Travels in Vvardenfell - Alric Lycester Options

[treydog]

[quote=Chumbaniya][quote=treydog]A good installment- we begin to get glimmers of Alric's personality in a well-written narrative style. His friendship with Gatrick also tells us a bit about the lead character. More of this, please.[/quote]

Hehe, you're starting to sound like my english exam . Thanks everyone, I'll keep at it. Hopefully something more exciting can happen soon, this is all just building up a background.[/quote]

What can I say? Every now and then I have a flashback to my teaching college composition days :paperbag:

But it is still a good story- beats the scrib jelly out of "What Should I Wear to the Sorority Social?"

[minque]

[quote=Konradude]I uh..like the pictures. I'm too stupid to read though.[/quote]

Now you´re at it again! What makes you think you´re stupid? You should really give it a try, reading the stories here! they are not that hard to read, I think maybe you are a bit unexperienced in reading.....and the best cure for that...is.....yeees that´s right.....reading!!!!


Chumbaniya here has really written a good, easy-to-read story, so give it a go Konrad....you won´t regret it

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[Chumbaniya]

Another update for you . I best tell you though that there's no actual plan for the story as a whole, so it may or may not end up coherent. Anyway, here goes...

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Unfortunately for me, however, this did not alter the fact that I woke with a terrible hangover. Finding Gatrick in a similar state downstairs, and with no reason for us to move on so soon, I suggested that we spend the day in Balmora. Gatrick seemed to be relieved by this, though he didn’t admit it – he was, like many Nords, proud of his ability to take large amounts of drink, and he did his best not show the effects of his own hangover while I recovered from mine.

It was only that afternoon, as we were walking around Balmora, that he told me his real reason for travelling to Vvardenfell. After he had asked me to clarify the story of my release from prison, I realised he had not told me why he was here himself. When I asked, he led me just outside of the town, then sat down on a flat rock and started to explain. As he began to tell his story, his face darkened, and his tone grew grim.

“Seven years ago, Alric, a young man, a Dunmer, came to my family’s village in Skyrim. He was given food and shelter by my people, as the lands where the village lies are cold and barren, and the wilderness can be dangerous for travellers. At the time, I was away on my travels, so I can only tell you what happened as it was told to me.”

As he spoke, I watched his face carefully, but he was staring into the river with a glazed look in his eyes.

“This young man stayed with my people for a few days. He was quiet and solitary, and he never spoke about himself. He simply accepted what my people offered him, and thanked them for their hospitality. One night, though, my brother came back earlier than usual from his hunt, and he heard his wife screaming as he entered his house. He rushed in, drawing his axe ready, and found his wife struggling to escape the clutches of the young Dunmer. He was enraged, and raised his axe to slay him, but the Dunmer had heard him coming, and he turned to face my brother and plunged a dagger into his heart. After that he fled, and he was never seen by any of the villagers again.”

Gatrick was shaking as he came to the end of his story, partly with anger and partly with sadness. I too was moved by the tale – he had never told me of his brother’s murder before – but I was still confused as to how this had brought Gatrick to Vvardenfell.

“I suppose you’re wondering why I am telling you this now” he said, “When I returned to my village, after hearing the news that my brother was dead, I spoke to his wife about my brother’s murderer. I learned little from her, as she was still grieving for my brother, but I was given a name. That name was Nichis Sorendel. I was hungry to seek revenge on him, but I knew that I had little chance of ever finding him. However, the name stuck in my memory, and around a month ago I heard it mentioned again.”

“I was working as a hired guard in Winterhold, and I caught a smuggler trying to load crates of liquors onto his boat. He was clearly afraid for his life, and he was willing to tell me any information so that I would not harm him. I would not have hurt him in any case, but I asked him who he was transporting the liquors to, thinking it could be useful information for my employers. The name he gave me was the same name I had been given by my brother’s wife, seven years ago – Nichis Sorendel."

"At first I was stunned, but I regained my wits and asked him where the goods were to be transported to. He told me they were destined for Morrowind, to the coastal village of Khuul. At this, my hunger for vengeance was renewed, and I let the smuggler go, right then and there, and I gathered together my belongings and set sail for Morrowind as soon as I could. Now I am here, I will find this village, Khuul, and I will finally take the life of Nichis Sorendel and avenge my brother’s death.”

[minque]

Beautifully written, a really high-class story we have here, now don´t disappoint me Chumbaniya, please update and continue this.....ok?

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[Fuzzy Knight]

Nice Chumb.. :goodjob: Please, by all means keep it coming :lickinglips:

[MerGirl]

Oooh, good. It's getting personal now. Very well-written and easy to read. Very involving, and I hope you will continue. :goodjob:

Oh, one thing. I think 'spent' should be 'spend'. (The line, "spend the day in Balmora") But that's just me. I'm not good at tenses, but that one is bugging me... So, I may be wrong.

[Chumbaniya]

[quote=MerGirl]Oooh, good. It's getting personal now. Very well-written and easy to read. Very involving, and I hope you will continue. :goodjob:

Oh, one thing. I think 'spent' should be 'spend'. (The line, "spend the day in Balmora") But that's just me. I'm not good at tenses, but that one is bugging me... So, I may be wrong. [/quote]

I see what you mean with 'spent', and I think it works with either spent or spend, but I think you're probably right that spend is the right word to use there, since I was describing what Alric suggested, not what they did. *changes*