Legacy, Book II of the Corruption Trilogy Options

[Acadian]

You impart a nice, epic feel here as Ashur laments with Kirsten. Then drifting into the realm of Vaermina was a very effective turn of words.

A smiling Argonian, lol. Poor Ashur. It’s always a test.

[Zalphon]

I feel that conversation had a lot more to it than just what was said.

Well, Argonians rarely show emotion... Now you have a visual why.

[mALX]

This is Awesome, Zalphon !! Poor Ashur, those were some powerful sentiments he expressed - you wrote this chapter extremely well, and it was huge with emotion - AWESOME WRITE !!!!!

[Zalphon]

Thanks

[Grits]

Zalphon, I found this chapter beautifully and concisely written. Your images were crystal clear, and I could easily infer Ashur's emotional state from his thoughts and conversation.

[Zalphon]

Thank you, Grits

Caves of Fjalding should be interesting (I plan to take a new twist with it instead of Bloodmoon's "Kill the Draugr!")

[Zalphon]

Chapter Three: The Caves of Fjalding (Part I)

Behind me, the light slowly faded into nothingness. As I took another step, I fell to a kneeling stance as my skull felt like magma was being poured in. My anguished scream echoed throughout the Caves, but then I looked up.

As my head lifted, I felt an icy grip engulf me. I looked at the Ebon-Clad Dunmer. His eyes met mine and I instantly recognized the face. It was Kalian. In his hand he held a faintly glowing, ebony long-sword. “Stand up, Traitor,” he scowled. “You killed Kaushad and now you will die yourself.”

I got up to my feet and looked him in the eye. “You lived by the codes I presented for so long and then you abandon them?” Kalian asked. “Why? Why do you dishonor me? Ever since you left that worthless tribe, I have protected you…”

His sword slashed at my torso. Instinctively, I parried and looked him in the eye. “I do not dishonor you, Kalian,” I replied. “I bring you more honor than the Inquisitors ever will.” His shield flew into my face, knocking me down.

“You betrayed your oath, Ashur,” he barked as his sword lunged for my chest. I managed to roll out of the way…mostly. I felt the blade skin part of my back and an agonizing howl escaped my lips. With a rush of adrenaline, I somersaulted backwards.

“I have not yet begun to fight, Ashur,” Sir Broodikus taunted. “Yet you already languish. This shall be a quick fight.” His voice was dripping with annoyance. It was this that made it clear to me… He had a weakness.

“You’re a coward,” I retorted. “You relied on Sar-Kura and Ra’Kyre. You don’t think I don’t know? You’re a weakling, a worm, a maggot.” I could see his scarlet eyes transmogrify into burning, red-hot coals. He charged at me with fury flowing through his veins.

With a well-timed swing of my own blade, I watched him fade away. Kalian was a mere phantasm, yet the wounds he had caused were very real. The blood had begun to scab and that just meant I’d be less agile. More open to an attack.

I whispered a prayer to Kalian. My sword illuminated in a bright flash of light and then it quickly waned to a more visible level. I heard a low, guttural moaning. What I saw standing in front of me was a Draugr…

The rotting flesh, pallid eyes and deathly stench confirmed my hypothesis. What really worried me was that he was holding a Nordic-Steel Battle-Axe. Covering his torso was a tunic of Nordic-Steel Chainmail. I knew one thing; this was the thing that killed most of the Nordic Warriors.

[Acadian]

Ashur did a good job of finding and exploiting a weakness in Kalian. Well done!

[mALX]

This is amazing, Zalphon! I've always been highly impressed by the research you put into your stories, but you really floored me with your history on the Dunmer !! Awesome Write !!

[McBadgere]

Excellent job!!...

Nice one... ...

Btw...Are the Templars...Y'know...Templars...White crosses, religion, beards, no women and excellent castles...Or are they just called Templars and doing similar stuff?...

Really is excellent stuff though...Well done... ...

[Zalphon]

The Templar are very, very devout followers of Kalian Broodikus

They don't use White-Crosses, but they are the equivalent to the Knight-Templar (although to a much more extreme level). And Templar may have women and often do live in grand castles.

If anyone has played Diablo II, a lot of my inspiration for this entire story came from the Zakarum (the corrupted order of paladins, by Mephisto, Lord of Hate).

[McBadgere]

Cheers... ...

Excellent stuff though...*Applauds*...