thing I'd say about the deviation fro... Feb 17 2011, 09:04 PM TheOtherRick Since everyone had pretty much the same comment, t... Feb 18 2011, 01:52 PM haute ecole rider Great to see an in-depth lesson on magicka, especi... Feb 18 2011, 04:39 PM ghastley Honditar spends a lot of his time outside the Mage... Feb 18 2011, 09:25 PM Captain Hammer So Talendor'll be joining that great bastion o... Feb 19 2011, 06:32 AM TheOtherRick @ h.e.rider - Thanks for the nits...they have been... Feb 22 2011, 02:49 PM haute ecole rider I really enjoyed the enrollment process. It brough... Feb 22 2011, 04:25 PM SubRosa I am up to chapter 7 of the TC now, and I am enjoy... Feb 22 2011, 06:47 PM Captain Hammer
No, he was of only average height, mostly bald, a... Feb 23 2011, 03:09 AM Grits Talendor’s dream was very effective, moving quickl... Feb 23 2011, 06:15 PM mALX I have the worst feeling Talendor's dreams are... Feb 24 2011, 05:33 AM Zalphon "You want to join the guild, Tree-Hugger?... Feb 25 2011, 02:41 AM Acadian Ch 11
'Maybe ‘fetcher’ is what the Dunmer cal... Feb 25 2011, 03:52 AM SubRosa "Hey...you can't do that!"
Just ... Feb 25 2011, 03:57 AM TheOtherRick Oh my! So many comments this time...
@ h.e.ri... Feb 25 2011, 04:26 PM haute ecole rider I love Athragar! He's even more fun here t... Feb 25 2011, 07:43 PM SubRosa I take it that you are using a mod with alternate ... Feb 26 2011, 02:47 AM Captain Hammer Oh, come now, even the Adoring Fan puts a smile on... Feb 26 2011, 06:46 AM Grits Athragar just listened without interruption until ... Feb 26 2011, 04:19 PM mALX
ROFL !!!
Love how you take thes... Feb 27 2011, 07:21 AM Thomas Kaira Urgh... I'm behind! :panic:
Lemme comment... Feb 27 2011, 07:41 AM ghastley Nice introduction to Detect Life but he may need a... Feb 27 2011, 03:51 PM TheOtherRick @ h.e.rider - I'm glad you enjoy my take on At... Feb 28 2011, 08:37 PM SubRosa First off, excellent title!
“What is earana?”... Feb 28 2011, 09:08 PM ghastley But when you give the book to Teekeus, Earana want... Feb 28 2011, 09:54 PM haute ecole rider I agree, throwing Honditar into the mix puts an un... Feb 28 2011, 10:04 PM Thomas Kaira Uh oh... you are a devious one, Rick! When I s... Feb 28 2011, 10:58 PM mALX
ROFL !!! OMG, your rendition ... Mar 1 2011, 09:58 PM Olen Well I read this one and I'm glad I did. The ... Mar 4 2011, 12:50 AM TheOtherRick @ Everyone - Thank you all so much for every comme... Mar 4 2011, 01:45 AM SubRosa I love the walk from Chorrol to Cloud Top. It is t... Mar 4 2011, 02:35 AM haute ecole rider I had just written this quest last week! It se... Mar 4 2011, 03:40 AM ghastley Once again a fight where the loser runs away. If y... Mar 4 2011, 05:17 PM Grits Oh, how I love Cloud Top! That trail is sure a... Mar 4 2011, 06:22 PM Olen Good part. Fun to read as ever.
More entertaini... Mar 6 2011, 01:58 PM ureniashtram He-hey! Umm.. Let's just say that I'm ... Mar 6 2011, 06:54 PM TheOtherRick @ SubRosa - Thank you for catching the nits...they... Mar 7 2011, 05:41 PM SubRosa “God’s Blood, that woman can talk!” he said, u... Mar 7 2011, 05:51 PM haute ecole rider That was the one thing about this quest that bugge... Mar 7 2011, 06:31 PM Grits Oh, how I love this chapter! Earana chatting u... Mar 8 2011, 02:06 AM Olen Good part, as the others have said your observatio... Mar 9 2011, 08:27 PM TheOtherRick @ SubRosa - He's not one to point fingers... Mar 10 2011, 06:01 AM SubRosa Now that was an exciting adventure in Hackdirt... Mar 10 2011, 11:48 PM  |
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