Your story is mesmerizing. The 'voice' of the narrator takes a firm hold of the reader and won't let go. Extremely well done, Zelda_Zealot. The events that take place, the structure and pacing, the chapter headings, and the final revelation are all neatly tied together in a gripping story.
I read your last post where you said that LV isn't the same as the Imperial Legion officer but if he was it would just add to the story. Not to say that it detracts from the story that they aren't identical.
Please write more fan fic from the TES world.
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Virtue itself turns vice, being misapplied, And vice sometime's by action dignified. Shakespeare: Romeo and Juliet II, 3
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