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PhonAntiPhon
NIAMH.
But first, who is she?
Well she's a character who I have been acquainted with for a very long time, and with whom I have travelled across many worlds.

She's a Wood-Elf, in Nirn terms - of about 30. She's very much her own boss, and not a terribly pleasant individual. She is, to employ a cliche, "mad, bad, and dangerous to know". She's a hard drinking, promiscuous, authority-hating rebel with baggage enough and troubles enough to fill a volume of psychoanalysts' shelves.

She's maybe 5 feet 8 inches in height, very slender, with pale skin and long black hair and dark, chestnut eyes in deep sockets. She had a predilection for body-piercing and a bad-attitude to personal hygiene. She's a thief and an assassin and pretty much anything else that will garner her gold and a thrill.
In the Nirn universe - (Cyrodiil) - she lives principally in Bravil, but has a shack on the waterfront outside of the walls of the Imperial City, although she spends much of her time in a rather dysfunctional relationship with Jo, one of the local "courtesans", who you will not be reading about on here(!).
In Morrowind she was a loner who pretty much stumbled upon a destiny of sorts more by simply being in a certain place at a certain time than by design; whilst she arrived in Skyrim confused and somehow "altered", more feral and wild, as part of a story arc that started in Cyrodiil and ended back there amidst death and heartache.
Since then she has had a second chance, but is squandering it, reverting once again to type...

Throughout her adventures in Nirn - Morrowind, Cyrodiil, and Skyrim, her character has evolved and changed. She's taken on aspects of each of these variants to become something "other" than what she started as; more rounded, but far more complicated. The ultimate expression of that is in the world that she now inhabits - Varrius, a world created for her specifically, with it's own story arc and characters.
Anyway, that's by-the-by, for the nonce, this thread will have various stories and vignettes that I have written involving her, and the characters that she has interacted with, during the time that she has inhabited the Elder Scrolls universe.
(Only some of the stories are on here, as this is a 13-rated forum, and not everything I write is... suitable. For stories not on here, do feel free to visit Niamh's blog, in the signature.)

I hope you enjoy her stories, it's gives me a lot of pleasure to write them. smile.gif
mALX
Welcome to the Fic forum! Niamh sounds interesting and fun - almost lost my monitor to a Pepsi with this little detail:

QUOTE
and a bad-attitude to personal hygiene


Can't wait to read about her, and I def see me visiting that blog!
PhonAntiPhon
[[This is the first story I ever wrote about her, both of us were finding our feet, this early on in our relationship...]

Niamh's Travels - The Wolf

Her horse was getting tired and the unwelcome attentions of a wolf a few miles back along the trail that snaked between the trees had taken their toll of it. Despite her urgings the beast was barely able to manage an irregular trot. Its hind quarters on its right hand side were gashed and bloody from an attack that had she not leapt from the saddle almost at the instant of its inception, would have had very serious consequences indeed.
With a wince as she settled her sore body more comfortably in the saddle she resigned herself to a further unscheduled stop and went over the events of barely two hours previously.

The wolf had come out of the trees to her right, launching itself from the bank behind and slightly above the rear of the horse. Some sixth sense had alerted her that something was about to happen and almost at the instant of its leap she had vaulted from the saddle.
Slightly too slow, she had felt claws rake down the back of her right arm and, subsequently unbalanced, she landed heavily on her ankle. Once on the ground and grimacing in pain, with the back of her arm stinging and hot blood starting to run down over her elbow, she had striven to focus herself. Drawing her elven blade she attempted to grab her shield off of its hook on the saddle, it proved tricky as she had to fight for it as, stumbling on her sore ankle, she competed with her terrified mount as it bucked and kicked, whinnying in fear and pain, its attacker attempting to consolidate its hold on the horse's rump.
Finally grabbing the shield she hobbled as fast as she could around the back of the horse, ducking almost to the ground as she dodged its flailing legs. Composing herself she summoned her strength and barged at the wolf with her shield, the impact shuddering through her slender body and rattling her teeth. It was a big animal and the combined weight of both it and the horse it was currently attached to made it seem like a very solid thing indeed.
She knew she couldn't hope to overcome the creature's inertia and push it off of her horse but she at least hoped to unsettle it enough so that it would leave her mount alone and focus on her, thus allowing her at least a chance of getting a blow in without hitting the other animal.
As it turned out she was unexpectedly successful and to her surprise the great shaggy beast all but lost its grip on its erstwhile prey and with a snarl of rage only partially muffled by a mouthful of horseflesh it leapt backwards and sideways onto the ground and, facing Niamh, tensed and glared at her, its eyes an evil diseased yellow, its muzzle scarlet. Across the distance between them she could detect the rank fetor of its breath as it panted and growled deep in its throat.
Her horse, sensing its opportunity, whinnied and ran back down the road the way they had come. Niamh forced herself not to notice and stared at the wolf, her muscles tensing as she slipped into a defensive crouch; her armoured feet scuffing in the dust of the trail. The two circled each other warily for a moment as if both were duellists searching for an opening.

An archer by nature, Niamh was not wholly comfortable with a blade and when she did use one - (which was not often) - she preferred surprise and daggers by and large; the elven shortsword was light though and comfortable enough for her purposes, although the light shield she complemented it with still felt cumbersome and awkward. Nevertheless she hefted it in front of her and held the sword out to the side, gripping the hilt tightly.

Her eyes narrowed as she saw the big animal tense and spring towards her, its mouth opening wide to reveal an array of sharp yellow fangs flecked with blood and flesh, spittle flew from its gums.
Bracing herself she thrust the shield in front of her and took the force and weight of the wolf upon it, gasping in pain as her damaged ankle sang a high-pitched song of protest in her brain. Her practiced moves came through for her though and she allowed herself to fall backwards, channelling the momentum of the beast, effectively guiding it over the top of her as she rolled under it. As it passed over her, with a grunt of effort she thrust her sword up and around her shield and stabbed the wolf in the flank, the blade penetrating deeply into its body with a wet smacking sound.

The wolf's snarl of rage became a yelp of pain and it pivoted in the air as it left the blade behind it to land awkwardly on its side, hitting the ground hard. Winded herself, Niamh took a deep breath and rolled over flicking herself up onto the balls of her feet, as the wolf stumbled upright and into an awkward crouch, the muscles in its injured side quivering spasmodically, and its legs trembling.
The two faced each other down once again, both panting and shaking with adrenalin. It was a warm evening in the woodlands and Niamh felt perspiration beading on her brow and between her breasts. A trickle of sweat, making its way from her shoulder blades down to the small of her back, tickled her momentarily and she twitched, the sensation strangely acute in her overly-sensitized state.

After a moment the wolf took a step forward and she readied herself once again but then she saw that evidently it was more injured than she had at first thought. Blood that had initially been only a trickle from its flank now flowed in a bright stream matting its fur; still it would not give in though and despite the increasing spasms of its limbs it took a further stumbling step towards her, it's head low, the glowing embers of its eyes filled with hate even as bloody phlegm bubbled from its mouth as it's breathing became more and more ragged. Finally after another moment and with a wheeze like a punctured bellows its legs gave way and it collapsed to the ground.

The tension in the air between them leached away and the world around her swam back into focus, the sounds of the forest re-asserting themselves in her consciousness, as the creature in front of her lay prone on the track mortally wounded.
She felt no pity, nor any sympathy. She was the victor in a fight where there could only have been one outcome and, she knew, had it been her there now lying on the ground breathing shallowly and irregularly as her lifeblood drained into the packed earth of the path then the creature that now suffered before her would have felt no more sympathy for her than she did for it. It was quite simply the way it was.
The wolf gave a final rattling exhalation and the fire went out of its eyes, its body seemed to slump in on itself and it became still.
Only then she did stand and hobbling over to it she kicked it sharply, once, balancing gingerly on her injured ankle. Flicking the shortsword round in her hand she bent and stabbed the blade quickly and efficiently into its chest, flicking it almost as rapidly back out. The speed of its movement left in its wake in the air a string of red beads that sparkled in the light of the setting sun where it broke through the dappled covering of leaves above her.
She wiped the blade on the creature's fur and sheathed it. Standing up she checked around for both any other aggressors - (there were none) - and the horse - (there was no immediate sign).
"Stupid animal." She swore under her breath.
Now that her body had calmed down the pain in her ankle and the stinging from the gash on the back of her upper arm were increasingly vying for her attention. Dropping her shield on the ground she pulled her right arm around in front of her body with her left, twisting it and simultaneously peering over her shoulder, saying a silent prayer of thanks as she did so for the fact that her armour, such as it was, offered no resistance to such awkward positioning.
The white smoothness of her skin on her triceps was shredded, but it looked in actuality relatively minor, and although the back of her arm was caked down to her hand with rapidly drying blood it didn't look like there was any other, or lasting, damage.
As soon as she had found that stupid nag she would wash the wound and dig out one of the cure disease potions she had purchased a few days ago in Bravil, just as a precaution.

Cursing her luck and wincing at the pain in her ankle, she wiped the sweat from her forehead with a grubby hand, picked up her shield, and set off half hopping and half running back down the trail in search of the horse, her quiver of arrows and her bow - appropriated from a Grummite who had no further need of it - jolting on her back...
PhonAntiPhon
[Another earlier tale, which sees Niamh and Vilja getting themselves into trouble whilst exploring. Pretty much anyone who is familiar with Oblivion will know who Vilja is - (thank you Emma) - the Vilja in Niamh's world is a little bit "different" from the original...]

--

DUNGEONEERING

"Ssh!" Said Vilja, looking admonishingly at Niamh, "I can't believe you're making so much noise!"
Niamh shot her an irritated glance and went back to disentangling herself from the hanging roots that depended from the low ceiling of the dank cave they had found themselves in. They'd come across this one a little way outside of Bravil, its opening covered by the familiar wooden door, rotting now and hanging slightly askew from its equally worm-eaten frame. Vilja was still recovering from her - albeit entirely self-inflicted - alchemical accident and was suffering a little in the noonday heat, so it had seemed like a good idea at the time to seek a break of sorts in the cool, moist darkness of the cave.

It turned out that the place was infested with Daedra which, whilst providing a diversion from the otherwise tedious trip southwards from the Imperial City, did nothing to improve Vilja's mood.
"I hate creature caverns." She said, pouting, her silvery eyes flashing in the gloom. "Lots of work for very little loot. And my face hurts..."
Niamh rolled her eyes and, raising them to the rough rocky roof of the entrance passageway, mouthed a small prayer to Sithis. "I'll make your face hurt in a minute sweetie." She said under her breath, however, turning to her companion she said brightly, "Look V, think of it as a little diversion from the trip, you didn't like it out there either." She gestured back to the door.
Vilja harrumphed and signalled, not without a degree of ill-humour, for Niamh to lead the way deeper into the system.

++++

The "diversion" had not proven to be a smooth one. This close to the bay the floor was puddled and in some places covered to a depth of 2 or 3 feet with cold, murky water seeping in from the Silverfish River. Niamh had received a Slaughterfish bite to her ankle which had resulted in a deal of frenzied but surreptitious thrashing about, hindered in part by Vilja's refusal to assist and constant abjurations to "Be Quiet!"
Now after several Scamps, a Daedroth and a Land Dreugh, they had finally emerged from the most recent watery tunnel and had found themselves in a root-choked cavern lit faintly by luminous fungi. Niamh could just make out a wall to their right but little else though a constant low breeze blew on their damp bodies, prickling their skin and making them shiver. It seemed to be coming from somewhere ahead of them and indeed, once Niamh had extricated herself from the clinging roots and started forward once more, she could see a darker area to their front that appeared to be the source of the airflow.
Reaching out for Vilja's hand in the dimness, she grasped it and led her companion over to the nearest wall. It was slick with moisture and lichen; she could feel tiny, and not-so-tiny, cave-dwelling creatures scurrying over her feet. From somewhere in the distance came the echoing sound of something large moving about. The sound of trickling water came from over to her left.
She lent close to Vilja who turned to look at her, her damaged eyes glittering in the lambent glow of the fungi. She said she could see just as well as before and indeed it seemed so, nevertheless Niamh couldn't help but resist a shudder at what could have happened. Vilja's mother really would throw a fit if she could see her now.
"I'm going to light a torch." She whispered. "See what's about." This close to Vilja she could smell her skin, Vilja always smelt faintly of roses, albeit somewhat masked by the more pressing odours of sweat and general dirt that both of them carried with them on the road.
"I don't know why you don't wear that helmet thing you've got." Vilja replied. Her breath was warm on Niamh's face, carrying with it the scent of almonds which under other circumstances would have been pleasantly distracting, however;
"It's made for humans." Niamh shot back testily. "It hurts my ears. You've tried it as well."
Vilja was silent for a moment.
"Ok. I'm sorry Niamh." She said quietly. "Guess I'm a bit fed up today."
"It's ok," lied Niamh, "We'll talk about it when we get out of here. We'll get to Bravil and sort out S'krivva; hole up in an inn for a couple of days and take some time. Ok?" She touched Vilja's arm lightly with the tips of her long pale fingers; chipped and cracked black varnish on the nails, Vilja's skin was cold and damp, the hairs on it standing stiffly to attention.
The glowing orbs in Vilja's face looked at her intensely for a moment, black pupils narrowed to tiny points despite the gloom.
"Ok." She whispered.
It wasn't ok and both of them knew it but that wasn't a discussion for here, now, that was something for later...
Niamh reached behind her and rummaged around in her pack, attempting not to cut herself on anything sharp. There was so much in there at the moment that she had a job to find what she was looking for. Finally grabbing hold of a torch she pulled it out and held it whilst Vilja, taking a couple of pieces of flint, struck them together against the tarry wadding at the end.
The atmosphere in the cave was close, fetid and damp and it took her several attempts before she could raise a spark and she cursed under her breath. Eventually the flints connected successfully and the wadding flared alight. Vilja turned briefly away and Niamh squinted against the sudden flickering glow, holding the torch away from her body and peering into the cavern lit now by a smoky yellow flame that though strong enough, still flared and popped fitfully in the moist air.
With Vilja tagging along behind brandishing her katana - a wicked looked double-handed affair with a black blade covered in mysterious red Akaviri runes - Niamh cautiously padded across the weed- and rubbish-strewn floor, her eyes scanning all around for signs of anything of interest or danger that came within the dancing circle of torchlight.
There was a scrabbling sound off to their right and Vilja's hand went to Niamh's shoulder, halting her.
They stopped dead in their tracks.
The noise came again, from ahead of them now. It was the sound of something large and chitinous tap-tap-tapping across the floor at the far end of the cavern, where the opening was. They waited, holding their breath.
A third time they heard it, closer now and definitely the sound of large insect-like legs. This time however it was accompanied by a scent; not unpleasant but unlike anything else on Cyrodiil. Vilja had little concept of space - the firmament above - but what little she did know led her to believe quite firmly that it must smell something like that scent.

In the darkness she moved still closer to her companion, putting her lips right up against Niamh's pointed, be-ringed ear.
"Spider Daedra..."
mALX
Niamh's Travels - The Wolf

Really gritty battle in this episode! Visual through your descriptions and attention to detail, it felt like being there seeing it all happen! Really well written and immersive!
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(mALX @ Jan 19 2013, 05:11 PM) *

Niamh's Travels - The Wolf

Really gritty battle in this episode! Visual through your descriptions and attention to detail, it felt like being there seeing it all happen! Really well written and immersive!

Thank you very much!
As soon as I've time I'm looking forward to going through the pieces by others on here, yourself included, it'll be an enjoyable - (not to mention a learning) - experience I am sure.
mALX
** Love the background given for Fiachoir's Daughter on your blog, nice concept that promises an interesting story!
Colonel Mustard
That was an excellent read; gritty, detailed, immersive and exciting, and I'm liking the episodic, vignette-style of these stories. Might have to check out some of the rest on this blog you mentioned; if they're anything like these then I should have some good reads on there.

Just one thing, though; it makes it way easier on the eyes if you put a double space between each paragraph, as big walls of text on a screen aren't really that comfortable to read.

Aside from that, though, excellent stuff.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Colonel Mustard @ Jan 19 2013, 06:20 PM) *


Just one thing, though; it makes it way easier on the eyes if you put a double space between each paragraph, as big walls of text on a screen aren't really that comfortable to read.


I completely appreciate that.
Thing is I do use spacing, as a break, but perhaps not as much as I should do, it can be a little variable! Something I will look at.
Thank you for the feedback.
King Of Beasts
I'm really liking this story tongue.gif

The fight with the wolf was epic.

The cave certainly sounded like a walk in the park -rolls eyes-

I can see why Vilja wasn't enjoying the journey much. You described the cave better than the caves look in-game.

Good Job, I'm really liking this story so far. You're quite talented when it comes to describing the surroundings goodjob.gif
McBadgere
Fair dues!!... biggrin.gif ...

I'm liking Niamh...She's cool... cool.gif ...

Loving the vignette style...Just gets on with stuff...*Applauds*...

Looking forward to more...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...
PhonAntiPhon
Thank you all. It's such a nice thing to have feedback from one's peer group. I purposefully joined chorrol.com for that very thing and I'm glad it's panning out that way.
I've been reading through some of the other stories on here and its so impressive, the talent there is.
Anyway, I have more, and I shall post some soon...
Lady Saga
YES! I am glad you have migrated here, Phon!

mALX
Dungeoneering - First off..."Vilja! WOOOOOT!" SPEW! You have Vilja's personality so down pat here that I can hear her voice saying these things - and remember how it gets under your skin at times, but unplug her mod and try playing without her and see how lonely it is with a quieter companion, lol.

What I like about these short episodes is that you are able to display and showcase a different talent in each episode! This one you excelled in getting into the minds of your characters as you develop them for us - I am loving these episodes! Great Write!
Acadian
Wonderful to see you over here at chorrol, Phon, and a warm welcome as you share excerpts from the life and times of Niamh. The vignettes are indeed effective for her, as they afford glimpses but retain plenty of mystery.

Lots of easy to envision action during that tense wolf fight. Then some very nice cave atmospherics and fun bickering between N & V - that is until Miss Spider Daedra showed up. It occurs, with a smile, that these two episodes have a common theme: Be it horse or Nord, Niamh has challenges getting on with companions. tongue.gif

I hope you and she enjoy this delightfully cozy forum.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Acadian @ Jan 21 2013, 12:48 AM) *

Wonderful to see you over here at chorrol, Phon, and a warm welcome as you share excerpts from the life and times of Niamh. The vignettes are indeed effective for her, as they afford glimpses but retain plenty of mystery.

Lots of easy to envision action during that tense wolf fight. Then some very nice cave atmospherics and fun bickering between N & V - that is until Miss Spider Daedra showed up. It occurs, with a smile, that these two episodes have a common theme: Be it horse or Nord, Niamh has challenges getting on with companions. tongue.gif

I hope you and she enjoy this delightfully cozy forum.

Thank you, it's nice to be here. smile.gif
Yes indeed she does have some "issues" with regards to playing nice with others...!

Well, it has become more than a little apparent that I am going to have to do a little bit of editing before I can post any further stories up on here - content-wise I don't tend to write pg-13 ones, so some "content-amendment" will need to take place!
PhonAntiPhon
Well here's one from the vaults, I was playing around with pathos and wondered how a certain person's demise might play out.
Again, this is fairly early, before Niamh's character had really had much of a chance to develop.
This is "Possible Futures"




Niamh was dying.
There was no doubt, no possibility of error or confusion.
A fact was a fact.

She lay on the cool grass by the obelisk, curled into a tight ball, arms wrapped around her belly, eyes closed; mouth slightly open, teeth clenched.

The sounds of battle had faded into silence and all the other noises of the world had been quieted, replaced by the pulsing of her blood in her veins and the frantic beating of her heart as it pounded in her chest against her ribs. From somewhere at a distance she could not determine, she felt waves of shocking, exquisite pain. Perhaps mercifully, all her body was numb such that she could not tell where her wound was. Vaguely she recalled a Knight of Order, a flash of metal, an impact. She remembered dropping her katana and falling to the ground but little else after that.
Save for the sure knowledge that she was dying.
She lay still, and waited.

++++

So much blood…

Blinking back tears Vilja dropped her katana to the ground and cast away her buckler from off of her wrist. She ran to Niamh – a pale form against the green. She was curled tightly into a ball, arms around her stomach, legs pulled tightly into her body. The grass around her stained darkly with blood.

As Vilja came closer she could hear her panting, her breathing rapid and shallow.

Cold fear embraced Vilja’s body, raising the hairs on the back of her neck, pawing at her chest with wintry fingers.
“Niamh?” She asked, her voice shaking and thick with fright.

She knelt by her companion, the grass sticky under her knees.
“Niamh…?” She asked again, quieter now. She reached out and with trembling fingers laid them on Niamh’s arm.
Niamh’s skin was cold and damp. Usually pale to the point of whiteness it was now sallow and grey.

“Let me see, Niamh.” She said quietly, sniffing. Her eyes were cloudy with tears and she wiped them roughly with her free hand. “Show me where you’re hurt.”
Niamh did not respond; only lay curled up just so, her breath rasping in and out of her mouth.

…So much blood.

Vilja shook her head and put her hands on Niamh’s arm where it was clamped across her stomach, tried gently but firmly to pull it away.
“Please…”

++++

She thought she recognised a voice, barely heard above her pulse which like some giant forge hammer thundered in her ears.
Someone seemed to be calling a name. There was a pressure, a feeling of pushing against the numbness that cocooned her.
The voice came again, closer now it seemed.

“Niamh.” It said.
It was her name, she was Niamh. It was soft and feminine, this voice, heavily accented. Not like the harsh cries she had heard before she fell.

There was a sensation of pulling at first gentle, but then again more firmly.
The world flooded back, washing mercilessly over her.
“Please…”

++++

Oh no.

Vilja’s insistence had paid off but now if anything the situation was worse.
With a cry Niamh had come to as Vilja pulled more firmly at her arm. Her body had relaxed and unfolded. She rolled onto her back, her legs falling open; her free arm lying limp at her side.
Vilja, still holding Niamh’s other arm gazed in blank wide-eyed horror at her ruined body.

The knight’s sword had rent Niamh’s belly asunder, butchering her midriff as surely as one of the market traders in Imperial City would carve up a chop.
Where the perfect skin of Niamh’s stomach had once been was a ragged bloody gash from which her lifeblood flowed onto the grass, soaking into the uncaring earth.
The wound yawned massively, extending the full width of her belly. Her chest, groin, and thighs looked as though they had been painted darkly crimson; the freshly spilled blood sparkled harshly in the sunlight dappling through the canopy of trees above them.

Vilja was for a moment unable to move, transfixed by the destruction before her. Grasping Niamh’s hand in both of hers she squeezed her partner’s fingers.

They were cold, twig-like.

“Oh Niamh…” she gurgled, her voice was wet with tears, too full of sorrow. “Oh, my dearest one.”

It was a moment or two before she looked at Niamh’s face and when she did she saw that it was grey and glistening with an unhealthy sweaty sheen.
Niamh was watching her, her dark eyes bright now, a reflection of the pain betrayed in her face.
Vilja gazed at that face, unable to comprehend the hurt that it conveyed, unable to speak.

++++

Vilja.

Her partner swam into focus. She was not looking at her, but looking somewhere on her body; looking perhaps at the small sun which, radiating knives and razors, was burning in her stomach and lighting the edges of her vision with pure white pain.

Vilja would make it better; she would know what do…
Niamh coughed, bringing up gobbets of bloody phlegm that bubbled up out of her mouth and ran thickly down over her cheeks to the ground.
…Except she couldn’t.

Niamh knew Vilja lacked the skill, but it would not have mattered anyway.
No one could fix her, she was broken beyond repair.

Vilja’s head turned, and their eyes met.
The sunlight shone and glinted off of Vilja’s long blonde hair, tied up in its usual pony tail. The skin of her face was freckled.
Niamh had always liked Vilja’s freckles.

Vilja’s silvery eyes were pools of heartache and tears flowed in rivers down her cheeks.
Her lips moved.

++++

“…can’t fix you Sweetie.” Croaked Vilja at last. “I can’t fix you.”
She shook her head, her lips trembling. “I’m so sorry. I wish…”

Niamh took a deep breath, wincing as fresh pain flared in her guts.
“It’s ok, V.” She said, her voice little more than a whispered breath, “It’s not your fault. I think I got broke too much.”

There was a silence between them for a moment then, a deep, profound silence. Vilja could not bear to look at her partner’s face as her life melted from her, but could not turn away lest she missed the briefest flicker of hope in those deep, twinkling eyes.
Niamh fixated on Vilja’s gaze; hung onto it as a mariner, wrecked in stormy seas, would to a barrel or a plank, keeping himself afloat and taking some hope from its presence, however false the hope or doomed to failure that course of action may be.

After a few moments an understanding passed between them.
“Hold me,” Breathed Niamh.

Vilja lay down on the grass next to her companion, shuffling closer she raised Niamh’s head with one hand and slid her arm under her. Placing her head down gently, she pressed herself tightly to her, maybe hoping that the warmth and vitality of her own body would communicate itself to Niamh’s cold, dying flesh. Had Vilja been able, she would have surrendered half her remaining years for but one moment more of Niamh being alive, and unhurt.

Niamh’s hair was matted with sweat and plastered to her forehead, with a shaking hand Vilja brushed it away and, lowering her face, kissed her gently.
Niamh smiled weakly; her breathing though still ragged, had slowed now and was slowing still, Vilja could feel the thudding of Niamh’s heart in her chest.

“We had some good times. Didn’t we?” Again, a paper-thin whisper.
“The very best.” Replied Vilja, every word filmed with tears.
She drew in a shuddering breath. “You are crazy, but I Love you.”

“I Love you, too.”
There was nothing more.

There were no more words to say, nothing to be done; no thought, action, imprecation or abjuration would change anything now.
Vilja clung to Niamh then, heedless of the blood that covered her, as if holding her tightly would stop her from leaving but it was too late as, with a sigh, Niamh’s breath left her body for the final time, her heart slowed, faltered, and stopped.
She slipped away, and left Vilja all alone.

A dead weight of despair pressed down onto Vilja as Niamh’s vital spark went out. All the world and all of its pain and its sorrow beat down upon her shoulders. With a strangled sob she gathered her partner’s lifeless body into her arms, squeezed her to herself, and wept; wept for Niamh, for her, and for the life that they would now never have together.
Great wracking sobs they were, and she paused only to draw deep shaking breaths, snot and tears coated her face as she pressed it against Niamh’s neck before turning it to the heavens and wailing her anguish at them, now cursing them, now pleading with them.
But for nought, there was no response. The heavens went on their way, the stars wheeling unceasingly in their paths above Vilja, seemingly mocking her even as her world had come to a stop.

She cried until she was beyond tears, cried until it felt like there were no more tears in all of the Shivering Isles to cry but even when she had nothing left beyond gasping, breathless sobs she would not let go of Niamh, could not let go of her and so as the day wore on she knelt, holding onto her tightly, rocking her gently and whispering softly to her.
“Oh my dearest Niamh, I wish I could have saved you.”

But there was too much blood.

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Lady Saga
Very detailed and at times gruesome, but an awesome read. My fave is the second 'chapter', where Niamh and Vilja were dungeoneering. I really want one of my characters in Oblivion to find some sort of partner.

Hey PhonAntiPhon. I've always wanted to ask if Niamh is inspired by somebody in your life, or somebody who was in your life?

PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Lady Saga @ Jan 22 2013, 06:49 PM) *

Very detailed and at times gruesome, but an awesome read. My fave is the second 'chapter', where Niamh and Vilja were dungeoneering. I really want one of my characters in Oblivion to find some sort of partner.

Hey PhonAntiPhon. I've always wanted to ask if Niamh is inspired by somebody in your life, or somebody who was in your life?

Glad you like 'em. smile.gif

Actually no, I've never met or known anyone quite like her. She has really just evolved that way. I'm not like that, my wife certainly isn't and I'm not sure I would ever really get on with her if I met her in real life!
I guess I've always been drawn to characters like her though, conceptually if not in reality. I never really set out with the notion that she would become as complex as she has, but then I never thought that much about it to start with; she has never seemed like a construct, I've just kind of hung on for the ride, if that makes sense...
McBadgere
Wow...Fair dues, that Possible Futures was brilliant stuff...You really did get me all sad and choked up with that one...Blimey!!... huh.gif ...

It is only 4 in the morning, but still... tongue.gif ...

Nah, that's some brilliant writing there...Loved the way it swapped from one to the other...Fantastically done...

What I thought was most brilliant is that you made me feel all that sadness despite only having met Niamh so recently...I genuinely felt sad that she was now (possibly wink.gif ) dead...

Fantastic stuff...

Oh can I also congratulate you for the use of the words "Rank Fetor" in the first story?...I can't tell you how much it impressed me... biggrin.gif ...Mind you, looking at it now, it sounds like an amazing character name... biggrin.gif ...
Colonel Mustard
Phew, that part was a powerful read indeed and I found it pretty damn moving. The wonderful descriptions in there really helped hammer home just how drastic the situation was and I loved the switches in perspective between Vilja and Niamh; that was an excellent way to frame the scene.

Also, it was set in the Shivering Isles, and that makes me happy.
PhonAntiPhon
Thank you for your feedback, it was actually very hard to write, kvright.gif especially since I am a very horrible person and only killed her off to see what it would be like - (it was unpleasant) - it's no wonder she's so unhinged if her narrator goes about doing that sort of thing to her....
(She came back again later - it was only a possible future)...

And yes, Rank Fetor would make a great name.

Thanks again smile.gif

Well I am going to spend some time reading some of the other fix on this forum, coz so far what I've read has been great. smile.gif
Grits
I think your vignette approach works very well with your character. It’s like getting glimpses of her rather than a long, drawn-out look. Plus it lets you share things that you explore like “Possible Futures.” Glad to see you posting here, Phon.

For formatting I’ve found that it helps to PM my post to myself to check spacing. My word processor’s breaks don’t always make it through to the forum.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Grits @ Jan 24 2013, 04:16 PM) *

I think your vignette approach works very well with your character. It’s like getting glimpses of her rather than a long, drawn-out look. Plus it lets you share things that you explore like “Possible Futures.” Glad to see you posting here, Phon.

For formatting I’ve found that it helps to PM my post to myself to check spacing. My word processor’s breaks don’t always make it through to the forum.

I am enjoying being here, it's giving me new new inspiration and perspectives.
And yes, a thousand times, the spacing! It is the bane of my writing!!
mALX
I thought it was really interesting the way you went back and forth between Niamh's and Vilja's POV's in this, it felt like Niamh was fading in and out of consciousness and Vilja's POV took forefront when Niamh's coudn't. Very effective write! Loved this episode!
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(mALX @ Jan 25 2013, 12:07 AM) *

I thought it was really interesting the way you went back and forth between Niamh's and Vilja's POV's in this, it felt like Niamh was fading in and out of consciousness and Vilja's POV took forefront when Niamh's coudn't. Very effective write! Loved this episode!

Thank you very much. smile.gif
mALX
QUOTE(PhonAntiPhon @ Jan 26 2013, 12:39 PM) *

QUOTE(mALX @ Jan 25 2013, 12:07 AM) *

I thought it was really interesting the way you went back and forth between Niamh's and Vilja's POV's in this, it felt like Niamh was fading in and out of consciousness and Vilja's POV took forefront when Niamh's coudn't. Very effective write! Loved this episode!

Thank you very much. smile.gif


Here's a tip you may appreciate on facing these huge length stories on this board:

A lot of the stories on this site have been ongoing for years, and coming onto the site recently it can look like an overwhelming amount of reading to get current on any of the older stories; that is why most of us with "War and Peace" length threads have written a semi-brief synopsis of the entire story so you can catch up and be current by only reading something about the length of one chapter. (A one paragraph breakdown of what you'll find in each chapter type thing so you can scan quickly the meat of the story).

Some people have archived them (like Acadian), I think Grits wrote hers on her "Postcard" thread, so did SubRosa. On my story it is halfway down page 1 of the thread. Hope that helps cut down the reading load to a more palatable size for you, lol.

Zalphon
You Sir (or Madam), have created a very gruesome story and I shall follow yours as well.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(mALX @ Jan 26 2013, 06:08 PM) *

Here's a tip you may appreciate on facing these huge length stories on this board:

Yeah, thanks for the advice. I'm just building my portfolio on here, but obviously a lot of people have loads of stuff on site already, sometimes it is a lot to get through if you are trying to catch up - (and I want to).

QUOTE(Zalphon @ Jan 26 2013, 06:13 PM) *

You Sir (or Madam), have created a very gruesome story and I shall follow yours as well.

Thank you. smile.gif
King Coin
I've often wondered what a scene like that would be like to write. Never have tried it. Powerful writing, and definitely worth exploring. Your perspective jumps were wonderful, fully exploring what each one felt. The sense of loneliness at the end was crushing. Well done!
PhonAntiPhon
Here follows a story from Skyrim, featuring Niamh as she is there. Niamh's Skyrim is a bleak and harsh place and our heroine is no less so.
The stories of her set there reflect this and as such are very much more "gritty", shall we say, and it's a little difficult to pick ones that are suitable for posting here given the site's rating. I'm hoping that this one is ok, and that you'll enjoy it.
(Slightly edited for content)

"The Pride of Tell Vos"


The bandit chief on the wrecked ship on the other side of the camp from her was dying; unfortunately it appeared as if nobody had told her that.

Niamh had been journeying north towards the shrine of Azura that she had been told lay above the city of Winterhold, where the Mages’ College was, far to the extreme north east of Skyrim when she come upon the wreck, a likely-looking source of much-needed income and resources.
The weather this far up was harsh and cold and the land reflected that, it’s scrubby bleakness punctuated with patchy snow and washed-up sea ice. The air was alive with the sounds of the ocean, and the cries of seagulls. From the rocks some way behind her came the gurgling roar of Horkers. She had been keeping a weather eye on them; although relatively placid they could be vicious if disturbed.

She had been crouched in a crevice in the rocks just across and slightly above the shipwreck for somewhere in the region of two hours now. The wreck itself lay perpendicular to her, broken in two. Waterlogged crates and sacks floated in the water around it, spilled out from it’s hold, the lower section of which was filled to just over waist level with water. In it floated the bodies of several bandits and a couple of wolves.
In the campsite between her and the ship, erected amidst a tumble of looted chests and more boxes, were more bodies. Arrows and weaponry lay scattered about the shingled ground and the squalling breeze occasionally delivered to her nostrils the smell of burning pork, where one of the bandits had fallen into his own cooking fire, shot by one of his comrades.

Niamh shifted uncomfortably, trying to find a position where she could at least stretch out her cramped limbs a little bit. After a few attempts she gave up, and with a quiet harumph settled back into her original position.
From the boat, borne on the air, came the sound of the bandit chief cursing and threatening, hurling imprecations at her, her thick Nordic accent rendered virtually unintelligable through what Niamh knew must be extreme pain.
She risked a quick peek over the rocks, the chill wind ruffling her hair, prickling the skin of her face. Peering across to the boat with her good eye she could just about see one of the other woman’s feet.
The bandit had wedged herself between some barrels and the superstructure that served as the crew quarters . Her position was such that from where Niamh was, she was unreachable by bowshot and for Niamh to shift position to where she was able to fire would mean that she herself was in range, and although the bandit was – as evinced by the spreading pool of blood that surrounded the foot that Niamh could see – clearly in extremis she had proven to be a not inconsiderable shot with a bow, and thus Niamh was forced to keep her head relatively out of sight.
Niamh was unable to simply skirt round her and come at her from the other side of the boat – (“The Pride of Tel Vos”, was stencilled in fading weather-worn black paint on it’s prow) – because the wreck lay on an open area between two sets of high rocks and she could not be sure that her adversary did not have a view to that side as well. Niamh was no tactician and so had decided that her least bothersome, albeit uncomfortable, course of action was to stay where she was and wait either for darkness, or for the bandit to die.

She looked up at the sky; the sun was westering now, she could see it through the ranks of scudding clouds. The shadows on the ground had noticeably lengthened. Again she heard the slurred voice of the bandit screaming hoarsely at her, bearing threats and questioning her parentage.
Cursing herself for the impetuosity and lack of forethought that had allowed her to end up in the situation in which she now found herself, Niamh settled back against the rock in the shelter of the crevice, and stared glumly at the mossy stones beyond her dirty feet; the rock was cold and damp against her naked skin, not unpleasant – in it’s way.

What was particularly galling was the fact that by the time she had arrived at the wreck much of the hard work had already been done for her. Evidently a pack of wolves had turned up not long before, looking for easy pickings. Discovering that they weren’t alone in this regard they had proceeded to attack the bandit gang en masse resulting in the two factions largely wiping each other out.
Upon arrival Niamh had at first only had to duck and weave through the slippery weed-strewn rocks of the shoreline, picking off the – mostly wounded – stragglers almost at her leisure. Such had been her sense of good fortune that she had dropped her guard and the bandit chief – who it turned out had secreted herself inside the wreck and had up until that moment gone unnoticed – had almost skewered her with an arrow. A scant couple of inches to the left and the Wood Elf would have been, like the bodies around her, nothing but food for the gulls and when the tide came in, the slaughterfish. As it was the arrow merely grazed her right arm.

With a yell of surprise and pain she reacted instinctively and hared up into the rocks. The bandit had been exposed on deck at that point and Niamh had managed to loose off two arrows, pivoting on one foot, the other slamming down behind her, bracing her against the rock wall as she nocked, drew, and fired almost in one movement, her lithe and sinewy body flowing like water through the well-practised moves.
Her aim unfortunately was less impressive and the first of the shots went way wide of the mark, but the second, however, hit home. There had been a shriek of pain from her adversary who, dropping her bow, fell backwards onto the deck of the ship clutching at her midriff and the shaft that protruded from it.
Niamh’s eagerness to finish the job proved to be the bandit chief’s temporary salvation as her next arrow flew wide as well. Seizing this opportunity the woman dragged herself painfully into the position wherein she had remained, growing (presumably) steadily weaker and more delirious – though no less potentially lethal, as Niamh had discovered through more than one near-miss.

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And so here she was waiting, essentially, for the other woman to die. The shouting had stopped a short while ago and now the only evidence of life on the boat was the occasional wind-born whimper of pain. Niamh took a look over the rocks again. The foot she could see had been withdrawn leaving a smear in the blood that caked the deck.
There was no sign of any other activity.

After a brief pause for consideration, Niamh pushed herself up onto her haunches and as surreptitiously as possible strapped on her quiver. Picking up her bow she proceeded in a crouching run down from her rocky hideaway and across the debris- and body-strewn camp, to the wreck itself.
Murky water sloshed in it’s lower hold, the wind whistled through the gap between the two parts of the sundered hull, blowing Niamh’s lank hair back from her face and making her eyes water.
She made her way inside, into the gloom, all smelling of brackish water and seaweed, a coastal smell tinged with blood and damp wolf pelt. Crouched silently in the cold sea water, Niamh listened intently for any sound out of the ordinary.
There was nothing.
To her right was a flight of eight or nine slatted steps heading into the upper hold. Gripping her bow tightly,she headed for these steps and crept stealthily upwards, out of the water and damp greyness.

The second deck appeared to have been more-or-less stripped bare, save for some mostly broken up crates at the far end, tumbled up against the stern of the ship where it was canted back into the chill waters. Like the level below, this deck was also relatively well lit, on account of the break in the hull. Across from her position at the steps, on the other section – the bow – of the broken ship, lay a tumble of bodies, both bandit and animal, a couple of narrow planks of splintered wood lay across the narrowest point of the gap, up against one side of the hull, leading from one part to the other.
Niamh made a mental note to go through the corpses later, in case there was anything worthwhile for the taking. Looking above her, she turned her attention to the upper deck, and the crew quarters.

This was no place for a bow.
Uncomfortable as she was with fighting face-to-face, there were times when even Niamh had to accept the fact that it might be necessary. Although she carried a blade she was certainly, and by her own admission - (although perhaps only to herself) – not exactly an expert with it and so it was that she kept it sheathed, and instead held up her hands palms outwards, fingers spread. Taking a deep breath of air she briefly closed her eyes and tensed the wiry muscles in her arms, straightening her fingers and expelling her breath as she did so.
There was a sizzling noise and the smell of ozone and when she opened her eyes once again there in her hands, cupped in each palm, was a ball of blue energy, quietly crackling.
Again she was still for a moment, her head turned up toward the opening above her, large pointed ears straining for any sound that might indicate an agressor.
There was nothing.
Taking a deep breath, she mounted the steps to the upper deck.

It was empty and silent but for the natural sounds of the coast and the creaking of the Tel Vos’ battered timbers. Nevertheless, having been a student of bitter experience on previous forays, Niamh exercised a degree of caution as she climbed through the trapdoor.
The opening was more-or-less in the centre of the crew quarters, and having climbed through the Bosmer crouched and scuttled, crab-like, to the shadowed corner of two walls, at the opposite end of the space to the door to the outside, through which streamed the harsh sunlight of the early evening.

The room was large, covering in length fully two-thirds of the main section of the broken deck and in width nearly close to the ship’s entirety, as far as Niamh could tell. Like the holds below, it too had been largely stripped bare and it’s contents, she assumed, laid out on the campsite that had grown around the vessel. It seemed as if the Tel Vos were some massive sea creature that, washed up on the beach, had been found by scavengers who had systematically butchered it, leaving it’s innards exposed around it upon the bleak, rocky shore.

One of these scavengers, she reminded herself, might still be alive.
This thought triggered her to turn her attention to the opening in the far wall. She could see nothing of any significance through it and owing to the direction of the wreck’s tilt there was no sign of blood either. Flexing her hands, the skin of her fingers prickling with sparking blue energy, Niamh crept the length of the room and along the wall to the door and peered out, blinking in the sunlight.

To her left, against the outside wall, stood a cluster of barrels. Checking about her quickly, she crept over to them and slowly peered around the side. The bandit was sitting in a pool of drying blood, her back against the barrels, her legs out straight in front of her, arms limp in her lap, bow on the deck. Her head had lolled to one side, and was resting against the wall of the crew quarters.
Niamh watched her for a full minute before making any further move. The woman was motionless save for the occasional twitch of a limb and slow rise and fall of her chest. The Wood Elf could hear the woman’s laboured, pained breathing rasping in and out of her mouth.

Satisfied that there was no immediate threat, Niamh crept around the barrels and stood up in front of her.
The bandit was a mess. The arrow had, it turned out, impacted her on the right-side, passing between her lower two ribs. Evidently it had punctured a lung, for even now bubbles of bright red blood emerged from between the woman’s lips when she breathed.
Her face, chin and throat were stained bright red, at some point she had stripped off her cuirass and the skin of her chest and her stomach were all painted in the same crimson shade. It appeared that she had attempted to remove the arrow in her delirium and had succeeded only in opening the wound, causing further bloodloss.
Niamh was impressed, it appeared to be a testament to the bandit’s will to live and refusal to give in that she was still alive at all.

What skin there was that was not blood-soaked had an unhealthy pallor; a waxy sheen, damp and sweaty. There was a smell about her also, of blood and other things, evidently she had at some point fouled herself quite seriously.
Suddenly the woman jerked, Niamh instinctively jumped backwards a step readying her hands to spark immediate electric death should that be necessary.

It proved not to be, that much was soon apparent, and Niamh extinguished the energy and lowered her arms.
The bandit had raised her head and was now looking in her direction, although it was clear that she wasn’t seeing Niamh in any real way. After a moment, and with what was obviously a huge effort of will, she spoke.

“I’ve been… waiting for you.” Her voice was breathless, but thick and clotted, the words accompanied by the passage of further blood from her mouth. Her long blonde hair was plastered to her head and sweat ran in rivulets down her face, sparkling in the evening sun.
Her chest heaved in and out, as she struggled for breath to speak.
“You will not… kill me. I will… ” Another deep, shuddering pull of air “Die when I choose.”
Her expression was a grimace of pain and hate and defiance, though her eyes were still as unfocussed and glassy as those of one of the dolls that Niamh had seen for sale in Whiterun’s Pawnbroker.

Niamh looked at her silently for a moment before speaking.
“For what it’s worth, ” she said at length, her softly lilting voice – so different from what it had once been – was quiet and low, “you’ve done well.”
The bandit coughed pitifully, more of her life’s blood frothing from between her lips. Her hands and wrists, where they rested in her lap, appeared as though they had been dipped in red paint.
Niamh continued; “But all things must end. Even the bravest of us must finish.” She looked down at the woman, chewed her lower lip for a moment as if considering an option that she must weigh up the pros and cons of.
“And we cannot always choose when that finish will be.” She said softly. “Even you.”
“Even you.”

The bandit’s head snapped up and her eyes seemed, finally, to focus as Niamh sparked the power back into her hands. The injured woman seemed about to speak again, her chest rose as she struggled to draw enough breath to make the words come.
But it was past time for further talk and whatever it was she wanted to convey was lost as Niamh opened her hands wide, spreading her fingers and releasing twin streams of flickering blue plasma, thick , coiling cables of spitting, snarling power.
The other woman jerked spasmodically, physical death and unnatural, electrified, animation competing within her as the release of energy into her body melted her eyeballs out of their sockets and sent them running down her cheeks, exploded her tongue from her mouth and curled her body and her limbs into a tight ball, a solid rictus of electrically frozen muscle and tendon and frying, melting skin.

Niamh continued until the power within her diminished and was spent, leaving her breathless and panting.
The corpse was curled in upon itself, the hair burnt off the head, the remaining leather armour burnt away, the skin and underlying tissues charred and crisped. The air stank of burnt pork and ozone.
She stared at the smouldering corpse, chewing her lip again, for a moment or two. The sun was beginning to sink below the peaks to the west, the wind was picking up and the air, already chill, was growing colder.
She looked up at the sky dubiously, there was a storm brewing.

“Even you.”

She walked away, back inside the ship, to see what had been left for her to find.

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-END-
Diamandis
Dark, Gritty and nerve shredding exciting... I'm really starting to get into this! I'm was a fan of Niamh already (I'd seen a couple of your posts on other forums) so I was thrilled when I saw you had joined us over here.

Haven't read the latest chapter yet, but I will get to it later; I just wanted to spare a few minutes to praise this amazing story smile.gif
McBadgere
If I tell you that I was about to put a forkfull of dinner into me mouth just as Niamh fried the Bandit Chief, will you promise not to laugh?... huh.gif ... biggrin.gif ...

Excellent stuff!!...Loved it all...The description of the wreck, the whole thing with the wolves, how she's had to hide from the Chief...

Brilliant stuff!!...

Really wasn't expecting the gore at the end... laugh.gif ...Well done there!!...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...
PhonAntiPhon
Thank you both of you. smile.gif
And that's very nice of you to say Eva.

And indeed McB, but don't worry I promise not to laugh, biggrin.gif
PhonAntiPhon
New - (well new to here) - story up on this thread. smile.gif Apologies for the shameless self-promotion but "The Pride of Tel Vos" is a particular favourite of mine... biggrin.gif
Colonel Mustard
That was an absolutely excellent piece; tense, gritty and with some fantastic descriptions in there.

QUOTE
It seemed as if the Tel Vos were some massive sea creature that, washed up on the beach, had been found by scavengers who had systematically butchered it, leaving it’s innards exposed around it upon the bleak, rocky shore.

I loved that imagery, and the whole 'beached leviathan' idea of that was very evocative. Absolutley excellent work indeed.
PhonAntiPhon
Very quick piece whilst I have my coffee, written on here and presented as is...

The Inn of Ill Omen was busy when Niamh arrived at it, one Chilly evening towards the end of the year, the day darkening towards a murky twilight.
There had been for many weeks now a steady stream of mercenaries and assorted ne'er-do-wells heading north to the border and Skyrim, to partake of the civil war there. The inn had become a focal point for groups of them to muster or just hang around at, drinking and eating; posturing and regaling each other with overblown stories of their prowess.

A group of them were outside now, telling lewd jokes and laughing with harsh, rough voices as they swilled back beer and tore off hunks of meat from the roasted venison haunch that lay on the dusty ground between them, glinting wetly in the fading light.

At her approach, one of them looked up and appraised her. What he saw was an Bosmer, a good foot shorter than him and slenderly built, with dark eyes and black hair tied back; heavily pierced ears and rings through her nose and lip. Dark tight-fitting armour, a shortbow, arrows and a long-bladed dagger completed her.
What she saw was a fat hairy man with tatty brown hair and dirty armour, a long sword in a faded leather scabbard at his belt, a foaming mug of ale in one pudgy hand.
He leered unpleasantly at her.

There was a moment of silence.
"'Ere." He said at length, his voice made heavy with ale. "'Ere, you're an elf. We don't like your sort here." He took a step towards Niamh, his two companions, anticipating a bit of fun to go with their meal stopped their gorging and looked on.

From the trees came the sound of birdsong.
The inn was full of noise.

She remained silent, casually watchful; one leg a little forward of the other, slightly bent at the knee.
"I told you girl." Said the mercenary again. "We don't like your sort and this," he gestured expansively at the inn, sloshing ale over the rim of his tankard, "is not the place for you."
Niamh regarded him a moment longer.
"That's a shame." She said quietly. "Because that's where I'm going."

The mercenary laughed, and turned to his mates to say something. "Hey lads, we've got a..."
He briefly saw the man at his left turn to him, reciprocating his scorn, a smile on his scarred and be-stubbled face. Then all of a sudden the man's expression was replaced by a look of intense surprise. From out of nowhere it seemed, a small knife had appeared in the side of his neck
For a second the two of them existed in a frozen tableau of bewilderment then, "Gah." Commented his friend, and fell to the ground at the merc's feet, blood seeping around the hilt of the knife.
The leader growled angrily and spun round heavily, drawing his sword as he did so.

But Niamh was no longer to be seen. In the gathering gloom he looked about him, breathing hard, sword quivering in his fist.
"Where are ye? Little umbrella seller. Come 'ere and fight me!"
He turned to his remaining comrade.
"Can you see 'er?" He whispered hoarsely.
The other man turned to him, a nocked bow in his hands. He shook his head briefly and fell over, an arrow with rather jolly bright red feathers protruding from his right temple.
He hit the ground like a boned fish, the arrow he himself had readied firing off into the dirt as he went down.

Now alone, the leading mercenary reverted to type and, spinning on his heel, made to head back into the tavern; safety in numbers to bolster his flagging bravery.
Niamh ran off of the roof above him and bending, grasped its edge, pirouetting round as she did so. She hit him squarely in the torso as he turned, spinning him around and propelling him backwards into the closed door of the inn.

The inn, up until that moment resounding to the cacophany that only twenty or thirty inebriated soldiers of fortune can make, went suddenly silent, as if at that second someone had sucked all of the air out of room and took the sound with it.
The door exploded inwards as the heavy mercenary was slammed into it. He landed on the floor on his back, his head snapping backwards and his skull connecting with the heavy floorboards with a loud crack.
For a moment his body spasmed, then he stiffened, relaxed; was still. One of his eyes had rolled up to the white, whilst the other pointed off to the left, staring as if observing something in the far distance.

Every head in the room had followed the action, each turning and swivelling as if connected to the movement taking place in front of them by invisible cords. Now, still in silence, these heads turned to the door as a slender female elf walked through it, dusting off her hands on her tight fitting armour.
She stepped over the body, and walked through the staring occupants to the bar, her booted feet silent on the floorboards.

"I'll have an ale." She said when she reached the still goggling innkeeper, her voice lilting but sounding overly loud in the silence of the common room.
"And give me a couple of apples as well."
McBadgere
*Applauds*...That was excellent!!...Espescially if you wrote it on the fly!!...

Black Hand does his Morag Tong posts like that, and I'm always left speechless at what comes out of it...I spend hours on things and wish they were half as good!!... laugh.gif ...

Apart from the spacing thing and the auto-censor bothering at least once...But otherwise, that was absolutely brilliant matey!!...

The twixting between the slight elf and the overweight merchant was laugh inducing...As was every instance of killing...I chuckled so many times... laugh.gif ...

I absolutely loved that... biggrin.gif ...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds most heartily*... biggrin.gif ...
Colonel Mustard
Damn, Niamh's a badass. Loved that little one-shot there, and it being at the Inn of Ill Omen was a nice touch.

I'm amazed you managed that in one short burst; I'm a very slow writer, most of the time.
PhonAntiPhon
Thank you.
Yes I did just do that "off the cuff" - it sometimes happens I feel a little bit inspired.

I'm interested in the auto censor though, what bits did it censor...?
Colonel Mustard
Mainly the rude ones, including a certain word used to describe a female dog. One of the admins decided it would be funny to take it a step further than simply censor it by instead having it replaced with a rather random selection of words, so Niamh gets called 'umbrella seller' at some point in that vignette.

I've got a story with a bunch of characters who are basically gangsters and writing dialogue for them that should really be rather sweary but doesn't actually include any swearing is an interesting challenge.
McBadgere
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"Where are ye? Little umbrella seller. Come 'ere and fight me!"


I tend to use the tried and tested "Insert blank character here." method...B*tch...a$s...ar$e...etc... biggrin.gif ...

As long as it's not over the top, no taking the pi$s, eh?... tongue.gif ... biggrin.gif ...
PhonAntiPhon
Ah ok. Now I understand.
I'll bear that in mind.
Inn of Ill Omen - Full Version.
Lady Saga
Hey Phon, what's new with you? I am digging the bit where Niamh wound up at the Inn of Ill Omen, especially this sod...

QUOTE(PhonAntiPhon @ Feb 17 2013, 10:24 AM) *

"'Ere." He said at length, his voice made heavy with ale. "'Ere, you're an elf. We don't like your sort here."


Such a sod! laugh.gif

And yeah, as folks have noted above, this site replaces certain "adult" words with other words. I also caught the "umbrella seller" bit and was gonna comment on it.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Lady Saga @ Feb 18 2013, 04:02 PM) *

Hey Phon, what's new with you? I am digging the bit where Niamh wound up at the Inn of Ill Omen, especially this sod...

QUOTE(PhonAntiPhon @ Feb 17 2013, 10:24 AM) *

"'Ere." He said at length, his voice made heavy with ale. "'Ere, you're an elf. We don't like your sort here."


Such a sod! laugh.gif

And yeah, as folks have noted above, this site replaces certain "adult" words with other words. I also caught the "umbrella seller" bit and was gonna comment on it.

Hi there! smile.gif
Yeah I figured a bit of all-out badassery was the order of the day...

"Umbrella seller", tchah; comedians!
ghastley
The odd thing is that the auto-censor seems to be blind to plurals, and mother of mine will become mother of mine, but whores will be left alone. (I'm not sure I could handle more than one at a time, but that's no excuse for a machine. tongue.gif )
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(ghastley @ Feb 19 2013, 09:00 PM) *

The odd thing is that the auto-censor seems to be blind to plurals, and mother of mine will become mother of mine, but whores will be left alone. (I'm not sure I could handle more than one at a time, but that's no excuse for a machine. tongue.gif )

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PhonAntiPhon
Very quick...

"
Knowledge, as gained from books, is largely outside of Niamh's frame of reference. Sure, she'll take what she can get but the actual *pursuit* of knowledge and the reading required so to do pretty much escapes her.
In the old days it was always Vilja who did that, and then summarized it for her partner in short, easily digestible, fragments.
That said, Niamh has been - for her - applying herself judiciously if irregularly to the Mages' Guilds, if only because she's curious about the inside of the university and hasn't found a way in, and also because setting light to bandits with increasingly powerful fire spells never gets boring.
(the odd charm spell on the occasional waitress, immune to her natural talents, doesn't go amiss either. <Ahem>).

So far the path to the Mages' Guild has been strewn with little favours that need doing and games that need playing, most of which have only served to shore up Niamh's belief that membership of these little guilds is for kiddies and the more puerile adults.
Bruma's little guild has so far proven to be the worst...

...It was a little after 10 of the clock in the morning when Niamh arrived, and met one Jean Frasoric in the entry hall, the not-unattractive Head of the chapter, the usual pleasantries were exchanged and the inevitable "Perhaps you can do a favour for me" conversation ensued.
To cut a long story short, our heroine found herself in conversation with one Volanaro, an oily associate who had information, he said, regarding the whereabouts of the Kat who Jean wanted Niamh to locate.
The conversation descended rapidly to the level of the playground as she found herself having to carry out an act of petty thievery for Volanaro. He seemed surprised when she returned with the manual five minutes later.
"Well ok, you meet me in the living quarters just after 10 tonight, and I will help you with your little problem..." He winked patronisingly at her and grinned. He did, she thought, need to work on his technique, since all of this last should perhaps have been directed at her face, but there you go.

This gave her some time to kill, so she headed to Olav's for a few ales, stopping on the way to practice a different kind of magic on one Edla Darkheart, a rather sour-faced woman she'd seen in Bruma from time-to-time.
She does like a challenge, does Niamh...

After 6 hours, a badly lost drinking contest to one Gromm, and a brief scuffle as he tried unsuccessfully to claim his winnings, she walked only a little unsteadily back to the guild, slipped in, and went down to the living quarters.
She hung around in the corner for a little until it was time to meet the kids, observing from the shadows as Jean went from room to room, evidently searching for what Niamh had stolen from her earlier.

At the appointed time she met Volanaro, who produced the Kat. Both of them seemed very proud of their little prank. Both of them needed to grow up.
"Oh, you can tell Jean you've found me." purred the Kitty.
(Niamh has "a bit of a thing" for Khajiits, but this one? Very much the exception...)
Still, job done.

"Ah, little lady..." whispered Volanaro greasily as she turned to leave, "...we'll be in touch with you, there are some other things we might want doing and I'm sure that you would wish this, ah, "relationship" to remain *on the quiet*..."
Niamh just stared at him, her head on one side. "Really...?" She said eventually.
Volanaro looked a little less assured of himself. "We, ah, could be your worst nightmare, you know..." He narrowed his eyes.
She thought for a moment. "No." She said. "You couldn't."

Five minutes later she awoke Jean and told her she had located the Khajiit. A recommendation was secured.
Just before leaving, she moved closer to the Mage, and whispered something else to her.
"Really?" Said Jean. "That's Most Interesting..."
She grinned as Niamh left her quarters.
It wasn't a nice grin.
"
Lady Saga
Hmm...wonder what was whispered. huh.gif I can chance a guess, but I'll leave it up to you whether or not you want to reveal this, Phon.
PhonAntiPhon
QUOTE(Lady Saga @ Mar 4 2013, 04:21 PM) *

Hmm...wonder what was whispered. huh.gif I can chance a guess, but I'll leave it up to you whether or not you want to reveal this, Phon.

Heh, I would prefer to leave it inferred wink.gif , but let's just say "Honi soit qui mal y pense"...
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