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minque
post Feb 26 2005, 11:52 PM
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Ok so at last I came round to do it.....posting my story that is! I must thank all of you who have encouraged me to do it (oh yes you know who you are!)

Special thanks to Treydog who has helped me with editing and also for being a sounding-board, and thus kept me writing.

I now start with the prologue of my story just to see if you think you like it and want to read more

Enjoy!

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This work is dedicated to Treydog, whose enthusiasm encouraged me to really write this story.



Prologue.

Alone at last, I close the door behind me as I enter the small room which serves as my private library. I’m proud to say that I probably have the most complete collection of books in Vvardenfell these days, though it has taken me the last seven years to get it.

As I tucked my daughter into bed a while ago, I decided that now the time had come to write down my story. Mostly for her sake, but also for me; I need to get it off my mind, in order to continue with my life and to be able to fulfill the tasks that lie before me. Then there are the numerous questions asked by the little girl lying in the next room, unaware of the fact that she’s a miracle of the Age. . Questions about why there are so few children around and why they all seem to be nearly the same age, that is, age 5 and lower. Questions about why everyone she meets looks at me, her mother, with admiration and respect. Questions about why there is a non-ending row of visitors who want to see me and so keep me from being with her, like a normal mother would be.

I know the answers to her questions, but providing those answers means I will have to tell her the whole story, the story about me, Serene of Cyrodiil, a legionnaire’s daughter of uncertain heritage, who has become one of the most powerful and famous people in Vvardenfell….

So there it is......feel free to comment, it´s a short one I know but I have to start somehow.....


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post Feb 12 2006, 04:26 AM
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ah thank you lots
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post Feb 12 2006, 11:15 AM
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DDK= a Daedric Dai Katana. It's one of the more popular and devestating weapons in the game.

It have an astonishing damage rate, but like alll Daedric, it weighs a bit much.


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post Feb 28 2008, 09:03 PM
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That was great! I'll be reading more from you.


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post Mar 28 2010, 08:32 AM
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I just finished reading Chapter 1. Serene is a very likeable character, whom I can easily emphasize with. That is always a good sign, because only good writing can make one feel something (well, other than boredom!).


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post Mar 28 2010, 06:25 PM
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@SubRosa! I'm very flattered you took your time to read this my first try to write something! It's an honor for me to get positive feedback from an expert...

On a side note...I'm re-writing the first 3 chapters, in my opinion I've improved quite a lot since I wrote the first chapter..(oh my, am I cocky... ohmy.gif )


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post Mar 28 2010, 10:37 PM
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In the words of Kid Rock, it's not bragging if you back it up (I left out the words the forum would play with wink.gif)

I should probably stop reading for the meanwhile then, until you start posting the new versions. *rubs hands together with glee at the idea*

There was one thing I meant to ask. You described Serene as having long auburn hair. But in one of the pics of her she had black hair?


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post Mar 29 2010, 09:23 PM
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Ah yes...the hair-mod I used hadn't the exact color, so it had to be black. Besides my charachter Serene in-game isn't quite the same person as the one in the story.. wink.gif


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post Apr 4 2010, 11:58 PM
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I have been amazed and hooked by this story - and I see why you liked the one of my kitty, our characters seem to have similarities in their background! Awesome story and writing, I love this!


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post Apr 5 2010, 12:42 AM
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mALX, Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate it!


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post Apr 7 2010, 04:09 PM
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Just finished reading chapter one. I like it! Loved how you eloborated on her prison stay.
On to chapter 2 and the rest...


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post Apr 7 2010, 11:38 PM
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I have to admit I cried when she was sentenced and her father turned from her. Riveting writing!


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post Apr 8 2010, 11:08 PM
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mALX, Remko! i'm so glad you like my story, it means a lot to me that you guys care to read about Serene!


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post May 12 2011, 03:44 PM
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Wow, Serene has had a rough start! I’m enjoying this story very much. On to Chapter Two!!


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