Heh ha, that's not poor writing, Vital, that is very detailed writing. You're getting into your character's story, that's all. I can show you some examples of poor writing if you'd like!
I keep going back to the Frostfall thing. Because the base mod is waaaay too harsh, imo. I figure even the worst of Skyrim's weather is just below freezing, otherwise how would bandits and guards be able to walk around so casually in it all day? So I don't feel bad turning on FF's Lite setting, and dialing those settings even easier.
Well anyway, here is the continuation of a Nord man's tale who barely, if ever, feels the cold. Last we saw, he was doing some quest for the Thieves Guild. I remember it was rather extensive, though the details have slipped my mind a bit, since I wrote this probably back in January.
Turdas, mid-morning, Sun's Dusk 13Days Passed: 88
Bjorn awoke after 11 hours of sleep, and headed to the Ragged Flagon for breakfast: salted meat, a carrot, and some Honningbrew Mead. Yuck.
He quickly found Tonilia though, the main merchant down here. Bjorn has never been wowed by shiny gems & trinkets, so he sold most of the loot he'd found from Mercer's place. Ironically, some of this loot (or all of it) was probably Thieves Guild property in the first place. Either way, Bjorn woke up that morning nearly broke, but left the Ratway with just over 1,500 gold.
Karliah and the Standing Stone were easy to find, and now that she and Brynjolf are both outside (rather than down in the noisy Ratway Cistern) everything she said can now be heard. ha ha. * I have never heard such a soft-spoken NPC before! Anyway, she explained that the cave nearby the Standing Stone is actually the Nightingale headquarters, and the place is heavily associated with the daedric goddess Nocturnal.
Just before going in the "Nightingale Hall," Bjorn turned to speak to Brynjolf, who explained "I'm just as puzzled as you are, lad."
Once inside, Karliah explained that she wanted Bjorn to don some Nightingale armor, meaning that he'd have to remove the magical Armor of the Squire he'd been wearing the entire time he's been in Riften. Well, this might be okay. This armor is just magical hide, and was beginning to stink after several days of running around Riften.
But Bjorn was also concerned about 'playing with the Gods". Although aligned with evil, he'd never had the desire to follow any of the daedra. Such things are just not what he aspires toward. But Karliah explained that Bjorn putting this armor on would be nothing more than a "business transaction", and that in the future, Bjorn would have the potential to become wealthy.
Well that's all he needs to hear.
More gold? Pass the coinpurse, please. ... He throws aside his magical hide armor, and follows Karliah and Brynjolf once again.
Bjorn felt silly wearing this armor though, like some sort of evil sissy mage. But Karliah would not speak to Bjorn any further until he donned it all. She explained that to "defeat Mercer, we must have Nocturnal at our back." Brynjolf seemed doubtful, but at this point, both he and Bjorn agreed that getting rid of Mercer Frey would only be a good thing.
After Nocturnal spoke to Karliah from the planes of the Daedra, Karliah explained that she has two new initiates to complete the 'Trinity'. Finally. Nocturnal was displeased about this, but in the end allowed the Nightingale trio to flourish. Now everybody is supposed to go to a placed called Irkngthand, a vast dwarven ruin, where they hope to stop Mercer Frey from "stealing the Eyes, and escaping from Skyrim with Nocturnal's Skeleton Key.
Finally, Brynjolf spoke to Bjorn just as the trio was about to leave the Nightingale cave, and told him that there's a chance Bjorn will become the next leader of the guild. Bjorn tried to turn this down, but Brynjolf wouldn't hear his protests.
A perpetual litterbug, Bjorn finished his business in Nightngale Hall by drinking some Nord Mead, and dropping the empty bottle right on the ground where Nocturnal spoke. Road Trip #1,043, here we come!
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Bjorn wearing some "sissy" Nightingale armorBjorn, Brynjolf, and KarlilahFinally Bjorn can't stand it. As soon as the meeting with Nocturnal is over,
he removes his Nightingale helmet! I'm not sure if he kept it, or simply dropped it on-the-spot. Probably the latter.