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post Apr 29 2012, 10:18 PM
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Hey everyone.

This has been rattling around my head for a while now, and I figure I might as well get it started with and continued while I've got the drive to write it. As you might have guessed, the following is based off the Shivering Isles, but I'm doing my own thing with it somewhat, so I should probably say now that, while there are bits of this that you'll recognise, there are a lot of parts that you won't; I'm bringing in a lot of new character ideas and so forth, and there will be interesting things done.

Anyway, I'm not very good at this whole introduction business, so I'll just let you get on and read it. Do enjoy!


Madgod


Chapter 1-The Champion


Sing deep, sing low, sing the song
pay the piper to play it on
to his tune you must dance
and slumber in eternal trance
for deep within its secret dreams
madness desperate plots and schemes
the gauntlet breaks the chain of snakes
and its bloody bounty it finally takes
the starving serpent eats the tail
consuming slowly as a snail
but patient, hungry, it awaits
the cyclic feast it anticipates
will we be free or forever slave
hear the siren call of ‘obey’
or will Madgod rise and strike down
mercury tide that would Isles drown?

Do not be here when it will come. It is hungry. It is angry. It has plans. Your nice little world which you’re reading this in won’t be all that nice if they come to fruition. Oh no. You lucky, lucky things. You honestly have no idea. Must I explain?

Very well. Are you sitting comfortably? Then I shall begin.

Let’s step back. Right now, we are at the end. To begin at the end is impossible. Not impossible, no, not here, nothing is impossible here, but to begin at the end here is implausible. Is that the word I want? No. Unnecessary. It is doing it wrong. Sometimes it works, but here it does not. So let’s take a step back from here.



His fished crashed down, crunching bone. A scream rang out.

“Mercy! Please, mercy!”

“Mercy?” he asked, gauntlet raised above his head, his scarred, battered face contorted with rage. “You want mercy? That’s just too good.”



No, not far enough, further back we go. We need to get to before that. No context. That’s too close to the end for what we want.



He and Her Ladyship turned around on the glass platter as it rose above the city, stepping around one another’s feet as they danced.

“See,” she said. “I told you you’d be good at this; it’s all about the rhythm.”

He nodded, glancing down at their feet self-consciously as they moved.

“Relax,” she said, steering a hand gently down his back, guiding him along. “You’re learning fast, my dear.”

The world spun below them as they danced on their rotating glass platform, hovering in midair.



No, further back still. Is this it? Is this the place?



He pulled himself up the top of the ladder, through the trapdoor, into the great glass globe at the tower’s very top. He stared at the figure sitting cross-legged a few feet from him on a cushion, and the eyes of the man stared back at him.

In a voice as thick and rich as Felldew, Sentinel said; “Ah, you’re here. I saw you coming, you know.”



Not here, no. No, no, where is it? Where do I start?



The Angel of Rage slammed down before him in a landing that sent a cloud of ash blossoming around her. Wings of flame and lightning pinned themselves to her back, and a mace of fire materialised in her hand. Her ruined face twisted into a grimacing snarl as she beheld the intruder.

“Why are you here, mortal?” she demanded. “Why should I not destroy you?”



Not yet. She comes partway through. This is all too late, nobody will understand it, you fool!



They opened with a creak, and he saw it spread before him. A twisted landscape of gnarled roots, growing upwards into the air whilst leafy branches clawed at the ground. Rock formations of shimmering, rainbow stone formed bizarre shapes, ones that seemed to gain form as you looked at them, moved, grew, reached towards you. Faces grew from the scenery, hungry mouths and gasping maws, clawing talons.

He blinked and glanced away, setting off for the city in the distance.



No, not quite. Nearly there, nearly there. Here we are. Here, we begin.



He was drinking to the death of his best friend.

He getting slapped on the back, cheered, toasted, hailed as a hero, bought drinks, and all for the simple reason that he had just killed his best friend.

The night was a blur of tankards, one swallowed after another. There were yells of encouragement, the crowd urging him on once more, their favourite, their hero, their champion. He could only remember them being quiet from earlier, when they had all fallen silent right after that moment.

The taste of ale, the smell of smoke, the offensive eye-watering blur of flaming torches. He couldn’t focus his gaze properly, he noticed, and his tongue felt numb. He was getting drunk. Good.

“’nother drink!” he slurred out, swaying as he did so. Behind and beside him, the rest of the Blue Team cheered their approval and assent, ordering another round. He wasn’t paying tonight. He didn’t know who was paying tonight, and he didn’t care. What he wanted right now was noise. What he wanted right now was cheering. What he wanted right now was distraction.

His head was numb, spinning, buoyant. He managed to grin as complete strangers approached him, shook his hand, and grinning was good. Grinning meant he was happy, and he knew that it was important that he felt happy, that everyone expected him to be happy. He thought he was happy, so he was. He had the ale down the hatch, and that was good. That was a good way to get happy, get happy quickly.

“That’s our Carnius. Ain’t that something? Our Carnius, of all the people.”

That was one of the boasts. One of the favourites

“Waterfront boy, he is. Knew him since he were a kid.”

And there, another. He could pick the threads of conversation out as the Waterfront locals boasted about him, their Carnius, who had grown up around here. A real local hero. Something to boast about. Something to be proud of. Just went to show.

He stood, the sudden movement sending him swaying. There was a chorus of questions about what he was doing, where he was going and he answered them with; “Goin’ out back. Be back in a minute.”

He stumbled outside, moving through the inn, the crowd of blurry faces parting before him. He caught snippets of detail, a grin from an admirer, an alluring look from a hopeful wench, a torch burning in a bracket, a knot in the wooden surface of a table. The din of the tavern muted as he entered the back alley. It was a good tavern, that one. Good stories there. That time he and Agronak had nearly got arrested for brawling, only for the Watch to recognise who they were and haul everyone else off but leave them be, shaking their hands as they did so. That was one of the good ones. One of the favourites.

He urinated down the back wall, in the quiet, concentration taken up by the task at hand, before he finished relieving himself. And then, for a moment, in the quiet that followed, he was drawn back to earlier that day, in the hush that had come. The hush that had come when the battered, broken corpse had slumped to the floor of the arena, armour clattering, as Carnius had stepped back from the body of Agronak Gro-Malog, the Grey Prince. The hush that had come as he had limped away, down to the bloodworks. The hush that had come as he had done so without acknowledging the silent crowd, with the cheering only rumbling into his range of hearing as he had splashed chilly water from the Basin of Restoration onto his face.

And for a moment, the clarity and the harsh reality he had been avoiding since then hit him like the blow from a warhammer. Agronak was dead. He had killed him.

Carnius Hackelt, new Grand Champion of the arena, leant forwards against the wall and quietly wept for what he had just done.


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Colonel Mustard   Madgod   Apr 29 2012, 10:18 PM
Darkness Eternal   Crucible, never has there been a more wretched hiv...   Sep 19 2012, 04:37 PM
Darkness Eternal   Crucible, never has there been a more wretched hiv...   Sep 19 2012, 04:37 PM
mALX   * Indoril - great name! ROFL!!...   Sep 19 2012, 07:02 PM
Colonel Mustard   DE (and your identical-in-every-way twin): Thanks ...   Sep 20 2012, 12:29 PM
mALX   [b]DE (and your identical-in-every-way twin): Tha...   Sep 20 2012, 07:27 PM
Zalphon   This was a great chapter; I loved the Marketplace ...   Sep 22 2012, 12:14 AM
Colonel Mustard   This was a great chapter; I loved the Marketplace...   Sep 22 2012, 02:32 PM
King Coin   Meeting the dunmer trader and her dremora was a re...   Sep 22 2012, 07:12 PM
TheBrume   Wow.Just read through this. And the only thing I c...   Sep 26 2012, 11:07 PM
Colonel Mustard   KC: I wanted to do more than just have 'they t...   Oct 3 2012, 05:22 PM
TheBrume   Excellent! The Mysterious Sentinel is finally ...   Oct 4 2012, 05:39 PM
Darkness Eternal   Sisterhood of Immolation. Sounds . . .dangerous. Y...   Oct 4 2012, 07:02 PM
King Coin   What I enjoyed the most about this one was the por...   Oct 6 2012, 07:47 PM
McBadgere   Fantastic!!... Loved the whole duality to...   Nov 9 2012, 07:24 PM
Zalphon   When do we get another chapter, Colonel?   Nov 9 2012, 10:27 PM
Colonel Mustard   Hello everyone Apologies for this taking so long,...   Nov 17 2012, 04:04 PM
Colonel Mustard   Chapter 15-The Golden Baliwog “You know,...   Nov 19 2012, 11:15 PM
King Coin   “It’s rude to stare, you know,” Sentinel said wit...   Nov 21 2012, 12:11 AM
Darkness Eternal   The Watchman: Ooh, I like the Sentinel and his mu...   Nov 28 2012, 03:13 AM
Colonel Mustard   King Coin: Thanks very much! I was going for a...   Nov 28 2012, 05:41 PM
Fiach   I'm reminded of the works of Patrick Rothfuss ...   Nov 29 2012, 11:27 PM
King Coin   … and had managed to get to know the rest of the s...   Dec 2 2012, 03:35 AM
Lycanthropic-Legend   I must say, I have been stalking this story for qu...   Dec 2 2012, 02:12 PM
McBadgere   Amazing stuff...All of it... Loved Sentinel, love...   Dec 13 2012, 02:01 PM
Colonel Mustard   Fiach: Thanks very much indeed! :) I'll ad...   Dec 15 2012, 11:03 PM
McBadgere   Oooh...Niiice... Pretty nightmarish stuff... Ah...   Dec 17 2012, 07:14 AM
Lycanthropic-Legend   A gritty and dark chapter this was. And I love it....   Dec 17 2012, 07:43 PM
King Coin   The series of dreams were very creepy. Love it...   Dec 17 2012, 08:36 PM
Colonel Mustard   McBadgere: Nightmarish was exactly what I was goin...   Dec 19 2012, 01:17 AM
Darkness Eternal   Please. Morality in Daedric realms? There is no su...   Dec 19 2012, 11:57 PM
Colonel Mustard   Well, that's exactly the point I was trying to...   Dec 21 2012, 09:34 AM
McBadgere   Oh yeah!!... Loved the fight, you have an...   Dec 21 2012, 02:21 PM
King Coin   First of all, because I'm evil: :hubbahubba:...   Dec 22 2012, 05:21 PM
Zalphon   I apologize for my absence, but I would like to sa...   Dec 22 2012, 10:26 PM
Colonel Mustard   McB: Well, my point, as labyrinthine and unclear a...   Dec 30 2012, 11:01 PM
Colonel Mustard   Chapter 20-The Faith of the Feasters As was tra...   Dec 30 2012, 11:03 PM
Lycanthropic-Legend   TWO JUICY CHAPTERS!!! "Chapter 1...   Jan 2 2013, 01:50 AM
Lycanthropic-Legend   Edited.   Jan 3 2013, 03:47 AM
Darkness Eternal   How gruesome. Blood, viscera and all manners of oi...   Jan 3 2013, 03:49 AM
McBadgere   Bloody hell...And, most definately, Wow... The sh...   Jan 15 2013, 07:09 AM
mALX   The scene with Cutter was tastefully tackled here,...   Jan 16 2013, 06:24 AM
Zalphon   I rather enjoyed the previous chapter. I especial...   Jan 25 2013, 10:15 AM
Colonel Mustard   Christ almighty, this took a long time to write......   Jan 31 2013, 02:37 PM
McBadgere   Bosmer with a stick!!!... :lol: ... O...   Feb 1 2013, 05:46 AM
Darkness Eternal   Welcome back to writing bloody tales, dear friend...   Feb 1 2013, 07:10 PM
McBadgere   :lol: ...Oh yes...I remember her very proudly disp...   Feb 1 2013, 07:22 PM
mALX   I absolutely loved the entire section with Carnius...   Feb 8 2013, 10:17 AM
Colonel Mustard   Gah, sorry this update took so long to come, every...   Feb 25 2013, 12:00 AM
McBadgere   *Applauds*... Truly beautiful and excellent work ...   Feb 26 2013, 01:59 PM
Darkness Eternal   I was worried you had given up on this story. Glad...   Mar 1 2013, 07:36 PM
Colonel Mustard   Yeah, this part took forever to write. No idea why...   Mar 30 2013, 11:46 AM
McBadgere   Excellent stuff!!... I went to Thadon for...   Mar 31 2013, 09:20 AM
Darkness Eternal   Ah, I remember visiting Syl frequently. I just sid...   Apr 5 2013, 04:04 AM
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